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Old December 9th, 2011 (11:01 AM).
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All right, I'll say straight out I'm not great with reviewing poetry as I'm still a bit iffy over rhythm schemes and such, but will do my best. One thing I want to say real quick first though is it's better if you hadn't changed the font and color as the readers will have a hard time reading it depending on the default style they use whenever they come to the forums. Just something to consider!

I think the poem is kind of cute. Ha, of course Snorlax will destroy a bridge, though I have to wonder if he or the other Pokemon considered doing entertainment there is a good idea. @__@ The poem seemed rushed though as you didn't expand upon Wailmer and Snorlax's meeting. The two just talk and that's it. No mention of Wailmer being sorry he heard that or offer some word of advice? Another thing is the last two lines is totally fourth the wall breaking and doesn't relate to the poem at all. It would be better if you have the last line or two conclude the poem better.
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