Nideous
The world refused to change...
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- Somewhere over the rainbow
- Seen Sep 18, 2013
Um... Dude, this is kind of a mess. The grammar and pacing is just... Wow... And not in a good way. Please clean it up... A lot... And the Personality is pretty short. So... I can't accept this. Clean it up, make the personality longer, and resubmit it, and I'll take another look. Until then, you're stuck with your first character.