Adamski148's Pokemon Sprite comic

Thanks, I'll take your advice... and chuck in a dumpster, I hate it when critics come, just leave me to carry on with this on my own, I don't need your criticisms
 
Adam, crits aren't there to 'spite at your comic' They're only telling you the flaws you've done, and they can make you think on how to improve on them. Frankly I agree with vaati with most of his pointers ._.;
 
no wonder you fail so much, what a complete n00b, sheesh...to think i even thought you've became a respectable member...seriously, all the good comic makers actually accept critisism, prehaps your ego has got to your head.
 
Adam please try not to SPAM, and work on critisism, it'll do you good.
 
adamski148 said:
get lost, JUST GET LOST!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Temper Temper, calm down dear its only critizim

Blazin Espio's Revised Review

Plot:
Okay face it its sucky and you cant say its not original but it sucks there are plenty of plot holes to keep a avid fan boy/nerd talking for weeks


Characters:
The only decent one is signomi: she has a quality sprite and thats it fred and bill ripped off versions of butch and whatever and they are to simmalar each other.
Mew as straight away into the comic it worked in pebble version NOT HERE.
Okay and the proffeser wouldn't have given you a golden magikarp they are useless as a starter pokemon even if it was a mew in disguise. And the ash rip off the hat IT BURNS MY EYES there is no shading what so ever, Yes I know you didn't make it but you could shade it atleast, and unless this dudes cosplaying making him look like ash is stupid.
And pokemon fused with people no explanation what so ever

Houses etc:
what vaati said and atleast try and make your own houses to suit the size

Jokes:
You lose

effects:
they aren't the best but I've seen worst from ms paint and better

3.9/10

j00 lose
you can't take critisim, the comic is sucky
not much originality
 
Hey adam, you need to grow a frekking skin, your bashing jarman because he's posting his honest oppinion? We don't just comment to annoy you, in fact we do just the opposite, we HELP you try and be better, and if you can't handle that you might as well stop making comics, because when you post them up here on the internet, your risking that some people won't like it, but posting them here will also help you since they'll point out what you did wrong. Don't like it? Oh well, on to the critique.

The story is bland...at best. It's the exact same generic pokemon trainer storyline that everyone and their mother uses here. You need to figure out a new twist that no one's done before, maybe a trainer's pokemon is murdered, and he seeks revenge maybe? C'mon, be a little more original.

The text boxes and framework are mediocre. You used the lazy, white box at the ottom of the panel style. Again, you could be a little more original with your test box and framework style. Like make the panels over lap etc. You can look at the old super hero comics to see how they set up the comic's framework. Again, very mediocre.

The text is very small and hard to read, might wanna fix that too. Along with the huge amount of text in ONE FREAKING SCENE.

The sprites are the tiny little overworld pokemon sprites that EVERYONE here uses too. C'mon we need more overdone megaman edit comics here.

And the backgrounds are just made with the R/S FR/LG tilesets that, again EVERYONE USES. I'm not saying make your own tilesets, but overworld tilesets are a real turnoff.

Your effects...don't really look like anything, just some lines or blots of grey, cmon, put some more effort! "Kamon" is in the wrong bittage as well (Not 24 bit)

Also, I think jarman should have put a little more explanation as to WHY it was boring.

Then again... I don't think there's a gripping plotline either ;>>

Word, again
 
adamski148 said:
get lost, JUST GET LOST!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Whoa congrats dude! You get your second warning! This time for flaming and spamming,awesome! w00t! And guess what?! There's more! OMFG,yes it's true,there.is.more! One more warning and guess what...!? YOU'RE BANNED! =D
 
_Alex_ said:
Whoa congrats dude! You get your second warning! This time for flaming and spamming,awesome! w00t! And guess what?! There's more! OMFG,yes it's true,there.is.more! One more warning and guess what...!? YOU'RE BANNED! =D
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Man, you Mods are people who hate the Noobs. Just leave adam alone. he's doing his best. I object so don't ban him yet, okay.
 
I was congratulating him,how was that mean? I never said he was going to be banned I just said one more warning and he's banned.
 
okay, but if thay carry on, say g'bye to this comic, but I'll carry on the comic in PM's to people who PM me to have the story continued.
 
so we do not care, go somewhere else and do sonmewhere
Edit: Lookie I got a new Avatar
 
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