My first win

[TeaTiMe]

Ok I've used this new team for awhile and it hadn't been doing so well. However today my luck changed.
My Team
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Golem Stealth rocker :P
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Glaceon Fake Tears/ Support
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Pelipper Tank
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Raichu Choice Specs

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Gastrodon Staller
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Leafeon Sword Dancer

Ok first off this was a UU ladder round now to the battle
The Fight
Blue is me
Red is my enemy
Grey is Neutral or just info
Green is commentary
Rules: Ladder Match, Sleep Clause, Freeze Clause, OHKO Clause, Evasion Clause, Species Clause, Strict Damage Clause
TeaTarMe sent out Golem (lvl 100 Golem ?).
ross8 sent out Sceptile (lvl 100 Sceptile ?).
Sceptile used Leaf Storm.
It's super effective!
A critical hit!
Golem lost 100% of its health.
TeaTarMe's Golem fainted.
Sceptile's special attack was harshly lowered.
---Ok so not a good start I didn't get stealth rock up and I'm down one pokemon
TeaTarMe switched in Glaceon (lvl 100 Glaceon ?).
ross8 switched in Umbreon (lvl 100 Umbreon ?).
Glaceon used Ice Beam.
Umbreon lost 34% of its health.
Umbreon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Umbreon restored 6% of its health.
---So he switches out of Sceptile's Sp.A lower and then takes the brunt of what I thought would
Kill Sceptile... oh well
Umbreon used Substitute.
Umbreon lost 25% of its health.
Umbreon made a substitute!
Glaceon used Hidden Power.
It's super effective!
A critical hit!
The substitute took damage for Umbreon!
Umbreon's substitute faded!
Umbreon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Umbreon restored 6% of its health.
---Ok so not a smart move on his side, I have hidden power fighting (Nice trick up my sleeve)
he still takes 25%... just not from me.
Umbreon used Protect.
Umbreon protected itself!
Glaceon used Hidden Power.
Umbreon protected itself!
Umbreon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Umbreon restored 6% of its health.
---In retrospect I probably could have been better with my prediction, but I'm a sucker for trying to kill things :P
TeaTarMe switched in Gastrodon (lvl 100 Gastrodon ?).
ross8 switched in Mesprit (lvl 100 Mesprit).
---I was hoping to outlast Umbreon and kill it, unfortunately I walked into a pokemon I can't hurt :(
Mesprit used Ice Beam.
Gastrodon lost 19% of its health.
Gastrodon used Toxic.
Mesprit was badly poisoned!
Mesprit is hurt by poison!
Mesprit lost 6% of its health.
Gastrodon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Gastrodon restored 6% of its health.
---Hey I poisoned his pokemon, bloody brill that move.
TeaTarMe switched in Raichu (lvl 100 Raichu ?).
Mesprit used Psychic.
Raichu lost 50% of its health.
Mesprit's leftovers restored its health a little!
Mesprit restored 6% of its health.
Mesprit is hurt by poison!
Mesprit lost 12% of its health.
---My poison is effective but I take a huge hit on my most powerful pokemon
Raichu used Thunderbolt.
A critical hit!
Mesprit lost 88% of its health.
ross8's Mesprit fainted.
---Ok I think I can handle the 50% loss if I get 88% from it.
ross8 switched in Sceptile (lvl 100 Sceptile ?).
TeaTarMe switched in Glaceon (lvl 100 Glaceon ?).
Sceptile used Quick Attack.
A critical hit!
Glaceon lost 14% of its health.
Glaceon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Glaceon restored 6% of its health.
---Score is 5-5 as of now, and Sceptile is ripe for the pickin'
Sceptile used Substitute.
Sceptile lost 25% of its health.
Sceptile made a substitute!
Glaceon used Ice Beam.
It's super effective!
The substitute took damage for Sceptile!
Sceptile's substitute faded!
Glaceon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Glaceon restored 6% of its health.
---I should have seen the second sub coming. oh well.
Sceptile used Substitute.
Sceptile lost 25% of its health.
Sceptile made a substitute!
Glaceon used Ice Beam.
It's super effective!
The substitute took damage for Sceptile!
Sceptile's substitute faded!
Glaceon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Glaceon restored 2% of its health.
---No this isn't a copy the jerk used sub 2x in one bloody go
Sceptile used Substitute.
Sceptile lost 25% of its health.
Sceptile made a substitute!
Glaceon used Ice Beam.
It's super effective!
The substitute took damage for Sceptile!
Sceptile's substitute faded!
---And a third time this man is really going to sub himself to death
Sceptile used Endeavor.
Glaceon lost 78% of its health.
Glaceon used Ice Beam.
It's super effective!
Sceptile lost 25% of its health.
ross8's Sceptile fainted.
