Recent content by DassenSupes

I'm still not super far in, and my only immediate complaint is that you might be running the risk of being dark for the sake of darkness. All in all I think you're talented though.

Just a stylized 'color' name. Thanks for reading!

CHAPTER FOUR: EVERSTONE The door slammed behind Red as Blue crept in behind him. He started, twirling around with his Pikachu clinging to his shirt for support, and looked back to see Blue, who laughed heartily and placed his forehead in the palm of his hand in exasperation. Red turned back...

Oh hi, it's me, back from the dead, updating my fic.

Oh, well, Brave New Word is one of my favorite books. In any case, just posted Chapter 3. derpderpderp So, what about, Fahrenheit 451? anyone?

CHAPTER 3 The sun hung high, around noon in Viridian City. Outside the gates to the Victory Road, Red and Blue helped a particularly miffed guard up to his feet. He grumbled a thanks, dusting himself off. His face was scratched, and he had taken a few bruises from the recent wild Pokémon...

About halfway into this chapter Incidentally, how does everyone feel about Brave New World?

If the reader has to decide the majority of the description and story for himself(or herself) that's no good. It's OK to leave things to interpretation, but the picture you've left is so unclear in my mind that for all I know this guy is a purple people eater. Also the name sounds silly D:

I don't write if it starts to feel forced. Don't worry.

Writing Chapter 3 right now...listenign to this-- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2PNQg8V2-74 No idea whats being sung, but I love the voice.

Well here you have difference in taste. Whatever criticism I receive, it will not be an absolute truth. It's a matter of opinion. Vanlen may love Poe, and you might hate him. too short didnt read DIFFREN STROKES FOR DIFFREN FOKES

Hoo boy. You are rather thorough. But I suppose the most important question for me will be if you find it enjoyable. To me, this is all that matters. I am 'careering' to be a teacher. I have no aspirations of being a solo writer. I'll write this, and I'll write my book eventually. As long as I...

Oh lawdy. Good or bad things?

Okay then. It's a more realistic re-interpretation of the original Red and Blue story, without becoming GRIMDARK DARK GRIMGRIMGRIM DARK. It's full of surprises and sometime almost utter derailings of the original plot to make it feasible, so anyone who even knows the original story by heart can...

It's fine. Thanks. And sorry to disappoint, but dont expect to see Misty for another 3-4 chapters in the main fic. :'[ sorry