~My Poetry~

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okay? Thanks for telling me..
I know about the Proofreading..Midori I need you to start checking them again..
 
Their good.But the first was sad.But the second nice sister.
 
Umm thaks brother.I really have to get Midori to check them im not super good with spelling or grammer!><
 
Your poems are alright, I liked the one in your first post.
 
Umm you mean the first she ever posted in here?Umm yeah that one was good as well..
 
Umm thank you.Im almost done with my 3 other ones.But i'll only put one of them.^^
I made this poem....................

.::I wonder why::.

I wonder why
My life is the way it is?
And why I have a big smile when inside I know I'm sad?
I wonder why I reflect my life threw the dusty mirror?...

I wonder why
I keep all the bad memories close and good ones away?
Could it be that I wish to be sad inside my body?
I truly wonder why....

I wonder why
After all this time that has passed, I feel much more sad today than what I did before?
And today I find myself walking in the rain when I feel like tears will fall down my face..
And I think back if I didn't do it before when I had everything, why do I do it now?
Now when nothing has changed?

I wonder why
I have people around me who care for me, but I push them away?
Why do I push them away is what I ask myself every time I see them...

I wonder why
I feel sad but at the same time happy?
Could it be cause I'm happy because this was all a dream?
And that I'm sad cause one thing was truly a fact?

I wonder why....
Is everything I've been thinking of.
But now I know that everything I wonder is for a reason.
I'm sad because of things I could have done to improve my life..But I just let them slip away
But I'm happy because this was all a dream that reflected my problems....

I wonder why
I took so long to figure this out?
I guess the good thing is that at least I realized it at some point.
 
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I like your last one. Unlike many I've read, it isn't exactly happy, but an interesting feeling of mystery and perhaps sadness. Well done. 0_0
 
Thanks sister midori and dark-tiger
Well my next im not sure I have so many.
 
There's not much rhythm in it and a definite pattern but its still very good. ^_^ Good Job.
 
Well poems dont always have to rhyme.You really should know that, a lot of people wont stop telling me that.^^
 
your poems, grammer problems, or not....they are very god
 
pink-tiger said:
Well poems dont always have to rhyme.You really should know that, a lot of people wont stop telling me that.^^
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I'm sorry alot of people tell you that but there's a difference between RHYTHM and RHYME. Oh and I DO know that poems don't have to rhyme.

RYHTHM- [noun] sound pattern created by stressed and unstressed syllables ; a regular beat

RHYME- [noun] the repetition of sound in two or more phrases
 
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