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*snickers* Your fault. Though, partly mine too, as I could have decided to cosplay Sabrina and then, I would have to bow before anyone who cosplays Cynthia, if that happened. ^^

I hope so. >> Emotional torture is torture, too.
Anyway. Review time!
Title--> yay, very creative. *mood sinks*
After reading the very first line, no, seven words, I'm already: "ERIKA?!?!? OMGOMGOMG... ... okay, at least not Will. *g*"
What made it worse was that Brock made it plain and clear that he preferred the flirting game to being with Erika - he found it too difficult being with only one woman. When he told her that, Erika promptly broke up with him.
Okay. *cuts out certain characters of her future fic* First time you did destroy a plot idea of mine. XD
This perhaps made her more on edge, not ready to handle any other problems at hand.
Bad, very bad.
Think about it, Sabrina, would you even kill Cynthia, after all she's done to you?"
Very interesting, indeed very interesting. Even after all the torture, Sabrina doesn't want to kill her. *takes notes*
Not to mention that Sabrina doesn't have the chance to kill Cynthia. *innocent smile*
You have a pure heart, not like that awful queen."
Sabrina and Cynthia are so similar, yet so different.
She felt that he would hide his true feelings just to make her feel better, as he loved her that much.
Aw, aw, aw. Would he go into prison for her to if possible? Very likely indeed. ^^
"So, Sabrina, I hear you're a killer!"
>.< That....brat.
Will screamed at Liza, who had teleported into their midst. "If you go and tattle on her, I'll kill you personally!"
Whoah, whoah, wait a second, Will actually threatening to kill somebody? Did the world just turn 180° or something?
Sabrina would never kill anyone… no, she's not strong enough to do that.
*eyebrow twitches* That...that....BRAT!
"The last thing Sabrina needs is someone picking on her, and that's precisely what you're doing! Go back to Hoenn and pick on someone your own size!"
Like, her brother? When did he appear the last time? Poor guy, he gets shafted. XD
"Excuse me, but I think the runner-up of the Pokémon League championship has a little more sway than a man who can't even get to the quarterfinals!" Liza responded.
Did someone take our her brain and switched it with Giselle's?
Sabrina teleported away herself, going to seek out help from someone whom she trusted very much, someone whom she knew would give her an honest opinion.
*dark voice* Someone who wil turn her in.
 
Sorry, my computer froze up while trying to spy on you look at Google Earth. So I've lost a half a hour in the process. Anyway, I'm sorry for ruining your future fic, but I've long hated the Brock/Erika matchup, and I have a replacement for him, the original boy I matched with Erika back in the LEGO days. Meanwhile, I thought it would be a good time for Liza to return. Someday soon Tate will, too, but there are more important issues at hand. (Oh, and I couldn't think of a good title, much less one that matched a song title.)
 
*raises eyebrow* As long as you don't have my complete address, spying is useless. (Not to mention that the google earth pic of my home is from 2003 -_-;;;;;)
No problem, you didn't ruin it, now I just need two new boys (Originally, I wanted to give Erika and Brock two sons) for it, because these two get important. ^.~
Yep, more important issues. Very right. ^^
Isn't there one that practically jumps at you? *snicker Getting away with Murder + possible adding a ? there*

"I should have never trusted him… it's my fault for thinking he'd stay with only one woman," Erika stated.
After all, it's Brock.
"Now don't worry, I'm sure there will be many men just lining up to go out with you," Sabrina responded.

"I wish I had a man like your Will," Erika commented.

Sabrina did not take the hint.
Hint? What hint? o,o
"He sticks around, that's for sure," she said, trying to hide her true feelings towards him.
As if it isn't that obvious that she loves him. ^^
"Please, just call me Erika," Erika replied.

"I insist," Sabrina stated. "You've earned your title, unlike someone else."
...hm.
Sabrina took a deep sigh. "Cynthia has good reason for hating me," she replied. "I… killed them."

