The Ram

[RudeStyle]

The Ram

The Ram wild and free.
Running with a childish glee.
The eyes of frost,
comes with a cost...

The blood it bares starts to thicken
The sight you see would only sicken.
The Wolves Howl with delight
As they claim the victim in the night

The Kids can only wait,
To find out their gloomy fate.
The intruders arrive,
Will the Kids be alive?


Hope you liked my poem, Questions and feedback below please.

 

[Pikachukid]

Whoah, nice rhyme scheme, short and simple too. What was up at the end though? I thought it was about a ram and then Boom! You get hit with the dark definitely not about the ram anymore stanza D:

 

[bobandbill]

This was a pretty neat poem, I thought - neat rhythm and the change in mood between th stanzas was an interesting way to deliever it.

I would recommend not changing font colour but rather just stick to the default, as on some of the forum styles some colours are hard to read, and presentation is a fairly significant part of writing too.

The blood it bares starts to thicken
The sight you see would only sicken.
The Wolves Howl with delight
As they claim the victim in the night

I'm not sure why howl was capitalised there - seemed a bit off and not on the same lines as the other words that did (Ram, Kids, Wolves). Furthermore it seemed that sometimes you opted to use punctuation and other times not like in the last line of the above quote which also seems slightly off. Consider being more consistent with it, I suggest. But I look forward to seeing more poetry from you. =)