Tomorrow never comes

[Anacortes]

Many eyes stare tiredly,
As the rain falls down.
Who knows somewhere far away,
You can hear a pleading sound.

It's all right here inside a lonely room,
Where I can see you no longer.
If it takes all of myself to get to you,
I really would wonder.

Tomorrow signals a promising call,
That we will be together once and for all.
But when will that day reach me,
So far and away for the eye to see?

Until you can come rescue me,
I will stay here and wait.
Only wishing that tomorrow would come,
No matter it be how late.

As many years have passed,
I can see it not far away.
Finally my chance has come,
I walk up to you and say...

How long has I waited like that,
So alone in the rain.
You in paradise watching me,
Didn't you feel any pain?

When I thought tomorrow'd never come,
Why didn't you give it to me...​

 

[Kyosuke]

Very good poem, very thought provoking while at the same time leaving a sence of satisfaction that it didn't end abruptly. Correct me if I'm wrong, but it seems that its a relationship situation going on, and one person seems to be living the good life, while the other's life seems to be a living hell without that person who has yet to be "rescued" from some of the torments of life, and in the end you seem to be just looking for answers to the questions that you kept asking.

Sorry if that was a bit confusing ^^', it was a really good poem, but just seems to be slightly more confusing then it should be, with the point you are trying to get across. Overall you did a great job though ^^.

 

[Blaine]

Well, now. My first post in several months.

Anyway, like LT said, the poem comes off to be a relationship-related situation. It almost feels as if the narrator is living in a... Repunzel archetype. The poem is also rather confusing. Don't try so hard. The word choice is superb and really comes off as such; so kudos on that. I can't say that I really enjoyed the piece, but I can comment that it was wonderfully written.