My Nerdy Poem

[Zirkle38]

In class we were writing poems, and this is one that I wrote,

Pokémon
I can see the rain pouring outside my window,
It pounds out the sound of my Nintendo,
I can almost taste the PokeBlocks I feed my Pokemon,
My fingers are pricked by my spiky Jolteon.

I decided to do it on my senses. And Pokemon (:

And I'm bored, so I'm going to add more Poems,

Goodbye, Quagsire
With a face so simple and round,
It's no wonder you're so oblivious.
Your types are Water and Ground,
The Electric type finds you mysterious.
Now, my little blue friend,
We can no longer be a team,
I'm fully aware our adventures need to end,
I hope you'll think I was just a dream.

The rhythm isn't so great, but I like it (:

Deceiving Space
Everything looks fine
And space seems so unchanging
I can feel Earth spin

But then! A sun flare
A meteor crashes down
The stars are burning

I submitted this poem (well not these words per se; I can't remember how it goes, exactly) in school and it's being published inna book, so, because of the very slim chance that you've read it and think I'm plagiarizing, I made it (:

 

[TJgamer]

I believe the second one (Goodbye, Quagsire) is my favorite. Great work!
The first one (Pokémon) contains rather awkwardly used words. Especially at the end.
The last one (Deceiving Space) is good, but it ends a little abruptly.

 

[darkpokeball]

I like it, but as TJgamer said, the Decieving Space one ends a bit short. I think it should be longer.
Plus, you said you did this in class. What did your teacher say when you read her the "nerdy poem?"