Erika gasped. Sabrina wished she could read what was on her mind, but she could not.
Is this bad? Yes. Is this very bad? Yes.
Erika did not reply at first, but then suddenly she thrust her arms out and created a dark mist, which wrapped around Sabrina's body in a ring, preventing Sabrina from teleporting or even moving.
I hate you. Again. >> You will have to bow A LOT.
"Shall we fire?" Officer Jenny shouted.

"Only if she tries to escape," Erika replied, with Sabrina looking over at her best friend in shock.
WTF?!?!? Shoot her? o,o;;;
Within minutes, they threw her in jail, as she ended up in Cynthia's old jail cell, now repaired from Cynthia's escape.
...irony at its best. Again.
"You used to be my friend," Erika stated, creating the dark mist. "But now you are nothing more than a criminal.
>.< Now this leaves only Will and Liza on the list of people she can trust.
You shall stay here for the rest of your life, you murderer. And now I regret my actions, for I see that Queen Cynthia was right all along."
WTF??!?? Erica turning to the dark side? Okay, it kinda fits my future plot, yet it leaves me with a very bad feeling....o,o
Ouch, once Will is informed about this, he's either going to break down or going berserk. Either will hurt me. ><
Officers, notify her family of her arrest.
>.< What I said.
Will wanted to attack the officer himself, as he was so angry,
What I said, the second.
but a now-mellow Liza held him back.
For a moment, I laughed, because my dictionary says mellow is a synonym for 'drunk'. *g*
But you can forget about seeing her free again.
>.< *sniffs* Just like I predicted feared.
What got into her? Will thought.
Maybe that she felt guilty? >>
"Take me to her, now!" Will demanded.
*weak smile* Just the Will I know, loving her more than anything else.
 
E-mail me! (unless you have already and I haven't been able to get to it)

Anyway, I had to toe the line between Erika going OOC and changing her opinion towards Sabrina. But she apparently was so shocked by Sabrina's admission and so offended that she completely turned on her. Or, maybe it's something else...

I hate you. Again. >> You will have to bow A LOT.
I knew you wouldn't take Sabrina's jailing easily.

Oh, and mellow means something like "calmed down," not "drunk"... but maybe I better make sure the words I use don't have alternative meanings.
 
^^ I will, once I change computers again. (Which will probably be after the review).

Something else...I wonder...does it have to do with Cynthia's prediction?

>>; Yes, you were right with that.

No, no, it makes the whole reviewing funnier. ^^
"I thought I could trust her," Sabrina replied.
Well, obviously, you were wrong.
Erika suddenly appeared in the corner of the hallway, walking towards Will.

"Okay, that's enough time with the prisoner," she said. "Get out of here!"
Erika's unusual cruel...
"Wait!" Will cried. "Sabrina, I can't live without you!
;.; OMG, that poor guy...you like to torture the boys, too, don't you....
Sabrina just looked down. "Will, I want you to take over the Saffron gym for me," she said.

"Sabrina!" Will shouted in protest.

"My leader position is yours," she continued.

"Sabrina!" Will yelled.

"And Roxette… make her a better woman than me," she said.

"Sabrina!" Will screamed.
Omg...this is almost as sad as the scene when she almost died...only now that I know Will can at least visit her, yet it's still unbelievable sad. ;.;
At that moment Erika shot some dark energy towards Will, knocking him over.
...Erika IS unusual cruel.
"You may visit once a week," Officer Jenny told Will. "We'll allow you 15 minutes with her, but that is all. She is a dangerous criminal, and we will watch you every second of the way to make sure you do not plan her escape."
...only 15 minutes a week? Ouch. ;.; That's not much...*sniffs*
"She deserves a trial!" Will protested.
I wouldn't suggest that, Will, if I were you. After all, a trial could mean death penalty. >.<
"She had no control over herself!" Will cried. "I promise you, it wasn't her fault!"

