Recent content by Dr. Mack Foxx

I think I'm going to be on my way. I have not checked into PokeCommunity for nearly two years and I don't think I'll be returning for a while at the very least at this point. There are various reasons. 1. The groups I used to hang out it were closed years ago. 2. The friends I had here seem to...

I don't see much of a point in sticking around here. Since the threads my stories are in are "Too Old", I cannot receive any critique on them without the threads getting locked and the posters getting a warning. I don't have to worry about such annoyances elsewhere...

Thank you very much for the review! It's been over two years since the last time I've received feedback of this caliber at PokeCommunity. I must say, I greatly appreciate that you also took the time to review my entire series. I'm very glad you got a lot of laughs as well as enjoyed the...

Well, that seems like an excellent idea to me. :)

Section #26 -82- The time was 8:35 PM on the clear and tranquil Friday night when the massive S-5 finally touched down in the launch bay of Mack and Aura’s secret underground laboratory. In only a matter of minutes, the Seismic Generator was unloaded from the Heavy Carrier, strapped to the...

Section #25 -80B- Meanwhile, somewhere in the world, Commander Argus and Lord Cyan were being debriefed in a large, dimly-lit room. A shadowed figure was sitting on a golden throne with all his features completely hidden by the darkness. “You have all done very well,” said a deep, ominous...

Section #24 -80A- “Captain Timothy,” said a gruff voice from the back of the huge coliseum dome, “Why have you returned from your patrol so soon and why are all of you so scared? Why, you all look like you’ve seen a ghost.” The coliseum was still very well intact, despite the battle that had...

Section #23 -77- For Cecil and Eric, the going had been slow, yet steady as they cautiously walked down the long and silent corridors. They kept their weapons at the ready, especially after they had faintly heard a blood-curdling scream from somewhere deep in the ruins. “Anyone who says there...

Section #22 -74- Lucca and Gremlin continued their own little expedition into the Cipher facility ruins. The darkness didn’t seem to bother either of the small Pokémon. With a single flashlight to light their way, they moved slowly, but surely, into the wrecked building. “So, let me get this...

Section #21 -72- William was absolutely infuriated. He was lying in one of the large, bay windows of the Gardev mansion. The angered Pikachu was sulking with the horrible memories of Enrique and Anna’s wedding day still fresh on his mind. “And Anna promised she would give me some sort of treat...

Okay. Your grammar needs some work, but one of the bigger problems is the color changes thoughout the text. This makes it somewhat harder to read the story.

Section #20 -70- Anna awoke the next morning as sunlight streamed through the windows of the room. She felt Enrique’s arms wrapped around her torso in a tight embrace. She reached up with her hands and rubbed her eyes a few times, making sure she wasn’t still asleep and in the middle of a...

First off, this is the wrong place to post this. Second, work around here tends to have to be high-end to get a lot reviewing, though you are likely to get feedback whatever the level of quality your story is, but it may take time. It may take months, especially if you're new to the fan-fiction...

Section #19 -69- The wedding guests were not quite sure what to make of the upcoming banquet. For Anna, with her close friends, family and loads of fancy deserts all in the same place, plus her handsome prince at her side, this was as good as heaven on earth for the young Gardevoir bride. Mack...

Section #18 -68- The time was now 11:55 AM and the wedding would start in only a matter of minutes. It was another pleasant, sunny day in Gardev: the bright sunlight was streaming through the immense and colorful stain glass windows. The residents of Gardev would never have even dreamed of...