wobbuffetds
Now it's time for my friends!
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- Bronx, New York
- Seen Feb 26, 2012
The story's good, but there are some things that can be fixed to make the thing perfect:
1. Sometimes, after the diolouge, you forget to add the period.
2. It's supposed to be quality over quantity, but adding a little more description into the settings might be better.
3. A tiny bit of editing won't hurt.
I'm a big fan of this thing, overall. Can I be in your friends list? PM me for the next chapter.
1. Sometimes, after the diolouge, you forget to add the period.
2. It's supposed to be quality over quantity, but adding a little more description into the settings might be better.
3. A tiny bit of editing won't hurt.
I'm a big fan of this thing, overall. Can I be in your friends list? PM me for the next chapter.