The This-Comic-has-no-Story Comic

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    xD i decided to give this a try, and i guess it worked :)
    *image removed* that's... issue 1 ^^

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    Not... 'action'-y enough. Infact, frame by frame comics like these are always... bad. Try and add a little more action or humor to it. Also, don't use frame-by-frame. Skip like 2-3 frames to 4-5 frames instead between each sprite.
     
    umm... i believe you missed the point. "This-Comic-has-no-Story"? there's not supposed to be action or humor, it's a random mess.
     
    ACManga said:
    umm... i believe you missed the point. "This-Comic-has-no-Story"? there's not supposed to be action or humor, it's a random mess.
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    Just because a comic has no story doesn't mean it can't improve. (Whoa, a triple negative!! 0_o) He was only pointing out ways to make your comic stronger, that's all. One of the hardest parts of submitting art of any kind in a forum is learning to accept criticism, and in most cases, welcome it. Don't just retort back as though you've been offended. The beauty of it is that you don't HAVE to agree with any of the criticism you receive. It's your work, and as long as you're satisfied with it, there's no need for you to change it. But don't get mad when others make suggestions to you.

    Anyway, to get back on topic, yeah, perhaps it doesn't have any point or story. But it could use humor. Pointless cartoons thrive on silliness and random humor. It's what keeps the viewer's attention throughout the randomness. Without it, you're liable to lose your reader's interest.

    You had humor, though. It wasn't all that striking, but it was there. I'll give you a 6 on humor. :)

    The graphics were bright and colorful, but there was a fatal flaw that messed it up for me. They blended together way too much. If you wanna show the same character(s) in every frame, that's cool by me. But it makes it hard to grasp the action if all the backgrounds seem to be one cohesive unit. It just looks like there's a bunch of similar-looking characters on the field that way. Try putting borders around each frame. You'd be amazed at how much more readable it'll be. It'll also help guide your readers through the flow of the cartoon the way you want them to go. Believe it or not, there's a lot of room for creativity in structured framing. At any rate, I'll have to rate your graphics a 4.

    The story was pretty good. The fact that there's supposed to be no point to it validates the lack of explanation as to why there are midget things chasing the main character. And although it was kind of easy to expect, the ones he ran into at the end added a touch of humor to it, kind of like a punch line. But it still has a lot of room for improvement. For example, instead of the midget things being the size that they are, make them really small - say the size of the main character's head. And make a lot of them at the end, instead of just two. That allows for a more dramatic sense of what a big pile of hooey he's landed himself in. :) All in all, I'd give your story a 5.

    So let's look at your overall score. You have an average of 5. Seems pretty tough, I know, but what can I say? I'm picky. >D

    But like I said before, these are just suggestions. You can take them or leave them.
     
    umm... @Shuko- i know how to accept criticism, i'm PC's number one graphics veteran. i wasn't getting mad at him, i was plainly stating, without being rude at all, that i didn't want action in the comic; it's not that style comic. with that said, i understand that i should add more humor to the comic. oh, and just so you guys know, this is my first comic >_>
     
    eh, well now i cnow you can exept critisism (i spelt that wrong)

    for a comic with no story it had alot of story, and action, put more randam humer in it like apap and it really will have no story (apap did have les story then that :D) but i hate to use other comics as examples, but i do all the time XD

    but anyway, read some of apap, but DONT copy it, just get the feel of the comic and then you will know exactly what i'm talking about :D


    ok now,
    Background the backgrounds have alot in them, try putting a farly thick border on them (i know its alot like shuko said but i think it not only needs a border but a thick one) background i give 6/10

    Sprites, i agree with skuko where she said the midgets should be smaller, but i cant really rate the sprites unless you made them yourself, and i dont know if you did. did you? but the speach bubble is great (you didnt use paint did you?) anyway i like that speech bubble but you shuld put more then just a like from the speech bubble to the sprite, over for sprites i give you a 7/10

    and story: like i said before, for a comic with no story it had alot of story, if you had pointrless humer it would be much better, but the last frame did make it pointless humer but still it looked like it was right out of a game for story i give you 5/10

    Thats an average of 6/10, but since its your FIRST comic ill make it 7/10 :D
     
    i use photoshop, so that's why the bubble's so good :P and no, i didn't make the midgets xD
     
    Eh thought so, i love photoshop XD

    im actually doing a course on photography, and i use photoshop alot for it, but i used it before then, thats why photoshop was my first guess :P anyway cant wait till the next comic
     
    ACManga said:
    umm... i believe you missed the point. "This-Comic-has-no-Story"? there's not supposed to be action or humor, it's a random mess.
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    Just because something has no story doesn't mean things cannot explode, die, or be funny o0

    But if that's the comic style, go ahed with it.
     
    i agree,

    but i kinda like this style aswell,

    oh and im going to make my own comic now :P im just making some backgrounds and thinking up a storyline :p

    cant woit till your next issue though
     
    ACManga said:
    umm... @Shuko- i know how to accept criticism, i'm PC's number one graphics veteran. i wasn't getting mad at him, i was plainly stating, without being rude at all, that i didn't want action in the comic; it's not that style comic. with that said, i understand that i should add more humor to the comic. oh, and just so you guys know, this is my first comic >_>
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    I apologize, ACManga. It DID sound awfully rude of me to rebuke you like that. I must admit that I wasn't being very tolerant myself yesterday. Hrm... maybe I should pay attention to my own advice for once. -_-;

    I didn't even look at your post count, so it never occurred to me that you were even a veteran of PC, much less at drawing. :P For that, I apologize to you, because I came off sounding rather condescending, and that was undeserved on your part.

    I still stand by my rating, tho. I like your comic, but since it's your first, it's obviously gonna have plenty of room for improvement. And I'm glad that you already knew that. It made me look like a ninny, but it just means you're a much more experienced and understanding than I gave you credit for. And that's definitely a good thng. Sorry for jumping to conclusions like that. :)
     
    that's okay, i can see why somebody would do that. i have those days where i'm not very tolerant myself, and say bad things about good banners... xD i'm about to make the next issue, got a few ideas for it. btw- it's not exactly a storyline comic, the characters and settings are constantly changing.
     
    u seemed to have done a good job

    after reviewing your work i will give you a 4/10 for storyline, not that randomness isnt great, but it can turn some ppl off and loose some potentional readers, if u want to keep the randomness fine ^^ just make sure the story has a good proportion of all age humor.

    i hope this will help you improve ^^ for what i can see u are a good spriter and u have the potentional to do great things, just dont let a silly thing like colours stand in your way from achieveing this

    Graphics, i will give you a 6 out of 10 for graphics, not that the graphics are not good, just that the colours make it hard to see the characters probly, me myself not wearing me glasses made it worse :P. i say u pick the back grounds according the the colours of the characters in the scene ^^ that would help higher your score.
     
    oh.. i'm not a good spriter, i'm not a spriter at all, i just felt like doing this :P
     
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