this is great! i did find one thing not translated near the beginning, though. (assuming this is for all starters) if you nickname your starter, the next line of text is in japanese for me.
EDIT: here's a list of extra things i found. (I'm being picky =D)
1. if you try leaving New Bark Town without talking to your mom first, the lady says, "Wait, *name*!" then the next couple of text boxes are japanese.
2. I'm not sure if this is what it really says in SS, but your mom says "Pokemon Gear, or Pokegear." but no "for short" at the end.
3. When you leave New Bark Town, Elm walks out and gives you his number. instead of saying something like "*name* received Elm's number!", it's in japanese.
4. When the old man is talking about the Poke Mart, he says "and other usefull items" instead of useful. Also, when you leave Cherrygrove, there should be a comma after the word "Oh" in his first text box.
5. a few of your rival's text boxes are in japanese, one in the battle.
6. Kotone/Hikibi says "...Hmm" instead of something like "...Hmm."
7. Kotone/Hikibi... pretty much just check the grammar for when they teach you how to catch a pokemon.