Pokémon: Path of the Ranger

Jake

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    --Other--
    1- The first couple episodes are a bore.
    2- Jackie Walker from the Manaphy movie will not be appearing.
    3- I will try my best to get out at least one episode out every 7 days.
    4- No one can join the comic.
    --Episodes--​
    Season 1- The New Trainee!
    Episode 001
    Episode 002
    Episode 003
    Episode 004
    Episode 005
    Episode 006
    Episode 007
    Episode 008
    Episode 009
    Episode 010
    Episode 011
    Episode 012
    Episode 013
    Episode 014
    Episode 015
    Episode 016
    Episode 017
    Episode 018
    Episode 019
    Season 2- Sprucing Up the Power
    Episode 020
    Episode 021
    Episode 022

    --Characters--​

    --Credit--​
    Fangking Omega for Goldernrod City and the Johto Jet Boat.
    Gridiron for the houses in Goldenrod City.
    Ragey for the palletes I used on the characters.
    My friend 'JackAttack' from FC for loving Rangers so much, and never letting me down when it comes to spirit.
    Dragonpike, LightShock, and Rebirth47, for helping me with ideas for the comic.
    Dragonpike again, for major idea contributing. He's basically my #1 man when I need ideas.
    4Kids and Yu-Gi-Oh GX for completely letting me rip off them by making a school on a island with 3 sets of students.
    Coronis for his 1st, 2nd, and some of the 3rd generation Pokémon sprites.
    Kyledove for the side and back sprites for the first 25 Pokémon.
    [Angel of Twilight:: for using his Speech bubble tails and nice criticism.
    Matt Silver for giving some great criticism.
    And Nintendo and Game Freak for creating Pokémon. (Everyone says it.)
    --Updates--​
    8-25- 1:42 A.M. EA- Made thread.
    8-25- 1:57 A.M. EA- Added character bios.
    8-25- 2:29 A.M. EA- Editted the text bubbles for future use. Thanks Matt Silver.
    8-25- 1:50 A.M. EA- Added --Other-- section.
    8-25- 3:32 A.M. EA- Added Episode 4-6.
    8-25- 6:58 P.M. EA- Added Episode 7-9.
    8-26- 1:09 A.M. EA- Added Episode 10-13.
    9-1- 5:05 P.M. EA- Added Episode 14-19 and sadly had to remove the bio section.
    9-9- 7:19 P.M. EA- Added Episode 20-21.
    9-10- 11:02 P.M. EA- Added Episode 22.
     
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    Not bad at all, but not 10/10 (Which is expected, because nobody's perfect).

    The first thing that hits me is the Speech Bubbles. The red text next to the red circles looks cluttered and pushed together too much, so get rid of the circles on the edge of the speech bubbles.

    On Comic 1, I got a little confused. What Pokemon was that delivering the letter to the red-headed guy, and why did it just magically appear there?

    The text used on speech bubbles is oddly blurry and a little big IMO, what kind of text do you use (Times Roman, Ariel etc?). Also, why is the text all red?

    Spriting. Don't mix styles (RS and FRLG), I think you may have done it with your main character, but I'm not sure. Also, why don't any of your characters walk (It's recommended that they walk, instead of just stand in every scene)?

    Pokemon. The overworld sprites are a little ugly IMO, and just look weird (Sorry, can't elaborate too much).

    Mapping. Seems alright, but the shaded buildings look weird (Why not add like lines like the Goldenrod ones, instead of just the shading.

    Plot. Like it, it seems fairly original, but it is kinda rushed (As in, in one comic, he leaves, arrives the next one, and is doing something completely different by No 3) - maybe it's just me, who likes to explain things out a little.

    With all it's little things that bug me, this comic is alright in the end. Keep at it, though, because you don't have to listen to me. :)
     
    The main character is an edit of a Paul/Shinji sprite I made.
    [PokeCommunity.com] Pokémon: Path of the Ranger

    The Pokemon was a Zubat and it flew down, the next frame was supposed to show it in the air flying away, but the text bubble blocked it.
    I'm using Pokemon RS text.
    The Venasaur was made from Kyledove, and I editted the Houndoom.
    The walking I couldn't really do much on, they appeared in each room in #3 cause I didn't have much time to finish.
    Thanks for the crit though, don't feel like I shouldn't listen. Cause it will help. :D
     
    Jake said:
    The main character is an edit of a Paul/Shinji sprite I made.
    The Pokemon was a Zubat and it flew down, the next frame was supposed to show it in the air flying away, but the text bubble blocked it.
    I'm using Pokemon RS text.
    The Venasaur was made from Kyledove, and I editted the Houndoom.
    The walking I couldn't really do much on, they appeared in each room in #3 cause I didn't have much time to finish.
    Thanks for the crit though, don't feel like I shouldn't listen. Cause it will help. :D
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    1. OK.

    2. I thought it looked like Zubat,

    3. Again, I thought the text looked familar.

    4. Kyledove? I thought it was the other guy, who's name I do not remember...

    5. Just try to do it in the future

    6. I said that you shouldn't listen/read because a lot of people don't like people poking holes in every little thing. All good.

    Keep at it.
     
    Coronis, Matt?

    Yeah, Kyledove continued the Coronis Project. Somewhat.

    Well, it definitely seems a bit rushed, and the RS font is a little too big for the bubble, I think. You block a lot of important things with you speech bubble, so you need to work on that. But it's a pretty slick comic.

    It be gnarly.
     
    I added 3 new episodes, and 3 more bios. Check it out on the first post.
     
    Added episode 7-9 to the list and editted some bio info.
     
    Hey, great comic so far! It was a little bit confusing , but overall, pretty sweet. Can't wait to read more!
     
    Oh, mediocre comic imo 8|. I'll judge more appropriately once you create some more.__________________________:ver cool:
     
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    I agree with Lickilicky. It's an awesome comic, but like Matt said, it has it's fault's. Everything does.
     
    @Dior: Alright, I hope you'll like what you see.
    @Lickilicky and Bijou: Thanks for the comments.
    I added 3 more episodes, 10-13. Check it out on the first post.
     
    Hiya Jake! I guess I'll be sticking around to see your comics here ;). Good work :D
     
    Rolcol said:
    Hiya Jake! I guess I'll be sticking around to see your comics here ;). Good work :D
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    Hey Roly. :D
    I hope you like the comic as much as TWIY. :D Stick around. I mean it.
     
    I don't want to offend, but Jake, have you made multiple accounts?

    Doesn't anyone think it's wierd that 2 people join today, and post in his comic as the first post ever? If it was one person, I would believe it, but if it's two? Come on. I'm referring to Lickilicky and Bijou. If you are doing this Jake, I won't report you or anything... (If you want more viewers, you can post on SPPF or something...)

    On Topic: You're comic is going good, and you are flying through them fast (My guess is that you a lot earlier, then posted?). Storyline is solid, so keep it up.

    Later!
     
    About them, they're my friends from another forum. Dior = Mark
    . Lickilicky = Rick. Bijou = Roger. Rolcol = Rolando.
    Ontopic: Thanks, actually I just make 3 a day then post them.
     
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    Hey Jake, good comic. I just don't understand the last part, might be explaint the next comic. One thing I don't like is the huge bubble, half the time you can't tell whos talking.
     
    It's getting better, slowly but surely. Keep it up jake, just make it more exciting.
     
    Sorry for the late updates, been busy with school preparations. I added Episode 14-19, and had to remove the characters due to space.
    EDIT: And I had to remake Episode 17 and 18 3 times. The original script was for Gold and Silver to save them. The second was for Enkai to learn his true strength and Shellos evolve.
     
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