my first comic (if ur a fan of kyorge u dont want to see this)

EVA02

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    long title hey XD
    [PokeCommunity.com] my first comic (if ur a fan of kyorge u dont want to see this)
    heres the comic i call it kyorges problem
     
    What's with the Kyogre bashing? That was really uncalled for, despite the warning in the thread title.
     
    srry i just needed two pokemon and the ruby and sap legendarys came into mind
     
    interesting,and strange,and...hmm..@_@
     
    Not...good...o.o;;
    I dislike the Kyogre bashing, even though people are warned.
    The background was rushed, and looks like a two-year-old did it.
    Sorry to sound harsh, but it's hard to find anything to like about it.
     
    O.o hmm..not fond of it..there's no story and the bg is rushed -the grass doesn't meet groudon's feet ^^;
     
    Figured I'd post on how to improve it...

    Firstly, the background.
    Do not rush.
    It doesn't matter how much of a hurry you're in, it'll always be there tomorrow (unless the world blows up O.O but we won't go into that). So, take a bit more time, make things more accurate. I can tell you're doing this in MS Paint, but just take the time to shade things, and not have just blue sky and green grass kinda thing.

    Secondly, make sure you have the pokemon positioned correctly. Like DF said, the Groudon's feet aren't touching the ground.
    And also, don't leave excess background parts on the sprites after you delete the background. That also makes it seem very rushed. x.x

    Thirdly, text bubbles.
    You have to admit, it looks kind of dumb just having text float there. =\
    Get the line tool, 1px, black, hold **** and draw some straight lines to form a text bubble/box of some sort, then fill it with white.

    Finally, the story line/plot/what the pokemon did/whatever you want to call it.
    Honestly, the plot was stupid, and not funny (in my opinion, anyway). Next time, try to be a bit more creative. ;)


    Sorry for sounding so harsh before, but it was the truth, even if put in a somewhat mean way. ._.;
     
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    well now thats my thing so i suck at nearlly every thing on pc
     
    EVA02 said:
    well now thats my thing so i suck at nearlly every thing on pc
    Click to expand...

    You don't suck at everything on PC...not that I know what you're referring to, but you don't. -_-
    No one's saying you suck, but you can improve.
    You have to accept critisism, along with comments. I don't mean critisism like, "OMFG dat suckd so much u suk!!11!", because that's just plain idiotic. I mean critisism like this, "I didn't like it, the plot was sucky.", that actually tells you what they didn't like about it, so you can make to improve it next time.
    Sometimes people tell you how to improve it, though, and you should really take their advice. If your posting it on a public forum, you can't expect to have all praise.
    For example, if someone submitted, say, a blank 200x200 blue square, and people kept saying things like, "omg that was so great", the person is obviously not going to improve (bad example, I know).

    Anyway, yeah...please, just try and take critisism into account, along with praise..
     
    Kyrogue bashing? Honestly, if making fun of a pokemon really offends you, then you should probably check in to your local psychiatrist.

    Eva02, I assume by how childish the comic looks that you weren't really trying to do your best, so um... I award you effort points! XD
     
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    *giggles* I like Kyogre! Can't you bash, like, Delibird or something? (I just think that the "Present" attack is kinda pointless :P)
     
    Weell, Yami, Claire, and Ty said it for me, there is room for improvement and plenty of it. ^^; But I think if you did what Yami said and extended the plot... it might - yeah. XD

    ~Kylie
     
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