"Go away, or we'll arrest you too," Jenny demanded, pushing Will away.
Hey, getting Will arrested would mean that they're tog- *remembers Lucian and Cynthia*... nevermind.
"So she's been given a life in prison sentence?" Liza asked.
>.< Very bad.
"I get to see her once a week. Poor Roxette's going to grow up without a mother."
Well, a mother she can see once a week. Like as if that is any better. *sniffs*
"I'll help take care of her," Liza offered.

"Thanks but no thanks," Will said.
Agreed. Better no mother than Liza as a mother *hides*.
I don't deserve the honor of running the Saffron gym," he said.
;.; He does deserve it! He has to keep it for Roxette! ^^
"Now, back to more important business: I'm a member of the Elite and you aren't!"

Will wanted to strangle Liza, though he realized that deep down, she was joking.
I would glady strangle her for you.
"Liza, you and I are going to get Sabrina free," he told her.
To quote Liza: How? I really, really, really hope this is going to happy (else my future fic has a plot problem), yet even I don't know how. o,o
 
Will's going to have to go all out in order to prove Sabrina innocent, but there are several obstacles in his way. For one thing, he has to prove even to Sabrina herself that she's innocent. Plus he has other problems to deal with, which will come next chapter (and hopefully tomorrow).
 
I guess at least two of the obstacles are Erika and Cynthia...or Sinnoh's citizins. Or a combination of these.
Tomorrow? Yay! ^^

"What do you even have to risk?" Liza asked. "You aren't exactly Mr. Elite anymore?"
Ouch. Liza's words are harsh, but true. Will is quiet...well, broke without Sabrina.
Sabrina is my life. I can't live a moment without her. I'm dying inside already.
...
this goes without any comment of mine. There is no comment that can explain how romantic this sounds.
But over and over again, I've had to rescue her,
Yeah, because your wife is too stubborn to realize Cynthia is too much of a threat for her. ><
She was always stronger than me; I can't possibly be stronger than her.
He does sound awfully like Lucian right now. And, does he even have to be stronger then her? I see no reason...
It was always her. Maybe you don't understand what it's like to be married, but this ring on my finger means a whole lot."

"And so does the ring on hers… like ¥10000000!" Liza teased.
*sighs* Liza...he IS trying to pay for it, understood?
Really, that girl needs to fall in love too, or she will never get it.
Are you with me, Liza?"

"Oh, I don't know," Liza responded. "It's going to cost you."

"What?" Will demanded.

"Oh, maybe ¥1000," Liza replied.
WTF?!
Will reached into his pocket and reluctantly handed the money over to Liza.
Double WTF here.
but I'll take the money."
Liza....can I strangle her?
"If Sabrina wasn't in jail right now, I'd kill you," he grumbled.
^.^ No, Will, you're too nice to kill anyone *glares at Zammy*. Can I kill her for you? I would glady do so, you know...
 
I don't know if Liza will be more of a help or a handicap to Will. And Sabrina got herself into this mess. But Will's going to try to be the hero, not because he's strong, but because he has no other choice... without Sabrina, he's pretty hopeless.

Also, Erika turned out a lot meaner than I planned. I was going to have her be a little nicer about this, but I decided against it.
 
More a handicap, I think. Liza may be strong, and that may come handy sometimes, but the way she annoys him...I'm afraid that will end up badly.
Well, theoretically seen, Will is not completely helpless. Theoretically, he has the gym and he has the money from it. Though...what is the price of a gym against the love of his life? >.<

...I might even dare to say Erika is a bit ooc, yet that may start being a plot point.
 
Does he really have the gym? *hint* *hint*

Erika... ooh, just wait and see. The breakup is huge in changing her personality.
 
...Hint? Uh oh....I don't like these kinds of hints, I really don't. ><

....I guessed she trained her dark powers a bit too much, developed a split personality and Cynthia has to help her out *lol*. j/k

Do I even want to read the chapter now? Yes. I will go over to it now. ^^ Review today if you post inbetween, me not double-posts. XD
 
You won't like this chapter, I guarantee it. It's more about Sabrina than it is about Cynthia, so the review should go here... I look forward to seeing it.
 
