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Mokoki's Adventure

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    [Chapter 1]
    One morning in June, as Mokoki was geting out of bed. 2 sec. before his mother came in.

    Mother: Raise'n Shine Dear.
    Mokoki: It's 7:00am, mom, at least 5 more-
    Mother: Aren't you going to start on your quest?...today...
    Mokoki: yeah...*zzzzzzzzz*
    Mother: (Asleep all ready?, wait! the alarm clock!!)
    Mother: AHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    Mokoki: Wait's happening!?!
    *THUMP*
    Mokoki: Mom? She fainted...
    Shior: Hey, Mokoki! *Shouting from outside*
    Shior: I need to give you something! *Still Shouting*
    Mokoki: Be out there in a min.
    Shior: Here.
    *Mokoki Was Given PokeNav & PokeDex*
    Mokoki: COOL!
    Shior: By the way, why was your mom screaming?
    Mokoki: She's scared of alarm clocks for some reason...

    [Chapter 2]
    Yes, Mokoki is now on he adventure. But, what's going to happen next?

    Mokoki: *Sleeping on a nearby rock*
    Trainer: *Walking and triping over Mokoki*
    Mokoki: ...What happened...? *sleepy with some pain*
    Trainer: You made me trip!
    Mokoki: I thought you just triped over me?
    Mokoki & Trainer: BLAH! BLAH! BLAH! BLAH! BLAH! BLAH! BLAH! BLAH!
    Trainer: Aggg! Thats it! Get ready to battle!!
    Mokoki: But, I don't have any pokemon yet.
    Trainer: What? A Trainer without pokemon?
    Trainer: Then here, take a few of these then.
    *Mokoki was given 6 pokeballs*
    Trainer: Oh, My name is Tyson.
    Mokoki: My is Mokoki.
    Tyson: Well hello Mokoki.
    Mokoki: Aren't you still mad at me?
    Tyson: nah, just a small cut.
    Tyson: Hey, I hear something in that tall grass over there!
    Mokoki: Pokeball Go!!
    *CLANG*
    Gardener: Hey you pesty kids get out of here! *Throws some Plants*
    Tyson: Is that a PokeNav?
    Mokoki: Yes it is and it says were allready in Dashville?
    Tyson: *Look Round* We are in Dashville already?!

    Will Be Update Later...
     
    Meh... more scripts. Must be really popular here... Still - this doesn't give me much to rate, just plot... Well, at best - this is quite confusing. You have spelling and grammatical mistakes, and this is way too short. There's no description, but that's to be expected from a script fic. Meh... can't really say anything encouraging because I can't rate script fics very well... *sighs*

    ~ MCD
     
    Yeah, I'm not thrilled or hooked, which should probably happen within the 1st coupld of chapters. This script thing is confusing.... #_#
     
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