[Pokémon] Pokémon! The Rising of an Aura Guardian!

[Shaymin's Gaurdian]

"Sir Aaron had rescued the entire kingdom by utilizing the power of aura with that of the Tree of beginning; the forces that threaten Cameran palace became peaceful and understanding… Queen Rin knew that forever more the kingdom would gone happily ever after" Adam just stares straight up at his father Bradley who had just read him a story. His bright blue eyes grew wide as he asked "Wow, and we're related to Sir Aaron?!" His father responded with a sly smile "Well, he is believed to be one of our ancestors"

… Eight years later

Adam was watching the conclusion of the Elite Cup a battle of the Pokémon league's greatest trainers. It was the Sinnoh champion Cynthia against Frontier Brain Palmer. "Smash'em with Hammer Arm Rhyperior" commanded Palmer. Rhyperior charged towards Garchomp who manage to dodge it. Garchomp clenched onto Rhyperior with a blazing Fire Fang. But Rhyperior didn't seem damaged. "Let's show them your Dragon Pulse" yelled Cynthia. But, Garchomp defended itself with Protect. "Finish this with Rock Wrecker" cried Palmer. "Enough is enough Giga impact" said Cynthia. As soon as the two titans were about to clash Adam's TV turned off. "What the" yelled Adam. "Honey, don't you want to join us downstairs after all it is your going away party" said his mother Delilah.

Her Delcatty hopped onto his bed she purred as Adam petted her gently. Tomorrow would not only mark Adam's fifteen birthday but the day he would also start his journey on becoming A Pokémon trainer. "Don' you think I should catch some shut out that way we're not late for Professor Rowan tomorrow" he told him mom who simply replied 'Alright… good luck getting her off" referring to her Delcatty who had fallen asleep. As soon as she left he turned back on the TV he was too late they had moved on to how Crime was on the rise in sinnoh. Adam laid in his bed thinking about what Pokémon he would choose. He imagined him commanding A Turtwig to strike Palmer's Rhyperior with A Razor Leaf than He thought about Chimchar hitting Cynthia's Garchomp dead on with flame wheel… and finally Piplup taking both the champs down with Whirlpool.

Adam soon fell asleep suddenly his eyes opened giving off a radiant light. Meanwhile in Vulcan's Canyon a Lucario was jumping cliff to cliff trying to get away from whatever was chasing her. She held on carefully to her egg. Helicopters printed with a capital G on the side appeared in the horizon. Uniformed criminals we're tossing strange looking Pokéballs at fleeing Pokémon. Lairons alongside Arons tried to escape but it was no use. The same went for Torkoals who tried avoiding them by using iron defense and Sanshrews who tried burrowing underground. Even Steelix's weren't strong enough.

Suddenly they sent out a swarm of Zubats who tried confusing Lucario with Supersonic. But her loyal friend of hers Flygon blasted them with a Dragonbreath. One of the Commanders Jupiter sent out his Toxicroak who struck Lucario with Poison Jab knocking her off her balance. She lost hold of her egg, she was soon captured. Flygon dive down to retrieve the egg but he couldn't catch it in time. The egg splash into the river and strolled down the powerful current...

Aaron came back to his senses the extraordinary light that had shine in his eyes had faded back to normal. He quickly woke up to discover that it was still night time and Delcatty laid across his lap. He petted her causing her to purr. "What a crazy dream" he thought to himself but for some reason it felt to real as if he we're actually there. Little did he know that what he just witness was not figment of his imagination but reality and his destiny all wrapped in one

To Be Continued!?

 

[Krystallyn]

Fair warning, I'm not going to be showing you every little mistake you make, though I like to help better any storyline faults.

I give you this warning because I shall be reading the story. It's good, and I can't wait for more!!

 

[Giratina ♀]

First off, don't try and change the font. It's no fun, even if Arial is technically a font allowed in the rules.

