Pichu Powers

Cyndaquil201

I'm ten and proud
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    Say one thing about the name and I'll throw a Wailord at you.
    Anyways, believe me, the actual fanfic is better than the name. I thought up the name when I was seven. And the original plot. Now I've got a whole new plot, but no better title.
    Oh, I'm revising this, but the revised version isn't done yet. So I decided to just post this unrevised one. I'll finish the revised version by next Thursday, hopefully.

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    Prologue
    Rain pattered on the windows of houses that stood near a forest. One house had a light in it's window, but soon the light flickered off, for it was nighttime, and few people were awake.
    In the forest, some small Pokemon could be seen scurrying around, searching for food, or maybe bedding.
    Only one was searching for something different.
    A Pikachu ran through the forest, trying to get back to her nest as quickly as possible. Why, no one knew, except for herself.
    Arriving at a small burrow under a tree, the Pikachu ran in, and immediately started searching for whatever she was looking for. She suddenly stopped, because it had heard a crunching noise, and felt something beneath it's paw. Bending down, the Pikachu blinked a few times before she could clearly see what was there.
    Eggshells.
    The Pikachu suddenly saw what was on the floor of the burrow; eggshells. All around the Pikachu were eggshells. Her eyes welled up with tears, and she ran out of the burrow.
    She never noticed the egg that was lying in a corner.
    The egg shook a little, and a small crack appeared in the side. It grew bigger, then the egg split in two. A small Pokemon climbed out. It tried to open it's eyes, and after a few seconds, managed two. It looked around. Why isn't there anyone else here? it's eyes seemed to say.
    The Pokemon called out. It knew no words, but no matter if a Pokemon or a human heard it, it seemed to say something. Why?
    "Pichuuu..."

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    The revised version will have how the eggs got broken, more description, and will basically be better. The one paragraph that mentions the houses turned into five paragraphs in the revised version already.
     
    Being an Uber fan of the Pichu Brothers, AWESOME!

    It's about time somebody else wrote a fanfic based on Pichu. I like the suspense so far. Not too little, not too much, but just about right for a prologue. I can't wait for the final product!

    Oh, and I think the title's a rip-off of Pika Power...

    *puts on hardhat & curls into fetal position* Don't hurt me!!!
     
    dqle said:
    Being an Uber fan of the Pichu Brothers, AWESOME!

    It's about time somebody else wrote a fanfic based on Pichu. I like the suspense so far. Not too little, not too much, but just about right for a prologue. I can't wait for the final product!

    Oh, and I think the title's a rip-off of Pika Power...

    *puts on hardhat & curls into fetal position* Don't hurt me!!!
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    It's about time somebody else wrote a fanfic based on Pichu? You mean you haven't seen anyone else that's written a fanfic about Pichu? I'm surprised. Pichu is a good Pokemon to star in fanfics.
    For some reason, I know exactly the right amount of suspence for prologues. Don't ask me how. I've written a few prologues, (the stories never got further then that) and almost everyone said the same thing.
    Oh, yes, the title might be a rip-off of Pika Power, but I've never heard of Pika Power. o.o Plus, I was seven when I made the title, like I said, so blame my younger self. And be glad that I switched star Pokemon. (The star used to be a Pikachu, but when I looked at the plot and stuff later, I didn't think that it fit)

    Just a quick note to everyone: The revised version's at my school, so I can only work on it on schooldays. I might finish it on Tuesday, but I don't know.
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    What the heck. =copies the revised prologue down from memory= Expect it done by tomorrow. =DDD
     
    It's much better if you don't rush it and try to get it done by Sunday/Tuesday/whenever. We want to see your best performance, and not the fastest performance. No point in ruining a "rare" Pichu story just because you want to post it 3 days faster, right?

    Take your time, read the sticky, and do your very best as you ignore all aspects of time.
     
    frostweaver said:
    It's much better if you don't rush it and try to get it done by Sunday/Tuesday/whenever. We want to see your best performance, and not the fastest performance. No point in ruining a "rare" Pichu story just because you want to post it 3 days faster, right?

    Take your time, read the sticky, and do your very best as you ignore all aspects of time.
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    I'm not trying to rush. I'm just copying my revised version from memory, and it's half done. So, what I was saying, was that I should be done by Sunday. I'm not trying to be done by Sunday.
    And I've read all the stickies. I'm actually re-reading one in a different window to check if my fanfic has any mistakes or something.
     
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