Glaceon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Glaceon restored 6% of its health.
---Waiting proved to be the risky but right thing to do here and I took home the gold 5-4
ross8 switched in Absol (lvl 100 Absol ?).
TeaTarMe switched in Raichu (lvl 100 Raichu ?).
Absol used Sucker Punch.
But it failed!
--- ^epic
ross8 switched in Umbreon (lvl 100 Umbreon ?).
Raichu used Focus Blast.
Raichu's attack missed!
Umbreon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Umbreon restored 6% of its health.
---First miss ever with this new team... and I have to say it aggravated me
Raichu used Focus Blast.
It's super effective!
Umbreon lost 64% of its health.
Umbreon used Substitute.
But it failed!
Umbreon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Umbreon restored 6% of its health.
---Just a note to ross8, to use a move that take 25% hp you need 25% hp... at least 25% actually
ross8 switched in Steelix (lvl 100 Steelix ?).
Raichu used Focus Blast.
It's super effective!
Steelix lost 100% of its health.
ross8's Steelix fainted.
---Ok in this turn my Raichu performs greatly truely showing how awesome of an idea that was (Choice specs)
This actually played right into my hands :D
ross8 switched in Moltres (lvl 100 Moltres).
Moltres is exerting its pressure!
TeaTarMe switched in Pelipper (lvl 100 Pelipper ?).
Moltres used Overheat.
It's not very effective...
Pelipper lost 77% of its health.
Moltres's special attack was harshly lowered.
Pelipper's leftovers restored its health a little!
Pelipper restored 6% of its health.
---My water type quivers at the sight of your fire legendary... oh wait no, yeah, no, you're dead
ross8 switched in Absol (lvl 100 Absol ?).
Pelipper used Surf.
Absol lost 62% of its health.
Pelipper's leftovers restored its health a little!
Pelipper restored 6% of its health.
---Not bad on his part, you know switching out moltres I mean really best idea he's had yet.
Absol used Night Slash.
Pelipper lost 35% of its health.
TeaTarMe's Pelipper fainted.
Absol lost 10% of its health.
---This part always makes me sad, I've grown attached to my paper tank
TeaTarMe switched in Gastrodon (lvl 100 Gastrodon ?).
Absol used Superpower.
Gastrodon lost 43% of its health.
Absol's attack was lowered.
Absol's defence was lowered.
Absol lost 10% of its health.
Gastrodon used Earthquake.
Absol lost 18% of its health.
ross8's Absol fainted.
Gastrodon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Gastrodon restored 6% of its health.
---And the brill thing here is his choice move actually ends up killing him... I love this game.
ross8 switched in Umbreon (lvl 100 Umbreon ?).
TeaTarMe switched in Glaceon (lvl 100 Glaceon ?).
Umbreon used Substitute.
But it failed!
^epic
Umbreon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Umbreon restored 6% of its health.
Glaceon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Glaceon restored 6% of its health.
---The classic Umbreon/Glaceon chase begins again
Umbreon used Protect.
Umbreon protected itself!
Glaceon used Hidden Power.
Umbreon protected itself!
Umbreon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Umbreon restored 6% of its health.
Glaceon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Glaceon restored 6% of its health.
---
ross8 switched in Moltres (lvl 100 Moltres).
Moltres is exerting its pressure!
Glaceon used Hidden Power.
It's not very effective...
Moltres lost 16% of its health.
Glaceon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Glaceon restored 6% of its health.
---Another one of his good choices, although I was less impressed due to the fact it was made by
the same pokemon
TeaTarMe switched in Gastrodon (lvl 100 Gastrodon ?).
Moltres used Overheat.
It's not very effective...
Gastrodon lost 44% of its health.
Moltres's special attack was harshly lowered.
Gastrodon's leftovers restored its health a little!
Gastrodon restored 6% of its health.
---Why a fire type move could ever do 44% to a water ground I'll never know
Moltres used Overheat.
It's not very effective...
Gastrodon lost 13% of its health.
TeaTarMe's Gastrodon fainted.
Moltres's special attack was harshly lowered.
---Ouch another loss putting us at 2-2 neck and neck
TeaTarMe switched in Raichu (lvl 100 Raichu ?).
Raichu used Thunderbolt.
It's super effective!
Moltres lost 84% of its health.
ross8's Moltres fainted.
---compair the last two turns... all red, revenge killer comes out... all blue, brilliant
ross8 switched in Umbreon (lvl 100 Umbreon ?).
Raichu used Thunderbolt.
Umbreon lost 20% of its health.
ross8's Umbreon fainted.
TeaTarMe wins!
ross8: gg
TeaTarMe: gg
All in all my opponent had a great team, he made a few prediction errors (but that's what I'm made for)
and we were neck and neck the whole time.
But I like to gloat and after 4 loses in a row I believe I have the right to say...

