vaporeon dreams

Psychotic_Demon

The Espeon of the Moon
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    this is a story for me and capalex65 to do only! its not an rp so please dont add to it! alright... now that thats cleared up lets start!!! hope u like it!


    ch.1 outcasts...

    aurora lay on the shore of slateport beach. she got many ohhs and ahhs from beachgoers and trainers alike. aurora was different from the other vaporeon because of her silver color. she was cast out just because of her color. no one cared for her, so she didnt care for them.

    aurora stood up. she never had a home and didnt stay in one place for too long. she was a drifter. stronger than most vaporeon she was adored by trainers, but all who tried to catch her ended up running away.

    she had no love. she had no emotions. aurora aimlessly wandered around slateport. ugg... i hate this city. too many people... she thought. she walked into a cafe and begged for some food. she hated begging but she had no choice.

    after a full course meal she walked back outside. the sun had gone down and she was tiered. she wandered around untill she found the beach. she layed down at the foot of the waves. the soft sound of the ocean always helped her sleep. she colsed her eyes and fell into a dreamless slumber...

    to be continued by capalex65...
     
    This story sounds good so far. Good job on it!
     
    I like the story. It's written well for the most part, besides a few errors:

    Capitalization. It's not required, but it would make the story less confusing.

    You stated the Vaporeon had no emotions, but you said it hated Slateport. Hate is an emotion.I saw some spelling errors, but who is perfect?

    Good story, original, I want to read more.
     
    capalex is supossed to do the next part! and i guess the only emotion aurora has is hate. better?
     
    Here is my first part :

    Chapter.1 part 2

    I was walking on the streets of Slateport and got many ooohhh and ahhhs alike from both trainers and other people because of my color which was gold and black

    I walked in to an alley way and was seen by a greedy trainer who said "Now i will capture you and take your skin MWAHAHA!!!" thats something that you think.

    He used 5 pokemon against me which was unfair Now you are going to get hurt
     
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    I've never read a pokemon fanfic from the pokemon's point of view. I like the idea, and the story's not bad either. Have you heard of the thread in the mixed community groups forum, "(Yet Another) Writer's/Artists club"? You should take a look at it; I think you'd fit right in.
    ;)
     
    aurora woke with a start. whats going on? she thought angerly. aurora stood up, stretched and ran back torwards the slateport.

    she ran down one deserted street, then another. finally she came to an alley with a vaporeon fighting 5 pokemon. aurora charged up an water gun and shot it at the trainer. the trainer turned around and saw the silver vaporeon standing in the moonlight.

    "ill make a fortchane off of this one!" he said excitedly. aurora was mad. she hated trainers. aurora powered up another water gun and sent the trainer flying, only to land in some garbage cans. "why you little..." the trainer turned two of his pokemon totwards her.

    aurora waited. she would defeat this guy easily...
     
    glad ya like it! i luv writing! infact i think i write too much sometimes...
     
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