The Old Chateau

Sarah09x

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    Many of us have been scared out of our wits from the Old Chateau. I've decided to make a story about it.
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    Seren's dad, Charon, was going away for the weekend; he said he was going to Floamora Town to "relax". Charon trusted his Butler, Harry, enough to leave Charlotte with him whilst they were away. Unfortunately, Harry had other things in mind.
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    "Shoo! Go, you pesky thing!" Harry was waving a tea towel at the Rotom which continued to sneak into the house on various occassions. The Rotom glided away through the open door. "I say, that thing is getting on my nerves."
    "Harry, we're leaving now. Seren, be good! I'll miss you!" Charon called out. Harry waved and shut the door. He grinned and walked towards the kitchen.
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    Yeah, not very good, but it's my first fanfic. Hope you like it!​
     
    Quite so. Was that a story or a chapter? I must say, though, it's far too short to be either. Try for at least a thousand words per chapter, probably more, although it's technically up to you. I can't say much more, because there's nothing to say it about.
     
    I thought it'd be obvious...it's a chapter.
     
    Well, there are no hard-and-fast rules on how long a chapter needs to be, and it is of course up to you, as the author. But a chapter of this length really offers the reader no satisfaction. And if you say it's not very good, don't post it. Make it better, extend it, include characterisation and description, and LENGTH. I want to read a fanfic that makes me think, and keeps me occupied for more than nine seconds. I swear, that's how long it took me to read your so-called chapter.
     
    It is very short, but it sets the story I guess. Make the next chapter longer, as has been said, but I actually like the idea of a butler desperately trying to get rid of Rotom, and him saying posh things could make it quite funny. I see potential here, now fulfill it :)
     
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