Pokemon:Allian

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    Plot:
    Arc a kid from hoenn has just moved into to the region allian. This region is known for its pirate's on the sea's that surround it so most people that live there never go out to sea without a strong pokmeon. Arc has moved to Com town. Com town is the smallest town in Allian. Though is known for its advnaced technology. The houses all have robots that help the people that live in them all are the same model but have different personality's. Prof. Obi's lab is located in com town so any kid that lives there gets a free lisence.

    The inhabitants of Com town:

    Arc:
    The new kid.

    Signomi:
    Most people know her as sig

    Matt:
    Arc's rival... despite they never met before he sucks at math

    The hobo:
    a hobo thats convinced that mice eat dogs and cat's eat buildings

    Prof. Obi:
    theres something wrong with this guy he only has fire starters and sets fire to things to much

    matt's uncle:
    an ecentric old man that refuses to beleive that life has a meaning

    The robot's:
    robots that help the inhabitants of com town


    this comic is PG-13 for mild mature themes and maybe some swearing.


    Comics:

    https://img.photobucket.com/albums/v647/Blaze_Boy/Aliiancomicone.png
    https://img.photobucket.com/albums/v647/Blaze_Boy/alliancomic2.png
    https://img.photobucket.com/albums/v647/Blaze_Boy/AllianComicanimated.gif

    Bio's:
    Arc:
    The new kid in town.He's pretty nervous about making new friends in Com town. When he first saw matt he took a instant disliking but as matt starts to accept him as a friend. Arc thought that com town would be alright but when he met the hobo life became exciting for this kid. He has a thing with computers, so he's hoping he can get a part time job as a computer technician at the professer's lab. Although he's also hoped to get into pokemon. He trained as a ninja when he was younger but nobody really knows this about him except his mother. He will usually keep himself secluded in his room fiddling with some computer equipment or listening to music. He plays the guitair sometimes its a skill passed down in his family after his dad left with a band leaving him and his mother alone. Arc didn't really mind this because he always had a passion for music.

    Signomi:
    Commonly known by others as 'Sig'. A seemingly humble young female who normally spends her time training her pokemon with high ease. The only female in the village. She's an energetic girl, full of spirit, though there are times when her self-esteem lowers without her knowing. She's also Matt's only friend, from the fact that she can withstand his bitter, cold-hearted arrogance, they've known each other since they were little. As a young girl, she always wanted to have her own pokemon, though her parents were against it, Matt tried to catch her a Rattata once, for her birthday, but he never managed to catch one for her, which didn't seem to bother her, knowing he tried his best. Afterwards she got irritated by her parents not letting her experience having a Pokemon, so she ran away...and Matt somehow followed her...

    Matt:
    Matt's always wanted to be a pokemon trainer, his father's out on a pokemon journey and Matt's eger to beat him. He currently lives with his uncle in a very small town, his only friend there is Signomi(the only other child bar him) At first he takes a disliking to Arc, but later he starts to accept him as a friend. He's alot smarter than he lets on, he seems to think acting stupid will get him the sympathy vote.

    Credit:

    To anybody who ripped sprites
    To Vaati for making the matt sprites
    To signomi for creating the Signomi sprites
    and anybody that did anything else that I have used.

    Fan Art:

    none so far


    DO NOT ASK TO BE IN THIS COMIC
     
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    Poor Matt...the village idiot XD

    Nice so far Blaze ^^ That poor Hobbo XD; Ofcourse, you made meh sound so smart...-drool- Well, I shall be waiting for the next part d00d ;x
     
    matt's uncles is insane.

    matt is stupid but clever

    the hobo hasn't appeared yet.

    The robots that help the people of com town appear next episode.

    that should sort out the question marks :P
     
    Well its not to great. You must have black line between your panels, makes it easier to read, some grammar mistakes, some of the jokes are cliched, a journey comic, if it is, then thats bad and if its supposed to be funny its just not funny. But you did use word bubbles :D. Anyways your score is 5/10. Just an average score.
     
    Err... the only thing that kills all this work is the comic and the Bios, here let me tell you:

    First: The bios is very short, o.O

    Second: The speech bubbles looks a bit scary, and it might be useful that you separate the pannels a bit. sorry but it haves a 5/10
     
    Goatman56 said:
    Well its not to great. You must have black line between your panels, makes it easier to read, some grammar mistakes, some of the jokes are cliched, a journey comic, if it is, then thats bad and if its supposed to be funny its just not funny. But you did use word bubbles :D. Anyways your score is 5/10. Just an average score.
    who actually said it was a journey comic. The next comic has teh black lines. I know the first wasn't funny but I was planning on having the hobo shouting that O.o but the sprites werent ready


    Red-kun: the bio's aren't actually bio's they are small summaries of the characters If they were bio's I would have made them alot more complex and longer.
     
    Well as long as you improve, then thats fine. I'll grade this again when you have more episodes.
     
    Well try making the blue line better so that it can look like a stream. --:

    and wats with only you and siggeh all of a sudden --;
     
    If you look closely MT, it's not just him and I alone, Matt/Vaati is also there. Plus, that Blue stream does get a little annoying after a while when you keep looking at the panels, plus the Escalator-type bridge makes the town look a little too petite and awkward. Well in any case, I'm awaiting the next part.
     
    Sorry Blazin Espio, I thought it was some kind of weird blue line >.>, I'll try to pay more attention next time.
     
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