[Pokémon] pokemon race for the legendary pokemon chapter three

[Zy-Reji-Mario-Zylon]

Chapter 3 "Guys! We should get going if we want to make it to the tournament. I heard if we win we become one of the L.P.P's!" Olli said
"L. P what?" I asked.
"L.P.P stands for Legendary Pokémon Protectors," Olli answered.
"Sorry, still haven't heard of them," I said.

Oliver looked at me with surprise.
"What?" I asked
"Well, it's just that the L.P.P's have been here for a while, but still, everyone knows about them," Olli said.

"Wait a second! Legendary Pokémon like Dialga?!" Cameron asked.
"Yep. All of the legendary Pokémon. Even Dialga," Olli said.
"Well what are we doing standing here for? Let's GO!" Cameron yelled.
Cameron grabbed Olli's and my arm and dragged us half way to Thorn Town.


"I get it, Cameron, but I have two feet of my own," I said.
Cameron let go of Olli's and my arm.
Five minutes later we arrived at Thorn Town.
"Okay, Olli, where do we sign up?" I asked.

"We need to go to the battle stadium," Olli answered.
We walked around Thorn Town, asking people where the Battle Stadium was, and ten minutes later we found it and walked inside.
A tall buffed man looked at us and smiled.


"Let me guess. You kids want to be in the L.P.P?" The man asked.
"Y... yes sir!" Olli stuttered.
"Olli? What's wrong?" I asked.
"That is Jerry, the leader of the L.P.P," Oliver whispered.

"Well it looks like someone has been doing their home work. Since you three got here I'll tell you what you have to do. Only four groups showed up, so you will battle twice, okay? When you beat two groups, you will battle someone in the L.P.P. Then if you win, you three will be in the L.P.P," The man said.

"Alright! Let's battle then!" I yelled.
"Ha ha, I like your spirit," Jerry said.
Camron, Olli and I ran on the battle stage, and saw three kids.
The one in the middle had a black hat, a white shirt, and black shorts.
The one on the right had a blue bandana, a black jacket, and dark blue shorts.
The last one on the left had a red shirt, and blue shorts.


"Are you just gonna stand there, or are you gonna battle us?" The kid in the middle asked.
I looked at Cameron, then at Olli, and they both nodded.

Stay tuned for Chapter 4: Triple trouble

thank Olli97 for helping me with grammar, so the grammar mistakes that you find are mostly his doing.
All the rest is made by me.

 

[bobandbill]

This is the four time that you have been told that chapters of the same story should go in the same thread - so instad of merging it for you like three of the previous times I'll close and let you post in the right place yourself (this thread of yours, or https://www.pokecommunity.com/showthread.php?t=254873).

I'll also mention that with this:

thank Olli97 for helping me with grammar, so the grammar mistakes that you find are mostly his doing.

That frankly sounds like you're saying any mistakes of yours he didn't fix/fix properly is mostly his fault...which doesn't really sound right (because you wrote the story in the first place) nor really nice. =/ There's still the odd case of punctuation/capitalisation after dialogue being incorrect in instances (e.g. '...in the L.P.P," The man said.' should be '...in the L.P.P," the man said.'), spacing between dialogue isn't quite right yet either (line gap between each line of dialogue spoken by someone else, and you don't need a new paragraph for every sentence) and some other things already mentioned with previous chapters (e.g. stuff about description) could still be applied...

But yeah - closed. Please post this in the thread that already exists, not in a new thread. If we keep merging it for you it just seems that you're not understanding or noticing us say that, so hence I'd like you to do it yourself, is all.