Sorry about the lack of responses. Anyway, to answer your last question, not too far. I wasn't able to do much writing while I was away.
To answer the others... lulz at the picture. I'm glad I never had to work in fast food. Or a movie theater.
Thanks for the compliments, and about brackets, I think that's one way to do them. Generally, you try to avoid that kind of thing to avoid confusing the reader, though.