"Sir Aaron had rescued the entire kingdom by utilizing the power of Aura (should be capitalized) with that of the Tree of Beginning (should be capitalized, because it's a proper noun - also, what relevance did the Tree of Beginning have with Aaron's Aura? Elaborate on this - it's a story about Sir Aaron!); the forces that threatened (past tense) Cameran Palace (again, proper nouns are capitalized) became peaceful and understanding. (A period would do here.) Queen Rin knew that forever more the kingdom would gone ('Would gone'? What does that mean?) happily ever after. (Period at the end, even with dialogue.)" Adam just stared (past tense) straight up at his father Bradley, (comma because the rest of the sentence is extra information) who had just read him a story.

(New paragraph when someone speaks, even if the dialogue isn't the first part of the sentence.) His bright blue eyes grew wide as he asked "Wow, and we're related to Sir Aaron?!"

(New paragraph when someone speaks.) His father responded with a sly smile "Well, he is believed to be one of our ancestors. (period at the end)"

Okay.

So I think you really could have expanded on this conversation - the chapter as a whole must be a lot longer anyway, and having a little kid pester his father for information and watching that father play along is a perfectly amusing way to hold a scene.

… Eight years later

If you had expanded the chapter a little as I suggested, that could have been a fine prologue.

Adam was watching the conclusion of the Elite Cup, (comma for extra information about the Elite Cup) a battle of the Pokémon League's (organization name, must be capitalized) greatest trainers. It was the Sinnoh champion Cynthia against Frontier Brain Palmer.

"Smash'em with Hammer Arm, (comma because it's a command and Rhyperior's name is extra info) Rhyperior! (punctuation mark at the end of a sentence - if this wasn't a question or exclamation mark, it would have to be a comma)" commanded Palmer. Rhyperior charged towards Garchomp who managed (past tense) to dodge it. (Explain this battle more! It's supposed to be intense - don't just say 'Rhyperior charged towards Garchomp', say 'Rhyperior bellowed in fury and stampeded towards Garchop with one arm curled into a rock-hard fist'). Garchomp clenched onto Rhyperior with a blazing Fire Fang. But Rhyperior didn't seem damaged.

(New paragraph when someone speaks.) "Let's show them your Dragon Pulse, (punctuation mark after a sentence)" yelled Cynthia. But Garchomp (no comma because there is no pause if you say this in regular speech) defended itself with Protect.

"Finish this with Rock Wrecker!" cried Palmer.

"Enough is enough... Giga Impact!" (you're missing lots of puctuation marks here) said Cynthia. As soon as the two titans were about to clash Adam's TV turned off.

"What the..." yelled Adam. (Honestly, I would not have put 'yelled Adam' there. Instead, I would have made this paragraph and the one below it a complex sentence, like so:

"What the..." began Adam, staring at his TV. A second later he knew what had happened, and craned his neck around to face the concerned but amused face of his mother.

"Honey," she said, "don't you want to join us downstairs? It is your going-away party, after all."
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"Honey, don't you want to join us downstairs? After all, it is your going away party," said his mother Delilah. (Missing punctuation. Also, where exactly did Delilah come from?)

Her Delcatty hopped onto his bed; (two completely different thoughts should be connected by a semicolon or a new sentence.) she purred as Adam petted her gently. Tomorrow would not only mark Adam's fifteenth birthday but the day he would also start his journey on becoming a (you don't capitalize 'A' when it's alone) Pokémon trainer.

"Don' you think I should catch some shut out (I think you mean 'shut-eye'? Also, there should be a question mark at the end of this.) That way we're not late for Professor Rowan tomorrow," he told his (not 'him') mom.
(There should be a new sentence between Adam's speech and Delilah's; unless it's a one-word response, you never put two pieces of dialogue from different characters on the same line.)
She simply replied 'Alright… good luck getting her off." She was referring to her Delcatty, who had fallen asleep curled up on Adam's bed (more detail is key!). As soon as she left, he turned back on the TV.
(New paragraph for new subject.)
He was too late; they had moved on to how crime (since 'crime' is a proper noun, it's lowercase) was on the rise in Sinnoh (whereas the name of the region is a proper noun...). Adam laid in his bed thinking about what Pokémon he would choose. He imagined him commanding a Turtwig to strike Palmer's Rhyperior with a Razor Leaf. Then (not 'than') he thought about Chimchar hitting Cynthia's Garchomp dead on with Flame Wheel (attacks are capitalized), (no need for an ellipsis) and finally Piplup taking both the champs down with Whirlpool.

