You mean the story you
posted less than a day ago? It takes time to get responses. Even
I don't get reviews in the same day that I post something unless it's a brand-new story, and sometimes, not even then. Have patience.
In the meantime, I've glanced at your story, and I highly recommend you read
this thread. A story that's only a paragraph long tends not to be a reassurance to the readers. As in, you'll catch more flies with a crapload more honey than a tiny little drop of it that doesn't seem to follow all the laws of being honey.
In simpler terms, if you have only one paragraph in your story (or chapter or whatever), and the reader can easily see that there's a lot of grammar errors, they'll be turned off by it, meaning they're less likely to read it because they think you didn't put effort into it. (And if you don't put effort into it, then they assume it's probably not going to have a well-developed plot.)
So, if you want more readers, clean up your fic.
I apologize for my tone, but yeah, you need a lot of patience if you really want to write.