Team Advice.

[whitey--01]

Hey, so im new here, and this is my new post, ive read the rules and everything, so im sorry if i mess it up completely, feel free to let me know and delete the post and ill try again if that happens.

Anyway, heres the team atm (I only ever fight on PBR so its really meant for 3v3, though 6v6 suggestions are welcome):

Ambipom @ Leftovers
Jolly Natue (+Speed -Sp.Atk)
Technician
252 hp, 252 Speed, 4 Atk.
Double Hit
Aerial Ace
Substitue
Baton Pass

This is usually my opener, can scout thier starter with substitue, do some damage wth double hit, or baton pass the substitue.

Persian @ Wide Lens
Timid Nature (+Speed -Atk)
Technician
252 Sp.Atk, 252 Speed, 4 hp
Hypnosis
Nasty Plot
Swift
Thunderbolt

Can be an opener, or secondary poke, uses Hypnosis with wide lens, one or 2 nasty plots, and sweeps. Im aware wide lens is only really useful for hypnosis, but i find if hypnosis misses, Persian normally goes down due to poor defenses.

Steelix @ Expert Belt
Jolly Nature (+Speed -Sp.Atk) (Switch for Adamant maby?)
Sturdy
252 Atk, 252 Speed, 4 Dp.Def
Ice Fang
Earthquake
Rock Polish
Explosion

The main Physical sweeper, sets up rock polish, either on his pwn or after a sub baton pass, then sweeps. Ice fang with expert belt is for flyers / pokes like garchomp and flygon, eq is for stab, and explosion can take out walls or if im mean looked into a nasty situation.

Espeon @ Choice Scarf
Timid Nature (+Speed -Sp.Atk) (Maby switch for Modest?)
Synchronize
252 Speed, 252 Sp.Atk
Psychic
Hidden Power Fire / Fighting
Shadow Ball
Grass Knot

The choice sp. sweeper. Fairly simple although im guessing natures and ev's need changing.

Scizor @ Leichi Berry
Jolly Nature (+Speed -Sp.Atk)
Swarm
252 Speed, 252 Atk, 4 Sp.Def
Agility
X-Scissor
Endure
Reversal

Uses agility either after sub pass or alone, endures, and sweeps with reversal, x-scissor covers psychic types, although this is pretty much walled agaisnt ghosts and flyers, so any suggestions there?

Finally, and im sure ill get yelled at for this :P :
Smeargle @ Focus Sash
Jolly Nature (+Speed - Sp.Atk)
Technician
252 Speed (Cant Remember the rest, think i put some in attack for aqua jet)
Agility
Spore
Endeavor
Aqua Jet

Uses agility, spore, endeavour and aqua jet, only really gets stopped by water absorbers, and lum berriers, and ofc if they wake up early.

Anyway thats the team i know ive prob messed up my ev's and natures, thats mainly where i want help, and i know this team is lacking a proper wall, so any suggestions on one, and who to replace it with? And also anywhere i can fit in a rock or electric attack, cus im lacking in that area.

(This was my first real attempt at a competetive team, i made another one recently, but i will ask about that later once ive hopefully got this one sorted.)

Thanks :)

 

[sims796]

I see a few core issues.

First, you have 0 walls. You will get sweeped away quite easily. ()ops, you know this already. My bad.)

Wait, I was wrong. You have two very good walls. But you use it as striaght up attackers for some reason. Steelix is one of the best physical walls there are. I don't see why you are using it as a sweeper. Especially with an average base stat of 85. Not impressive. Not BAD, but definately not sweeper material. He should damn well be your prime wall here. His base Defence is a Godly 200. His SPD is a measely 30. You need more than one Rock Polish if you hope to sweep. This is how his walling moveset should be:

Steelix:Leftovers
Nature:Impish/Relaxed
Gyro Ball
Stone Edge (If you want that Rock move)
Rest
Roar/Stealth Rock
EV:252 HP, 164 DEF, 84 ATK

He is a superb wall (I like Forretress better, but hey), and should NOT be your prime sweeper.

Next, you need a SP.Wall. Blissey, Grumpig, Empoleon, Regice, Articuno, Snorlax...the list goes on. I say replace Persian for one. hough I understand if you'd like to keep Persian. It is a cat. Therefore, it is awesome. Maybe Smeargle?

Scizor is my favorite Baton Passer, mainly due to his wide arsenal of things he can pass. You should take advantage of it. If not, then at least lose the Endure/Reversal combo. I can't stand it, due to the fact that all it takes is one faster move & it's game over. Plus, when you are inevitably walled by Forrertress, you are stuck with a low HP when you swiitch. Rather, you should focus on some Defence.

 

[whitey--01]

Thnks for the help sims, i am definatly conidering swapping Steelix to be a phyical wall, and as you say, will help my rock defecit.

I do want to keep persian, so i will swap out smeargle i expect yes. But, if i change steelix to a wall, and scizor to a baton passer, and bring in a sp.wall, i will have no physical sweepers, other than ambipom :P So wouldnt i need to either make scizor a sweeper, or swap him out for one?

Or i could try using snorlax as a mixed physical attacker / sp.wall, would that work do you think?

 

[sims796]

I hear good things about Curselax.

If you are adamant on keeping Persian (as the spot could go to a REAL physical sweeper) then either lose Ampipom or Scizor. With that, a physical sweeper could be added.

As such, I suggest a good heavy hitter, like Heracross, Electrivire, Chomp...take your pick.

 

[whitey--01]

So curselax and a physical sweeper, i have a garchomp and weavile in my other teams, so im assuming i can swap either of those over, well thanks for all the help sims, that pretty much everything i wanted sorting, so ta very much :)