[Pokémon] Pokemon Olmas! (R.I.)

[Oddball20007]

This is a story I am writing in the form of a script. To make it easier for some awesome person to possibly animate it. (I would love you forever!)
In case your wondering what R.I. stands for, its Readers input. Meaning if you want something to happen there's a chance that I will read what you wrote and have that happen.

S1E1 (Incomplete, waiting for R.I.)

Spoiler:

Narrator: Pokemon! Creatures of divine beauty and capable of mass destruction. Our story begins on a Spring morning in the quaint seaside village known as Mavra town, inside the room of a twelve year old boy...

Professor Evergreen: [Sweetly] Jake! Its time for Breakfast! You don't want to sleep through this afternoon! I mean what kind of kid sleeps through the day of the choosing!
Jakes eyes flutter open. The boy yawns and climbs out of bed, throwing the blanket onto the floor.
Jake: [Sarcastically] Yes 'professor'.
Scene cuts to Jake fully dressed, and walking into kitchen and sitting at table.
Professor Evergreen: [Normally] Alex stopped by while you were off in dreamland. She told me to tell you that if your late she'll gladly take your Pokemon as well.
Jake: [Serious] Come on, we both know you wouldn't let her.
Professor Evergreen [Toying] Just because I'm your aunt doesn't mean that I'm going to treat you any different than any other kid. If your late, then I can't guarantee that there's going to be any pokemon left for you.
Jake and Professor Evergreen both laugh
Jake: [Inquisitively] So what pokemon are trainers getting this year? Last year it was all bug types wasn't it?
Professor Evergreen: [Merrily] Your just going to have to wait and see. Although I will give you a hint: None of them are native to Olmas.
Suddenly there was a knock on the door.
Professor Evergreen: [Sweetly] Jake will you get that dear?
Jake walks over to the door and opens it. Kyle and Alex enter.
Kyle: [Excited] Hey Jake! I just saw a Skarmory fly over the town! How cool! Do you think it was wild?
Alex: [Annoyed] I've been trying to tell you! Skarmory aren't native to Olmas! It obviously belongs to a trainer who was flying over.
Jake: [Amused] Professor Evergreen said that the Pokemon we're going to get today aren't going to be native to Olmas either... I would so rock a Skarmory.
Everyone laughs.
Professor Evergreen: [Anxious] Why don't you guys go run down to my lab and see if my aides have finished setting up the stage. I don't want anything to be off, I hear the Olmas league champion himself is going to be here!
Trio heads out laughing about the skarmory joke. Professor looks at the clock and the hands move to noon.
Professor Evergreen: [To a crowd] Hello people of Olmas! Today is a grand day for the choosing isn't it? The sun is shining the Starly are chirping, but why don't I just bring out the participants?
The crowd roars.
Professor Evergreen: [Continuing speech] Today! We have six participants! Jake! From Mavra town! Kyle! From Mavra town! Alex! Also from Mavra town! Simmeon! From Elden city! Amy! From Shadewood village!, and last but not least Samantha from Kirden City! Each one will be selecting a pokemon that has been graciously been donated by other professors. The Pokemon ARE: The fire type Charmander! The Water type Totodile! The Grass type Treeko! The water type Oshawot! The Grass type Snivy! and the Fire type Fennekin!
The six kids (Aged between 10-15) all looked at the pokeballs on the stand infront of them. They all were thinking of which one they wanted.
Professor Evergreen: [Finishing speech] Now lets begin! Jake! Please pick a pokemon!

 

[Nolafus]

I'm afraid I'm going to have to lock this for a couple reasons.

The first reason is that only script fics that aren't all dialogue are allowed. The script you have here is insanely dialogue heavy. I'm afraid the little slots that aren't dialogue isn't going to cut it.

The second reason is that you aren't allowed to post incomplete works.

S1E1 (Incomplete, waiting for R.I.)

And it looks like this is incomplete.

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