Poem I Wrote: Alone

[pastelspectre]

I feel so alone...
Afraid...
Like I'm prone...
To everything...

I am small...everything around me...seems so big...
Like a broken ridge, I fall so unexpectedely...

I feel so alone...
Afraid...
So prone...to everything...I am small...I feel like a broken ridge...I fall so unexpectedly...
With all my heart...I fall. Alone.

 

[TJgamer]

That is one strange, yet interesting poem.
I bit short I must say. But just keep practicing and you'll do great!
After reading this, I can tell. Practice a bit, and you'll be making a masterpiece.

 

[ChrisTom]

Hmm... not bad, but I wish it had a bit more of a body to it. I would've liked to read a bit more.

 

[Eliminator Jr.]

I see where you're coming from, but you need to personalise it a bit more. Well, in my opinion anyway. As in "I'm alone, afraid, prone to everything" isn't really telling us much - most people feel like that when they're alone. I don't know what you can do but try including something extra that makes people think. It's a good start though, and I'm not great at poetry so I can't really speak, good on you for posting this.

 

[pastelspectre]

Thank you, yes I know it's not good. I have another version of it, just with a few changed words though. I can copy it from my notebook.