Already read a bit and...yes, you're right, I don't like it. >> Not at all. Hmpf.

Title: Yep, fits. *g*
Being the vice-president, he had all sorts of privileges, and he decided he was going to push the limits of those privileges.
When you read such a sentence, you know this is going to end bad. Hence the title...
The person in charge of such records was indignant upon Will's asking for them.
I wonder why...
Will responded. "Besides, I can fire you if I want."
...be careful with what you say, Will. >>
"Oh, nothing," Will said. "I guess I don't need to see them anyway."
That lie can't get more obvious. *g*
"Why haven't you gone home yet, Will?" the president asked him.

"Oh, I have some extra work to take care of," Will replied.
Lame excuse. *gg*
"I'm thinking sometime in the spring…"
How does he know? Did I miss something?
"This is it," he said. "I'm taking this."

"Are you?" a person asked.
Ouch. Big ouch.
"I know what you were trying to do, and it's illegal," the president replied. "But I won't call the police on you."

"You won't?" Will asked with relief.
Don't start celebrating yet.
"No," the president said. "Because you're fired."
>.< Ouch again. If this continues, Liza's going to be the one who has to get the money for the family (even though she is no member of said family! XD)
Though, I have to agree with the president, that wasn't exactly legal...
"Get out of this building and leave the video here."

Will quickly teleported away, taking the video with him.
>< Not good. He'll get in trouble again.
He was more interested in trying to prove Sabrina's innocence than keeping his job.
I can understand him, yet...love and everything isn't going to feed hungry mouths. ><
"So, you got yourself fired?"

"Oh, shut up, Liza."
*tries to keep her hands from Liza's throat*
Will had returned a video to the company in exchange for him not being turned into the police, but the video he returned was actually a movie that Sabrina and he had at home. The company never checked that, leaving Will to keep the surveillance video.
Phew, at least something that went well for him.
"Something you're not good at, that you actually admit," Will said. "Now there's a surprise."
The transformation into Giselle ver. 2 is not complete yet.
"I am here to contact you about the new ownership of the Saffron gym," Lance replied. "We have heard the news that Sabrina has been arrested for murder and has relinquished ownership of her gym."

The very words made Will bristle. "Yes, that is correct," he replied sternly.
*shudders* The words rather scare me...I hate you and your hints. >.<;;;
 
It gets worse for Will... much worse. But I'm sure you've seen how much worse by now.

I can't wait to see what you think of the ending of this chapter... the part with... oh, you know.
 
Yes, by now I have seen. I read while you were away.
My reaction...? *jumps at you and tries to gnaw your ear off*
*gg*

Because of that, the Fighting Dojo has the rights to the second-in-command position, and thus Kiyo will take over leadership of Saffron City's gym immediately."
>.< I knew it. You and your damn hints!
"No, I'm afraid the two-gym system makes Saffron City a special case,"
Saffron City was always a special case, yet that that would come in so...unhandy.
Perhaps if you wanted a special position, you should have stayed with the Elite."
He has a special position. In Sabrina's and Erika's heart.
Will wanted to throw something at the videophone.
Yeah, me too. *looks at how she treated Lance in Chapter 5* Or not. 0=)
"Now please have a nice day."

Lance hung up. "Some nice day I'm having," Will muttered.
LOL Actually something I can laugh about during this chapter...>>
"You sure are loyal to the ones you love, aren't you?" she asked.

"I guess you could say that," Will answered.

