My Johto Dream!! continuing series

[PkmnAdict]

Part one: Introductions.

Today is the day, Oh yeah my name is Emma this story is about me and My Johto Dream; I leave home to start my Dream.
Being raised in New Bark Town meant that through my life I have seen Trainers start their journeys, It makes me green with envy. Pulling on My shoes and grabbing my gear I head out, On the path of a dream, with my Dad Standing in my way.

"You better have cleaned your room, or you'll be sorry!" Ignoring his possible death threat, I walk out the door, running to my Destiny.

"Good, your here" Prof.Elm said warmly." We only have one pokemon left, I'm affraid." I stand there stund.
"One left, which one is it??"I ask, Oh no I'm panicking!!!
"You'll have to wait to find that one out."

What is the last starter?? wait to find out.
Next time: Part two- Please no!!
To be Continued..

 

[Neutrino]

It was a bit too short to be a first chapter, much less a prlogue. There wasn't much to suggest any sort of plot, so I can't say "it's gonna turn out into a real thriller!" since ~I have nothing much to go on. There was capital letters at radnom interviles, like:

Pulling on My shoes and grabbing my gear I head out, On the path of a dream, with my Dad Standing in my way.

It should be:

Pulling on my shoes, I grabbed my gear and went out; On the path of my dream, of which my dad stood in the way.

Or something like that.

As it was too short really to give anything about a plot, all I feel there is to say is keep writing, but hinder the advice and sustain it throughout.

 

[Astinus]

oO;

This does not meet the standards of PFF&P. Spell-check should have been used ("stund"? o_O), a read-over would have done wonders, a beta reader should be employed, a glance at the rules would do wonders.

So yeah, closed on that basis.

Pulling on my shoes, I grabbed my gear and went out; On the path of my dream, of which my dad stood in the way.

Oh, semi-colon, why are you so abused? T^T *gives semi-colon pudding*