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    I started this story some time ago on my friends forum... I wil copy all chapters, one after another here, before I start to work on it again...

    Chapter I

    We start our adventure in the Kanto region.... Our hero, Bryant, had to move to the region of Torocko.... This region was newly discovered, and his mother, Crystal, being an expert on new Pokémon, elected to move from their pleasant little town called Pallet Town..... This set back Bryant, and his friends' journey...
    After being gone for 4 years, he had matured so greatly, and his mother allowed him to move back to their old house in Pallet Town, where he met up with his old friends Chris, John, and Kevin..... "Dude, glad to see you.... We waited for you man," were Chris's first words....
    "Glad to see all of you too," replied Bryant. His voice had changed so much since he left to Torocko at the age of 11.... So had his hair, which used to be in a short military style cut. Now was long, and no longer curly. He had dyed it black fading to blue tips, and had it down preventing anyone from seeing his left eye: however, his right eye was still visible.
    Kevin had not changed that much, he had grown about six inches, and his voice had changed very little, john had not altered as much either....
    Chris, on the other hand, he used to have an afro, but now his hair was is braids, and he no longer had glasses, as they have been replaced contacts....
    "So, how was it?" asked John. "Yeah," Kevin added excitedly, "Did you see any new Pokémon?"
    "Yeah assface, tell us."
    Bryant knew that voice all to well, it was a dark, evil hateful, voice..... Gary....
    "Must you be a jerk to me still? I have never done anything to you in my life, and no, I did not see any new Pokémon.... Although, my mother captured a few, and she gets to name them after she studies them more...."
    "****in' sweet!" exclaimed Chris, "Are you gonna get any?"
    "I dun---"
    Bryant's Pokégear rang, "Hello, glad to hear your back," it was Professor Oak. "Glad to be back," replied Bryant. "I need all of you to come to the lab please," Oak said importantly. "On our way," Bryant replied confidently.​
     
    This is too short, and I also suggest not centering this.

    And I don't know what Bryant's buds look like. D: That's a problem. And I also don't suggest posting without a title to the story.

    Sorry for the horrid review. But, I'm sure you didn't want my best. -pokes the Rayquaza Tribe- I'm feeling nice today.

    Also, there's no emotion in this. Work on that.

    -Silver
     
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