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Old October 31st, 2013 (1:38 PM).
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Not bad, but I find some parts of it lacking. I almost confused the History section with the Personality one. You do state of the rate of his growth, but you neglect to mention any important events in his life. It seems as if he spent his whole life in a library. I like the fact that he's scholar-like, but I would expect him to have had more experience with the outside world. Could you make a RP Sample with both Tel and Hender, and also add a bit more detail into History?
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