Adam soon fell asleep.

Suddenly (new sentences and new paragraphs are useful for the passage of time) his eyes opened giving off a radiant light. (His eyes are glowing? O_o)

Meanwhile, in Vulcan's Canyon, (the location is extra info, and switching the narrative to a different scene also induces a new paragraph) a Lucario was jumping cliff to cliff trying to get away from whatever was chasing her. She held on carefully to her egg (what does the Egg look like? Come to think of it, what does the Lucario look like?). Helicopters printed with a capital G on the side appeared in the horizon. Uniformed criminals were ('Uniformed criminals we are tossing strange-looking Pokéballs...' doesn't quite fit.) tossing strange looking Pokéballs at fleeing Pokémon. Lairons alongside Arons tried to escape but it was no use. The same went for Torkoals who tried avoiding them by using Iron Defense (attacks are capitalized) and Sanshrews who tried burrowing underground. Even Steelixes or Steelix (There's nothing belonging to the Steelix, so the apostrophe-S wasn't correct.) weren't strong enough.

Suddenly the uniformed officers (we need to know who sent them out, since the previous paragraph focused on the fleeing Pokémon) sent out a swarm of Zubats who tried confusing Lucario with Supersonic. But her loyal friend (saying 'her loyal friend of hers' is pretty redundant) Flygon blasted them with a Dragonbreath. One of the Commanders, Jupiter, (commas for extra information) sent out his Toxicroak (Sorry, but that's Saturn. Jupiter has purple hair and a Skuntank.) who struck Lucario with Poison Jab knocking her off her balance. She lost hold of her egg and was soon captured. (That sentence... well, made no sense.) Flygon dove down to retrieve the egg but he couldn't catch it in time. The egg splashed into the river and thrashed down the powerful current...

Strolled down a powerful current? What?

Anyhow, this scene was... odd. You had a lot of grammar errors and some tense changes, which really don't look nice. You also must learn to pace yourself and your writing; just charging through everything, without putting aside some time for description first, is a pretty unpleasant thing to read.

Aaron (ahem... Adam?) came back to his senses; the extraordinary light that had shone in his eyes had faded back to normal. (So there's a light in his eyes anyway? Just say 'the light had gone') He quickly woke up to discover that it was still night time and Delcatty laid across his lap. He petted her causing her to purr. "What a crazy dream," he thought to himself. For (new sentence would have made it easier to read) some reason it felt to real as if he was ('as if he we are actually there' doesn't make sense... learn the difference between 'were' and 'we're'! Also, 'were' is present-tense and 'was' is past tense.) actually there. (A lot of dreams tend to do that...) Little did he know that what he just witness was not figment of his imagination but reality and his destiny all wrapped in one (This just... made no sense. Find some different wording.)

To Be Continued!?
(Don't put that. Please.)

Well!

You're writing on Word, which is a good thing, and you're using the accent E, which is a better thing. Your plot seems to be steady, if a little bland and undescribed - which is one of your problems. You need to explain stuff more! Make the scene feel like it could actually happen, with all the unnecessary comments of a character's dialogue! Tell us what the Pokémon and the characters look like!

That brings me to another point: check your info before you post it. If I recall correctly, you called Saturn 'Jupiter'... that can be fixed by a simple Bulbapedia check, you know.

Also, you need to brush up on grammar skills. There's plenty of online places where you can learn the simple ways to refine your writing, including capitalization, commas, and working with tenses (some of your big problems). However, until you do that, your story is a jumbled mess and pretty hard to follow.

Good luck.