I've finally gotten around to playing the game! So I'll give you some criticism of what I saw throughout.
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To begin, I'd like to say that the game shut off as I was saving in Amplus City (after leaving Khubla Town), meaning I didn't get to finish the game. It said there was insufficient memory. I believe this was because of the other 13 save files in the game at the time. I didn't know how to delete the save files, so I didn't bother with them. But now I wish I had. My save file was completely wiped after this experience. I wish I could have continued playing. :C
To escape this problem in the future, I would suggest deleting ALL saved data already in the game as to allow the player a completely fresh experience.
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Story
I was really intrigued by the idea and thought it was executed well, but it could have been better. At the beginning of the game, I had no clue that the characters knew they were in a game world, making it seem really odd when some NPCs talked about the game itself. I would suggest throwing some back-story at the start of the game, or even have your mother tell you something about the game world, bringing the whole realization to the player at the start, rather than having them find out on their own.
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Script/Dialogue
I thought the script was second-rate. It brought the game down, and could have been a lot better. It needs improvement. None of the characters have any personality in the dialogue--or they do, but it's all the same: that of a 12 year old. Sometimes it seemed very trivial and elementary, especially that of the AIs, which I expected to be high-and-mighty formal figures, who used intricate language and syntax. But they seemed to be childish, just like the player. There were a lot of misspellings, grammar mistakes, syntax errors, and just uses of the wrong words occasionally.
I also thought the usage of curse words was unneeded. Now, don't get me wrong, I have nothing against curse words (I curse all the time), I just thought you got carried away occasionally and used them too much. It didn't help with the dialogue in any way, and actually just made it worse in my opinion.
I would suggest establishing personalities for the characters of the game and weaving that into their dialogue.
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Graphics
I really enjoyed the 2 Gen graphics. I thought it was very nostalgic and worked wonders for the ambiance of the game. I thought you did a great job on the mapping (although there was the occasional area that I wasn't quite fond of).
But I thought the custom graphics could use some work. Namely, the mugshots and the story sequence about the AIs. They don't seem on par with the rest of the game and could use some work. I wasn't fond of the AI trainer sprites either.
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Features
I didn't quite understand how to play the elemental cards game. I'd suggest having a tutorial at the first time you play it, or at least have some directions in the girl's dialogue. I got tired of trying to figure it out after the third time.
I also didn't understand ManMan 2000 until I found the option on the PC. I really liked that feature though. :)
The way of capturing Pokemon was really interesting and exciting. Kudos to you for that. Although I found it odd how others could have Pokemon, unless they were also corrupted Pokemon...which would make sense I guess...But there was the occasional person that talked about catching Pokemon...? Hmm...
I would suggest having a few people scattered around the region that give you a free capture ball, so you can catch a wild Pokemon. I'm not sure, I just thought it was odd that others could catch Pokemon, but you couldn't.
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Overall, I really enjoyed the game! It was the most fun I had playing a fan game in a long time. It was a nostalgic, engaging and exciting game that I would recommend downloading to anyone. I feel like with some editing, it could be even better. :)
~Aquakip