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January 18th, 2013 (12:30 PM).
I'm going to move this to the Writer's Lounge, since this isn't an actual fanfiction yet. Once you have the story, then you can post it in the main section. But for this, it can go in the Writer's Lounge.
Please, no negative feedback or insults.
I hope you don't mean anything that says something that might not work about your fanfic idea falls under "negative feedback". I can understand not wanting insults because those won't help at all, but feedback that points out some problems with your fic can help you improve as a writer.
As Rafeal said, you do have a lot of characters. Your main traveling party is at least twenty characters to juggle, if you don't count the other Pokemon that weren't listed. Plus you have the six Team Rocket Galactic members to introduce, along with N and Trip. That's a lot of characters to have a comfortable handle on. Each one of them needs to have their story told throughout the plot, and to not feel like an unnecessary addition. You should really ask if every one of those characters
to be in the story. I know you like Lucario and Sir Aaron, but do they have a plot reason to be in the story, or do you want to add them just because you like them?
It's the same with the legendary Pokemon that will be in the team. Do they have a plot reason to travel around with these kids? Or do you just want to write in some legendaries? Remember that since you're writing with a lot of anime characters, you're writing in the anime universe. In that universe, legendary Pokemon are seen as gods. It's not like in the games where any kid can catch one in a Pokeball. In the anime universe, catching legendaries and having them with a trainer can cause serious consequences (depending on who the legendary is). Also, a lot of people are going to be targeting your characters to get their legendary Pokemon. Max, a beginning trainer, won't be exactly safe if someone attacks him alone to get Jirachi.
Which region are you planning on writing in? I ask because you mention Team Plasma being around and the Unova League. But then there's a team around in homage to Team Galactic from Sinnoh, and then you're changing Orre around. What's the story that you're planning on telling, and where does it need to take place?
Speaking of Orre, it kind of already has its own battling centers in the forms of the Colosseums. Also, I'm not sure if Orre can support 700 Pokemon, if you're planning on adding wild Pokemon. Orre's famous for not having wild Pokemon. The climate doesn't support them. Unless you mean that trainers have Pokemon from other regions, which is fine.
This project seems really kind of big, and being too big, it might be too messy to write comfortably. Maybe rethink and tighten the amount of characters, the region, and the plot so that it's smaller. Because not only are over thirty characters a lot for a writer to handle, it's also a lot for a reader to keep in mind, and they'd get confused about who is who and what's going on.
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