Poetry & Songs

SeleneHime · Feb 13, 2011

Well ... Time to chance posting some of my non-literature work here ... I don't really write as much of poetry as regular literature, so take it as you will. Any opinions will be much appreciated, though. The thread will be updated as I write them after I'm caught up on what I've already written, so it is questionable as to how often new ones will be posted.

Original-Base Poetry
Form

Missing You
How Can I?
Soaring
Blue Eyes
Lost
Promise

Fox Fire
A Spring Tale
Horse's Love (Present)
Unnamed (Present)
Wanderer (Present)
Sage of Fire (Present)

- Character Perspective (Fanon/Original Both)
Dividing Lines
Scarlet Stars

Freeform

Universe [Below]

Haiku
Kitsune Moon
Kitsune Moon (Draft II)

PKMN: Light
PKMN: Mighty Mouse

Fanpoetry

Legend of Zelda: Into the Shadows
Legend of Zelda: Warrior of Shadows
Legend of Zelda: Shroud to Light

Yugioh: Envoy to the Moonlight Maiden

Elemental Gelade: Katana no Kaze (Sword of Wind)

Songs

Sparrow's Call
Sapphire Skies
Selena's Lullaby [CLC Base]

Based off of a combination of astrological myths, though the idea randomly appeared. ^_^

Universe

Gentle caress of the moonlight, harsh brand of the sunlight.

By the star's light, plight of the solar system ignites.

People of the sun, people of the moon.

War and strife, or peace and light?

Stand and fight, or leave from sight?

Stars and planets unite, but for what right?

To defend the universe, a common enemy born.

Rest not, or risk the fate of the torn.

TJgamer · Feb 13, 2011

It read this poem about three times until I understood its meaning.
It is well written, especially for one who has little experience.
Flaws? ...Nothing major.

Well done! Keep going.

SeleneHime · Feb 13, 2011

*Smiles.* Much appreciated, TJgamer. That poem in paticular is about a year old, but I seem to be opening most of my poetry threads with it now. Probably because its my only freeform one. My earliest poetry dates back to 2008 (Missing You through Blue Eyes), before I started writing regularly. You'll probably see a steep change in quality with those.

But I'm glad that you liked this one. There will be plenty more to come. ^_^

SeleneHime · Feb 14, 2011

While the one that this poem was written for isn't on this forum; here it is -

Promise

From tides in the dark,
Shrouded in fear,
Comes a glimmering arc,
Someone held dear.

Though we are worlds apart,
It is naught,
For two lone hearts,
A love sought.

Forming a gentle dream,
Rarity of blissful peace,
For a perfect team,
Something to never cease,

But a dream it is no more,
Becoming a reality,
A time in which we soar,
From hope to actuality.

We are different but alike,
For our souls react as one,
Capable of such unusual sight,
Hearts forming our own shimmering sun.

It is on this night I make a promise,
To devote my heart,
Only to you, Thomas,
In this journey we start.

TJgamer · Feb 14, 2011

This is just classic!
I always enjoy reading such original poetry.
It's patterns are a tad uneven, but still acceptable.

...Who is this Thomas? A special friend you know?

SeleneHime · Feb 14, 2011

*Smiles.* I was rather nervous about that poem ... It was only the second one I'd written for him. (The first being the one titled "Lost" in the table of contents.)

As for your question ... Yes, he's very special to me.

ToWriteLove · Feb 14, 2011

I really enjoyed both works, you can feel the emotional passion in both. I unfortunately am unable to write works involving someone close, so I couldn't really connect yo the second as much as I could the first with its more wordly connection.

I look forward yo reading more of your poetry.

SeleneHime · Feb 15, 2011

*Smiles.* Thank you for reading them, TWL. Its not often that I manage to write poetry based around the emotions such as "Promise", though (hence the small list in the table of contents). But, there will certainly be plenty more later on. Hopefully, I'll post one a day or so. ^_^

Rai · Feb 15, 2011

Promise is beautiful :3 I love the rhyme scheme. Great job! You are very talented.

SeleneHime · Feb 16, 2011

*Smiles.* Thank you, Rai. I'm glad that you liked it - Its certainly one of my most personal poems yet.

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Ren x Cou

Elemental Gelade: Katana no Kaze
~ Sword of Wind ~

Gentle winds dance through the air,
Creating tenderness and care.
Zephyrs coiling with growing might,
Gracing the world with both power and light.

So few desire to truly combine,
Never looking to your unique shine.
You are but a mere power sign,
To those who seek a weapon divine.

Do others see this emotion?
The chance of everlasting devotion?
Or just a gleaming sword?
Something to rend a painful chord?

