Pokémon - Nightshade Blossom (Handrawn)

Rouenne

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    • Seen Jul 4, 2009
    Well, since the other topic faded awy I decided to repost it here. Especially since is kinda hard to let others know about it on deviantart. Well you may not remember it but it's a doujinshi made of the origina series and the main cast. Well, may not be the best but is worth a view. Check it out =)


    Chapter 1:

    Warning

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    Title
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    Chapter Title
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    Chapter End

    Chapter 2

    In Progress...
     
    You're a great artist, but this doesn't really connect with the reader. In the first 8-9 pages, I didn't have a clue what was going on. And the rest seemed really long for a conversation. You show emotions well, though. And I can understand the characters. All I think you should do is wrap up ideas and dialogue more quickly to make room for some needed action.
     
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