~My Poetry~

hmm....okay now ive posted on your poem lil' sis! LOL! that's a nice poem...i mean, it kind of reminded me of someone...heh, nevermind...good one! and keep it up!
 
thanks.. I im happy your the one who come here!!!!I mean you and sister in law...
 
ummmmm no....
My next poem i've done..but I just have to profread it then post it.
 
Wow you are really getting good. Better than my poems.
 
code zerro the deluge said:
Wow you are really getting good. Better than my poems.
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im not sure..the one you wrote about love..I really like it..its so sweet..^^
 
♥ When You Came Into My Life ♥

When you cane into my life
Everything around me was the same
But when your around you made it change

When you came into my life
You were my very best friend
At that time I did not know why you were different
Because at that time you were just my friend

When you came into my life
You were always there for me
When I was happy
And when I was in pain....

When you came into my life
I was never bored because you were there
You always kept me company when I was alone

When you came into my life
Everyday I liked you more
More that it past the loving you as a brother
And I became happy, I dont know why
It was a strange feeling, but I liked it..

When you came into my life
We became happy..
I loved it..
And im sure you did to...

When you came into my life
I was happy to see you smile at me
Im glad to know that after all this time
You still smiled at me happily

When you came into my life
And time passed by quickly
As time passed by I did not notice..
That we've become even closer..to each other..

When you came into my life
I was happy to finally be with you..
So together we'll be for a while...
And hopping our love will last forever........



This I did for my pair...code zerro the deluge..
Sorry if theres spelling errors^^
 
*claps proudly* another one of your good works! this time...im really wondering...
how do you get the emotions so...flowy and...well....lovely?

anyways...good job. hey! im the first one to comment! waddya know? ^___^
 
phantom_of_death said:
*claps proudly* another one of your good works! this time...im really wondering...
how do you get the emotions so...flowy and...well....lovely?

anyways...good job. hey! im the first one to comment! waddya know? ^___^
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umm thanks, umm you know I have no idea how I get it..I guess I just start writing and I dont even realize what I write..but at the end..I read it and its really nice..I guess I just write what I feel....
 
*smiles*
This is one of my favorites of yours.
I just LOVE it!
I love everything about it.

Keep up da good work, pinky! XD
 
thanx pink-tiger I love it.
 
hehehe..thanks..I have more..but im not surw when i'll post them..
 
That was really good! I am very impressed and will probably wind up thinking about it a lot today.
 
I like your poems ^^; I'm not really a type for poems but I still think those ones are really good :D
 
thanks people..and welcome lateforwork, and devastation...
 
pink-tiger said:
thanks people..and welcome lateforwork, and devastation...
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~ Best Friend ~

You who's always there by myside
You who I talk and share my secrets with
You and I who are like siters
You, you my best friend...

The person who I call everyday
The one I turn to when I need help
The one who plays with me when im bored
The person you are is my best friend

My partner for everything I do
My company when I make a sleepover
My partner, my sister..your my best friend

Although you may not be my sister
I love you just like one
Your the one I talk to when im down
I just want to say something to you my friend
Im happy to have you as a friend
Your the best friend i've ever had
Thank you for sticking by my side...

Thanks for being my siter
Thanks for watching over me
Thanks for caring for me as well
Thanks for being my best friend...

For you i'll do anything
For you I will soar
For you my friend i'll do anything
For youits all worth it..

The future looks bright for us
The present as well
The love of friendship so srtong
The meaning must be, we can go though anything

You and I go far
Our friendship shall last forever
For I dont think we shall let go
We will forever hold on to our friendship...
Since after all we are best friends...

I hope thers no misspelling or grammer things..
 
it like it pink. it is great.
 
thanks!!^^ ur the first one..yey!!!
 
i really like your work. i just took the time to read all of your poetry. it was all very good. i like your style very much. your most recent one is the only one i will comment on though.

there were a few spelling errors. hehe. you seem to have uber trouble with that. one complaint i have is your word choice. it all seems to flow. but with your word choice i think you could make a stronger impact. using larger and most complexe words to fill your space would make your poems overall quality much better.

but as i said. your poetry is amazing.​
 
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