My poetry ~hope you like~

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    ~untitled~
    I know you doubt me
    I sometimes doubte me too
    It may seem like i don't care
    But i don't care about anyone as much as i care about you.

    ~i know its quite short but sometimes the short stuff is the best, please comment or make suggestions~
     
    It may be short, but it tells plenty.
    I kind of like short poems. They can be conveniently read, yet they can still touch one's heart.
     
    it's short, but very emotional. i don't have much to say, except there's an "e" at the end of "doubt" in the second line. i also think you should make "as much as i care about you" a new line. other than that, this is a great poem.
     
    ~somebody to love~
    To hold me
    To love me
    want me
    just find me
    somebody..
    somebody to love

    ~another short on, but i actually like this quite abit ^^ comment!~

    ~Foolish~
    you make me so mad
    so flammable
    your bi-polar emotions
    and your foolish assumptions
    i have nothing to do with you
    neither do i want to be near you too
    ~i was seemingly "flamed off" atm i still am, i'll cool down, but this basically shows my emotions~
     
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    Again, good work. Though I still like your first one best.
     
    Great work! Your poems are very original which is what I like from Poets. And another great thign keep up the good work since it's nice short and sharp not many Poke-Poets these days LOL
     
    And another great thing, keep up the good work since it's nice, short, and sharp. Not many Poke-Poets these days LOL
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    I'm in complete agreement.
     
    ~Your Love~
    What am i to you?
    I thought our love grew.
    How am I supposed to live?
    When it is I you cannot forgive.
    I need you right now,
    But to ask you,
    I do not know how.
    Hunny I need you so much,
    I need to feel your soft touch.
    Please come back,
    Without you my world is Black.
    I need you more than you'll ever know
    But i'll keep staring out the window.
    For when you come walking up to my door.
     
    It has an unusual structure.
    However, it words are heart piercing. I felt good reading this.
     
    ~Untitled~
    No more Pain,
    No more sorrow.
    Sleep the Night away,
    Until tommorow.

    ~i actually really like this one, it has really no meaning to me, i just wrote it down in my notebook one day and thought it sound pretty good, but if you like you could put your OWN meaning to it. i'm sure you'll find something good :)~
     
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