Hey adam, you need to grow a frekking skin, your bashing jarman because he's posting his honest oppinion? We don't just comment to annoy you, in fact we do just the opposite, we HELP you try and be better, and if you can't handle that you might as well stop making comics, because when you post them up here on the internet, your risking that some people won't like it, but posting them here will also help you since they'll point out what you did wrong. Don't like it? Oh well, on to the critique.
The story is bland...at best. It's the exact same generic pokemon trainer storyline that everyone and their mother uses here. You need to figure out a new twist that no one's done before, maybe a trainer's pokemon is murdered, and he seeks revenge maybe? C'mon, be a little more original.
The text boxes and framework are mediocre. You used the lazy, white box at the ottom of the panel style. Again, you could be a little more original with your test box and framework style. Like make the panels over lap etc. You can look at the old super hero comics to see how they set up the comic's framework. Again, very mediocre.
The text is very small and hard to read, might wanna fix that too. Along with the huge amount of text in ONE FREAKING SCENE.
The sprites are the tiny little overworld pokemon sprites that EVERYONE here uses too. C'mon we need more overdone megaman edit comics here.
And the backgrounds are just made with the R/S FR/LG tilesets that, again EVERYONE USES. I'm not saying make your own tilesets, but overworld tilesets are a real turnoff.
Your effects...don't really look like anything, just some lines or blots of grey, cmon, put some more effort! "Kamon" is in the wrong bittage as well (Not 24 bit)
Also, I think jarman should have put a little more explanation as to WHY it was boring.
Then again... I don't think there's a gripping plotline either ;>>
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