Agreed. I think we all would've, considering the fact that we've got, what, two people backing us up saying his lack of detail sucks? XD
Oh yes. I think you might've found it because of the point about his spelling, but if not, it's basically the continuation of the chronicles of his Gary Stu. And it seriously takes, like, two minutes to read through. Because there's practically no story there to begin with. (I pointed this out, but he politely blew me off.)
As to his spelling... Gasp! Oh man, now I feel like a dick. I should've realized that he's doing this just for fun, so therefore, the rules of the English language don't apply! Should I apologize?
And yeah, I noticed that. I thought about replying, but then... I mean, Random Characters feels like the sort of person who would do the "u guyz r so meen!" comment. Ah well. I'm sure he'll make another story that's equally "I just pulled this out of my rear and plopped it in the reply box in under five minutes."
To the reviewer himself, I want to believe he said that because the lack of paragraphing was blinding him. And if not, do I have permission to shove the reviewer's guide down people's throats?