As plain as it may be,
The blessed blade is wielded free.
Look past my eyes and you will see,
A promise to be fulfilled by you and me.

So few truly know,
Appreciate your purity of snow.
Only seeing you as a tool of destruction,
Causing much strife and interruption.

Yet one does not have to feel,
To form a preserved appeal,
This creating a peaceful seal,
Still so perfectly real.

We are different but alike,
Capable of such an unusual sight.
For our souls react as one,
Hearts forming our own shimmering sun.

TJgamer · Feb 16, 2011

That was very lovely!
I really enjoyed it!

Now there are a few stanzas in which the lines aren't even. You know, the syllable count.
But the descriptions of everything are just gorgeous. And the rhyming is very well done too.
Keep up the good work!

SeleneHime · Feb 16, 2011

*Smiles.* Hehe, thanks for another comment. I think that the above poem is definitely one of my best, even if it's not precisely inline. *Huggles.* Will do!

SeleneHime · Feb 18, 2011

My first attempt at Haiku, XD. Based off of the Kistune myth, and the minor myths connected to it. Also inspired by Buson's single haiku:
"Was that a fox"
"or a prince in disguise"
"this hazy spring evening?"

I'm not sure if standard grammar for regular poetry applies to haiku, so I used Basho's and Buson's general grammar, XD.

Kitsune Moon - Haiku Quartet

Moonlight graces a
gently lapping sakura
blossom cast pond.

Lady of change,
loyalty and deception.
Myth surrounds thee.

Nine graceful tails,
eyes of amber light,
gleam this spring night.

Love, fox or princess?
Winding trails of fate,
mists of the moon.

Well, I asked the help of my online Oneesan since she's written more haiku than me, and I'm back with the second draft.

~Edited with help of Kazea Tetsujen~

Kitsune Moon (Draft II) - Haiku Quartet

Moonlight graces a
gently lapping sakura
blossom cast river.

Known myth surrounds thee,
O wandering shapeshifter
Only chasing light.

Nine beautiful tails,
Gentle eyes of amber light,
Gleaming this spring night.

Love, fox or princess?
Winding the long threads of fate,
Within veiling mists.

Rai · Feb 18, 2011

This haiku is truly beautiful. I wish I had written it! Great job :3

The only thing that got to me was "sakura blossom cast river." Do you mean a river with blossoms on the surface? If so, I would make it "sakura blossom-cast river." It makes the meaning a little more clear that way.

But either way, this poem is stunning~

SeleneHime · Feb 21, 2011

*Smiles.* Sorry about my late reply, Rai. I'm glad that you liked it, although you do make a good point. *Huggles appreciatively.*

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Light

Gentle Espeon,
granting life of the spring sun
in depths of dusk.

ToWriteLove · Feb 21, 2011

I like this haiku, I get a good visual plus Espeon is one of my favorite Pokemon. The only thing I am really noticing is that I am only coming up with 4 syllables in the last line, I may be miscounting though.

SeleneHime · Feb 21, 2011

Hmm ... I'm not sure ... Haiku isn't my strong point because of the syllable count. (Not sure why, but its harder for me to pick out every single syllable in a word.)

But, I understand your point of view. Espeon is one of my favorites too. ^^

Rai · Feb 22, 2011

I love how you can make a poem about pokemon so beautiful! I've never tried writing a poem about pokemon, but I feel it would come out really corny. You can make anything sound beautiful, it's a gift!

SeleneHime · Feb 22, 2011

XD, thank you, Rai. I honestly didn't think my haikus were that great (aside from grammar, my literary/poetic weakness, XD). But, I'm glad that you enjoyed this little snippet. *Smiles and huggles.*

Miz en Scène · Feb 25, 2011

SeleneHime said:
Gentle Espeon, /granting life of the spring sun /in depths of dusk.

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These characters brought to you courtesy of Google Translate. And now to you, Mizan.

Thank you, alternate personality. Our story tonight, Mizan reviews a haiku and uses a non-standard greeting:

Well hi there. This is going to be a really short review for just one of your Haikus because I'm trying to meet a quota before the 28th. Hope you don't mind because yo get a review in the process. So anyway, overall, I enjoyed the visualizations in the haiku, partially because Espeon is one of my favourites, and partially because of how you used the medium, that is to say haiku, in order to evoke a very succinct sense of natural harmony, the cycle of dusk and dawn also accentuating the notion of peace. The poem wasn't too superfluous and delivered an exact picture of the scene you were trying to convey without delving too deep into specifics, allowing the reader to paint a picture with their own mind rather than have the poet do it for them, as is the convention. That's the beauty of haikus I suppose…

So yes, I quite enjoyed the poem and may also return to do the rest of your poetry if I feel like it. Best of luck.

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