The Adventures Of Riley

Yes...I can tell that you had learned more and what not between the 3rd and 4th chapter and can't wait to read the next!:D:D
 
Oky after reading your chapters and seeing what people had to say...Here is my review:

- Your description on things could get a little better, but I can tell you are rowing as a writer...

- When you are writing your battles, try to be as detailed, imaginitive, and put in the best effort as you can into them, that is what makes the reading more interesting

- Before posting up your chapters, try to re-read it for gramatical correction and if you have it, use Spell Check...it helps! :)

- Everything else, I like it, and you are right the Chapters with Swinub are a lot better and more imporving...keep it up and I'll be waiting for the next chapter my friend...
 
@ Pika & f l a s h:

Thanks for the comments guys and hopefully I'll have Vs. Snorunt up soon.
 
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