Shinermaun's Revenge: A HG Gijinka comic. (Updates Thursdays!)

[Ace Trainer 188]

So this is technically a Nuzlocke run of HeartGold that I made in comic form, and I will use Gijinkas to make it different. I've been working on it for 2 weeks and I will share it with you guys now.

Synopsis:

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Johnny K. Hannings was awoken from a deep slumber, only to realise he had suddenly transformed into an 10 year old, having the powers of a Totodile, and only having a memory of how he died. He moves around the place discovering new friends such as Sal Kinsaro, who has the powers of a Caterpie, and finding out how he could possible conquer the area.

Rules:

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1. I must catch the first encounter, dupes clause on.
2. I must box any fainted mons.
-New Rules-
3. If a mon survives an attack with red HP, it will be under the injured status. An injured mon cannot hold items, and must be at most 2 levels behind the gang.
4. Injured status lasts for 2 gyms. If someone get injured before the league or before Red, don't worry, everyone will be cured before those.
5. Once I get a full team, I cannot box anybody.
6. I can buy up to 6 potions. then, I cannot buy any other kind of potion.
7. If I lose my starter, I lose the run.(This could be a challenge since I haven't kept a starter alive for a long time.)
8. No day care.
9. I cannot heal in the center in towns(not everywhere, just towns.)
10. I MUST use the egg.
11. The badge's number tells me how many mons I should bring into the gym.(e.g. I must use only 1 mon in the 1st gym, 3 mons in the 3rd gym.)
12. On the 6th and 7th gym, I can only use 4 and 5 mons respectively. The last gym is the only gym where I can use my full team.
13. I cannot encounter the same type mon twice in a row.(e.g. If my first encounter on a route is a grass mon, I cannot catch another grass mon in the next route.
14. I am not allowed to catch Rattata, even if it's my first encounter. Do I need to say why?
15. Wish me luck!

Prologue:

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Death. Anybody, whether it's you or your loved ones, will have to suffer through during one point in your life. However, scientists have soon invented a brand new program to give people who have died from tragic, unexpected means(such as quakes, plane crashes, anything that wasn't their fault), a chance to become reincarnated, and come back into their life. This is known to help them prepare for the time where they get back to their own respective bodies and expect the unexpected.

It goes like this: the deceased person is brought into an imaginary world. He or she must fight for him or herself. They must visit every town, and beat that town's leader. After defeating all 8 leaders, they can have a chance to go to a so-called 'league'. They will fight four powerful teams, and finally go against the champion; a major boss, who will then grant them to become alive again.

These people will gain Pokemon-like powers. They can fight opponents with this, and make their way to victory with it. The opponents will also have these powers.

However, there are strict rules. If any of the deceased people get defeated in battle, they will really die, and will never get resurrected, and no one, NO ONE must know what they are going through, the plan of this scheme, or how these powers came about. If a dead person is caught saying out loud that they know what's going on, they are immediately disqualified, as well as being sent to HELL. Technology has also been improved, so now if a dead person completely knows and is aware of what's going on, the same thing would happen.

This system, while being effective, has received numerous controversy. The normal death cycle has always been going well, as the way people know it. But the creators still continue to ignore it. They fell it would revolutionise the way the human being behaves, thinks, feels, and finally, survives.

They call it Nuzlocke.

The table of contents:

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Episode 1-Call
Episode 2-Sorry
Episode 3-Net
Episode 4-Meanwhile
Episode 5-Title
Episode 6-Ambush
Episode 7-Flight

For now, I will update on Thursdays. I will keep you guys updated with my schedule! If there are any problems, go ahead and tell me, I would like to see how I can improve this for you guys!
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[queeniewolf]

First of all: Wow, those are some hard rules you've inflicted on yourself there! I can imagine that kind of nuzlocke might be quite difficult to get through haha

I see you have started using black lines instead of pencil and for the last page which is good! It makes it a bit easier to follow :>
Some more things that I think could improve your art:

• Use a variety of weight/thickness for your lines. At the moment, all the lines are the same and thus it can be hard to distinguish e.g. panel borders from backgrounds.
• Lettering. The writing in the speech bubbles seems a bit squashed and forcefully squeezed into them. Try to always leave a bit of blank space around the writing inside speech bubbles. Doing the lettering digitally can help with that, as it's easier to move words around and change the size of the font. It's always easier to read, too. (If you don't have a programme to do that, try GIMP. You can add text and also play around with the contrast a bit. It's completely free)
• As I just mentioned: Contrast. Make the background whiter and the black lines darker. I know scans never turn out perfectly, but you can do this digitally afterwards!
• Lastly, your characters still seem a little stiff and square. Their shoulders are literally 90° angles. Try working a bit on your human anatomy and proportions :> using references can help a lot here! Also making a rough sketch and planning out your poses before drawing them is a great technique. (I hope I'm explaining myself properly here haha here's some images I found on google that are good examples of what I mean: 1 2 3) This is something that can work different for everyone, so just experiment a bit and see what feels most suitable for you!
  You could try to work on the hands a bit, too. Again, using references is key! Hands are very tricky to draw and I'm pretty sure they can be a struggle for every artist, no matter the level of skill. Look up pictures on the internet, or just use your own hands

Phew, that's a bit of text ...I hope that didn't sound too harsh!
I admire people who take up big projects like that, it's great :> and I'm sure you'll improve greatly as you go on

 

[Slyarch]

HEY! FINALLY! A NUZLOCKE COMIC ON PC hahaha I really hope this progect goes well i have done a few my self on smackjeeves.com

 

[Ace Trainer 188]

@Queeniewolf: Hey thanks! Let me break down your reply:

-The main reason why I used that kind of lining for page 4 is because I wasn't drawing on paper. It was a different kind of paper;I could only use a pen, if I drew with pencil it wouldn't be clear. I was at school, and I forgot to bring blank paper with me, but since you like that lining, I might want to do it more often in the future!
-I will try to put the lettering and different lines into page 6. I hope you like it when I release it!
-I.... sadly don't have a digital software at the moment, so yeah. Sorry about that.
-But I will try my best with the body angles thing. Thank you for the tips!

@UAREMAD: Thanks!

PAGE 5 INCOMING:

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Hooray for off screen evolving? Generally I'm not extremely impressed with this page, but things will get better later on. I'm halfway through page 6, gonna want to release it next week, and maybe some other pages so stay tuned!https://www.pokecommunity.com//www.pinterest.com/pin/create/extension/

 

[Ace Trainer 188]

Page 6:

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Page 7:

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I decided to use slightly darker lines for my characters, and try to not squeeze my words. I hope that helped!

So you guessed it, I'm combining the tower and the gym battle. The next of the gym fight will be in the next update, stay tuned!

 

[Ace Trainer 188]

>no replies.
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Anyway, update 8:

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So... I sort of lied. The next installment of the gym battle ain't this one. I am a bit busy lately, so it's most likely that we won't get the first badge in a while. But anyway, extra about those worker people from Episode 4. Also, eggs :P.

So stay tuned for the real part 2 of the gym next week. And also a someone's special day...