"I like that in a man," Erika replied, looking down with embarrassment.
...my lightbulb bursted when I read that. Yes, I get these hints very quickly. Already has suspections during last chapter, but they were small. Now, though....
"Do you trust me?" Erika asked, smiling innocently.
NO, DON'T!!! DON'T!!! >.<
You sure are handsome without that mask.
^^ Agreed. Though he is also handsome WITH the mask.
She moved closer to Will, who still did not take any hint of what Erika was feeling.
Argh. >.< I do not want to scream out 'I HATE YOU' again, yet that would be anything but wrong...
Erika then pressed his lips against his. Will tried doing everything he could to break away from the kiss, but the dark powers Erika used stopped him from moving, and he could not help being kissed by her. He hated every moment of Erika's kiss, which lasted for a full minute, until he was gasping for air.
Whoah, this is really Will's kiss week. Got forcefully kissed in both my and your fic (you didn't steal that idea, did you ? ^.~) and got Sabrina's kiss in Zammy's fic.
Sabrina's never getting out of prison, and I'll make sure the police know that you are conspiring with Sabrina to break her out, so you won't be able to visit her again."
O,O One or even both of them would commit suicide if they could never see each other again...
"Yes, Roxette will be our daughter. You and I, Will… we'll have a great romantic marriage together. I know you'll remain loyal to me, the same way you were loyal to Sabrina. And I won't let you down, I'm a pure-hearted woman, unlike your previous wife. You will take my last name, Celadon.
Ouch, och, ouch, ouch...and you say you didn't torture Sabrina during this chapter? This is pure emotional torture...
Not to mention that yet another person has a city's name as a surname. *gg*
and you'll completely forget about your past. And…"

She held out her hand, which released more dark mist.

"You won't have a choice about it."
O,O She's erasing hsi memories? Uh oh, double uh oh....
*sweatdrops* I think you've made your girls powerful enough, you could start giving at least a few boys a bit power...
Now I really want to know how this can end well anymore...>.<
 
I figured you might hate this one more than Sabrina's imprisonment... so which one was worse, Sabrina going to jail, or Erika stealing Will from Sabrina?

Argh. >.< I do not want to scream out 'I HATE YOU' again, yet that would be anything but wrong...
Nothing was funnier than when you said "you will have to bow a lot."

O,O She's erasing his memories? Uh oh, double uh oh....
Maybe, maybe not.

*sweatdrops* I think you've made your girls powerful enough, you could start giving at least a few boys a bit power...
Soon enough I'll be considered a feminist.

Now I really want to know how this can end well anymore...>.<
It depends on your definition of "well." Perhaps the ending could be Cynthia reigning as queen and Will and Erika raising Roxette together, and it would end well for Cynthia and Erika.
 
I figured you might hate this one more than Sabrina's imprisonment... so which one was worse, Sabrina going to jail, or Erika stealing Will from Sabrina?
...hm....I never thought about that, both scenes were worse. Yet, the Sabrina going to jail scene had something romantic to it, something like, well, the image of their love even surviving separation. Yet Erica stealing Will from Sabrina is just bad. I'll go with that. ^^
Nothing was funnier than when you said "you will have to bow a lot.
Just bowing is too nice. >>
Maybe, maybe not.
Maybe not? I wonder...dea ex machine again?
Soon enough I'll be considered a feminist.
*g* You are, yet you're a special one. *gg*
It depends on your definition of "well." Perhaps the ending could be Cynthia reigning as queen and Will and Erika raising Roxette together, and it would end well for Cynthia and Erika.
... end well for me and Sabrina. And Will. And for the rest of the readers (save Zammy, maybe).
 
Remember when I said...
Anyway, I'm sorry for ruining your future fic, but I've long hated the Brock/Erika matchup, and I have a replacement for him, the original boy I matched with Erika back in the LEGO days
What do you think of that now?

... end well for me and Sabrina. And Will. And for the rest of the readers (save Zammy, maybe).
Actually, I have a ff.net reader who loves Cynthia. Plus the poll shows Cynthia in the lead over Sabrina 3-2, unless that changed recently. So the readers seem to be pulling for the blonde...
 
When I read today's chapter, I already wondered if you meant Will with that, yet sadly I forgot if you had ever mentioned the original pair for Erika. XD

....argh, not fair. >< This is the Sabrina fanclub, after all!
 
I never mentioned the original pair for Erika... so you'll just have to wait and see. Erika should be an interesting character to develop.

You know I write for you, P*A... which is why I love to tease you.
 
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