HaHa I win you lose... :P

 

[Jake♫]

I seriously couldn't even be bothered to read this. It is all just top stuck together, and it needs A LOT more spacing (Between turns, commentary...). That, and colors aren't as good as they used to be. If you need to use them, just highlight the Pokemon's name. The commentary was also just lacking in general. I'd suggest looking at some of the more popular logs around here (Vance's [.'s], Pokedra's, Mine [Definitely not mine XD]).

 

[Lalapizzame]

Yeah, like Jake said, you could use some spacing right about now. Also, I would suggest editing out the useless things such as "(lvl 100 Golem ?)". ;x

The log was ok for a first log, everyone makes some mistakes the first time, just keep making some more and you'll improve.

 

[luke]

Why would you leave a Golem in on Sceptile? :[ After reading that, I couldn't be bothered with the rest of the log.

 

[Pokedra]

As mentioned before you need spacing, plus I'm not a fan of those colours. Try something different.

Your commentary was lacking, you basically summarized what happened. Elaborate on why you did something and what you were thinking at the time. It takes a bit of effort but the reader will find it much more enjoyable.

You want to get rid of those (Lv 100 Raichu ? ). Also a score check separate from your commentary would help. Two lines before/after the commentary showing how much health the Pokemon have can help as well. It's not necessary, however.

To be brutally honest, the battle was sub-par, you made a lot of mistakes that your opponent could've taken advantage of. Look, I've been a little mean. The log isn't horrible, everyone has to start somewhere(My first log was about the same). Just follow some of the advice given and I'm sure your next log will rock.

Maybe take a look at these examples of pretty decent logs.
Team Ass Vs Aurafire
Possession: Aquilae vs. Magmortified

 

[GoingPokemonCrazy]

Well, First of all congratulations, but seriously I couldnt be bothered reading all of it.....
And I seriousy can't be bothered writing one either....

 

[~*!*~Tatsujin Gosuto~*!*~]

I think for your set up you should put the Pokemon's picture there


:t354:TG

 

[luke]

Don't revive threads over a month old. Thank you.