Cineris Titan Academy OOC

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What does it mean on the main thread when it says "form time"? Or is it already changed? *flips to thread*
 
lol or would you........XD jk. I actually thought of a replacement teacher that would be suspected but she wouldn't be evil.
 
Form Time is like Role call, Notices etc.
 
So where do the teachers sleep by the way?
 
They own homes on the island.
 
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finished intro post, glad that's out of the way 0_0

FrozenSnowman, tell me if you want to edit Kris' dialouge.
 
ok Raffine shall call her Psychic Merlee and she'll be notified of the injuries by that, she wont care for rumours but she will get lots of threats, she'll see you in the infirmary, and this time she takes down Adam herself for revenge. After he stops her. but she'll also get bad rep around the school.
 
Black Pendulum Rayquaza said:
Savanna got off the boat. Venonat was close behind. "Venon!" Venonat said, amazed by the large building. Savanna took out a paper with the times and schedules on it. "Time for breakfast Venonat." Savanna said. Venonat was happy. They looked for the cafeteria. It was about 23 minutes until they found the cafeteria finally. Venonat couldnt wait to eat. Venonat and Savanna ate some of the leftover food from the boat. After they were done, Savanna took out the scedule.

"We have to find our room now Venonat. I think this will probably take longer then last time..." Savanna sighed. She started walking around the large building with Venonat. They searched for about 40 minutes until they finally found it. They went in and got un-packed. Savanna un-packed many things such as a comb for Venonat, a box of Poffins and Pokeblocks, and some clean clothes. These were all put under her bed. "Theres that, now what..." said Savanna, pulling out the schedule again.

"I guess we can just see when our classes are right here." Savanna said. "Venon..." said Venonat. "I signed us up for Battle Training 101, Mythology 101, Cooking 101 and Survival 101. It looks like all of them are in the list today." Savanna said, suprised. "Venonat..." said Venonat, tired from the long boat ride. "Ok Venonat, we can rest... but you better hope someone wakes us up for these classes." Savanna said, passing out on the bed with Venonat next to her.

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I deleted my last post due to posting too early. >.<;

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I just remembered that I wont be able to post for a while tomorrow because I am going to Long Island for a Traction. I also might have a Fusion.

>.<;

Just telling you why. =P
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BPR, I notice that you tend to list things and keep your sentences very short, leaving no room for elaborating on most things, or on anything, for that matter. While short, quick, and to the point sentences do help to convey a message of fast action and excitement, in excess it also tends to be quite boring and lacking, making your roleplaying seem subpar in comparison to those who add some description into their posts, which help the post to seem less choppy.

Take this section for example:

Black Pendulum Rayquaza said:
Venonat was happy.
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That really could be elaborated upon to tell the reader how Venonat showed its happiness. Happy is really too general a term, instead, you could write something like.

"Venonat bobbed up and down joyfully and in anticipation upon hearing Savanna's words. The prospect of food obviously delighted the small purple Pokemon, who gave a small, eager squeak."
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See how that conveyed the message to the reader that Venonat was happy in a way other than coming forward and stating it? That's really what roleplayers should try to do in their posts, it'll give it more flow and help the post seem much less choppy. Its not a crime to come straight up and say what your character or their Pokemon is feeling, but it usually isn't a good idea to resort to things like "She was happy." or "He was sad." Every single time you wanted to tell the reader of your character or their Pokemon's feelings. By the way, please don't take this personally or as an offense, I merely just want to help you improve your roleplaying.
 
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Wow. Damien's turning into a real ladies' man. I think imma' usher Midian out of there, fast, before it gets ugly. >) She's in no state for a free for all Brawl with two other Gifteds, but I don't think I could bring myself to fight GP anyways, even if it was fake. When I try to picture it, I imagine Yuki and Midi standing like, two feet away from each other, trying to slap each other violently, but just ending up like Boxing competitors in the Special Olympics. Okay, that wasn't nice. I didn't mean it like that, but still. You get the picture. Anyways, I wanna' make her seem like Zorro and just up and disappear out the window, so Damien can't even be positive if he imagined her or not. And like, leave a rose or something. Or am I thinking of something else?

Ha. I am. V For Vendetta Ftw.

Btw, now that something's been brought up about it, I agree with Twenty Six. Nothing's wrong with the length, and I see potential there for it to be a winning post, such as you at least attempting to use some small details, BPR. Which is good, but there's no shame in spending more than a few minutes on a single post. I only expect to post about once every few days anyways. for obvious reasons. Anyways, speaking of which, i'll probably go do another here in a minute, but not long, because Form time hasn't even started yet. Or has it? =/
 
Random question: is it at all possible for someone Elizabeth knows to come to the school in the evening? They would have come in on a Wailord XD
Elizabeth needs a roomie...
 
Lol yes that would be awesome. Your roomate would have a big whale
 
I actually thought there should be a teacher coming in as well, replacing miss lola, she'll be suspected but shes not bad. and maybe Mira, it could be a best friend who was ur neighboor.
 
heheh, I had a different person in mind...
I was just asking if that was okay, but I'll probably just post and edit as needed :)
 
I don't think there's anything wrong with another character arriving; just keep it within sense. As for Miss Lola, dunno if other teachers or NPC's are taking over her classes yet.
 
What are the classes schedule?

I'm deciding if Silver should sleep in or not...
 
Check the main thread for Classes PP.
 
Just so everyone knows, my post is in progress, cause I just read it over on word and it failed. So yeah. But expect it up sooner or later (hopefully sooner)
 
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Don't mean to sound pushy, but, a little birdie, or rather a kitty told me that if Eletj doesn't post soon, he'll soon be facing the wrath of the Sniping Feline. So make a post! >/
 
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