venting poem/song thread

[<[HaZaRdOuS_EnIgMa]>]

here's a thread where if you're angry about something, you can get it off your chest, but you can't mention names, and you can't curse. express your anger, but keep it clean. although it may be like swallowing nails, this is a reasonable thread, because it's better to vent than to bottle anger up.

here's somethin i just wrote in my rhymebook:

It?s like no matter what I did,
I always ended up losin'
The things you said to me
Left my heart with bruises
And I have never recovered
Or begun to heal the wounds
You left me more barren and empty
Than those arid desert dunes.
Every time I?m hurt
I end up apologizing to you.

Let?s take a step back through time,
Let?s rewind.
I?ll reveal to you a little
Of what?s runnin? through my mind.
In fact let?s go back
To just late last week
So I can show you exactly
Just how you played me.

You said I was your ?one true love?
Let?s pause there.
offense #1:
You made me think you cared.
You said you?d wait right there
If I ever came back.
And I did, but it couldn?t be
Because you already lost track
Of your feelings for me,
So I take a look at a thread or two,
You tell me what did I see?
You saying you had feelings for someone for weeks.

Wait a second,
The timelines don?t check out.
You telling me you loved me,
What was all that about?
And you wonder why I won?t talk
And tell you what?s wrong.
From your analysis of my poem,
You knew pretty well, all along.

You left me broken,
Shattered, discarded, and forgotten.
And you?re mad at me for the attitude I?m coppin??
Well according to my conscience,
I have a right to be mad.
But even after reading all of this,
You still won?t feel bad,
Will ya?

 

[MegaDitto]

I liked it very much.Good work.

 

[<[HaZaRdOuS_EnIgMa]>]

thanx a lot.it's not pretty, i know, but life isn't.

 

[[Technya]]

Wow nicely done. And don't worry about it not being pretty. You couldn't be anymore right, life is not pretty at all.

 

[Kelsey]

Oooh, shweet poem Mattie. ^^ Since you're venting anger, I am kinda afraid to review that one. XD But, I do think it has a good flow to it, even if it's expressing anger, 'tis still a beautiful poem. ^^

~Kelsey

 

[<[HaZaRdOuS_EnIgMa]>]

thanx for reaing, that's more than enough kelsey...thank you

 

[Miyu-chan]

I loved the flow of it, and how you expressed your anger through such a beautiful poem. I really loved your last verse though, it kinda relates to the last verse in your first paragraph. =D

 

[Kelsey]

Sowwy, Matt, but I think I have to close this. This actually is kinda a form of SPAM. If people wish to vent their anger, then they can just create their own thread. It's just easier that way, sorry pal.

*closes*

~Kelsey