Cynthia/Shirona Fanclub

[Crazy Packers Fan]

That's okay, I wouldn't understand it anyway. Just please tell me it's better than her English voice, which is too high and nice-sounding.

 

[Psychic*Absol]

Apparently, it takes them a few days to upload a video. Oo Maybe next Monday or so...
Ehehehe...no. Her German voice is high and friendly, too.^^ Maybe it sounds a bit more mature and older than the English one, but not by much.
Cynthia's grandma has a nice voice, though. I like her. ^.^

 

[Crazy Packers Fan]

That's a shame. I wish for Cynthia to sound more like Lorelei/Prima, having a mature, mid-20's voice. She's just way too nice for me in the English episodes.

 

[Psychic*Absol]

I don't know about Loreley's English voice, but I doubt hers and Cynthia's sound alike. Cynthia sounds way too young.
Ahm, review time.Title: I thought it would be obvious, yet, you surprised me there. You really did. Sabrina does not die. Yay?

"Some queen you'll be," Diane muttered, as Lucian helped her up from the ground.

I find it interesting that it's Lucian who helps her up.

"There was only one woman in this family chosen as royalty, and that was me," Cynthia said. "You just were never cut out to be royalty."

Hm, only one woman...what about the men?

Diane simply sighed. "I wish you luck, Queen Sister," she said.

Deep sarcasm, I suppose.

Karen had managed to gather not only 100 or so Team Rocket members, but over a thousand Sinnoh citizens.

Oh, great team. Yet nothing against Cynthia. >>

"I'm her sister, and I will defend her throne," Diane stated. "You will all die!"

You know, she could turn against Cynthia and join forces with Karen, yet...

The people began to be sucked inside as well, and they cried out in terror.

Death count rising and rising...

"I'm the leader of this operation!" Karen yelled. "I give the orders!"

...just as usual...

But you chose this ending, to kill your own people in death, so congratulations.

Even though she's wrong, I kinda like what Karen is saying here...

"Cynthia, you'll die!" Lucian screamed.

"That's Queen Cynthia to you, boy," Cynthia replied.

Even in such a scene, she's a queen-like as always.

No person should be able to survive such an attack

...yet Cynthia survives. Yay....not. >>

"Absolutely!" Karen exclaimed. "We have removed the biggest threat in the history of your land. Now you can all live in peace!"

Heheh, haven't we?

"Though I believe new leadership for Sinnoh is in order…"

...why do I have the sudden feeling that the new queen will be a darkling as well?

She then used every bit of power she had to swallow the giant beast right into the black hole that she had created.

...Cynthia, now killing legendaries...the very ones she loves in both the anime and the game..yep, great fic. XD!

"I am now the most powerful woman in the world."

...P*A not happy. Not happy at all.

"You see, Lucian, I just swallowed the guardian of time into my body. I shall now never age, never grow old.

...I wouldn't mind this so much if it were just for her beauty to stay, yet, with all the powers that come with that...

A girl opened her eyes, finding herself in an unknown place. She could not care less that she was completely lost. She was alive. And now she had an ability that she never knew she had before. Now she only hoped to use it, in a way that would be most satisfying.

Diane?
Other part of the review, the one with Sabrina, will be in the other club, as soon as I can post there again. ^^

 

[Crazy Packers Fan]

So, what do you think? Cynthia now has the power of a legendary Pokemon. She has stopped time for herself, she has the ability to live forever (assuming no one kills her first). She will start making others do whatever she wants, more than ever before, as she will need to only wish for something to happen in order for it to come true. She has everything she wants now, right? Is there anyone or anything that could possibly stop her? Or is the rest of the fic simply going to be about Cynthia continuing to get her way?

Meanwhile, there's poor Lucian. The man's been through it all, and he's so humble by now that you wonder if he even cares about his own self anymore. What does Lucian truly want, and will he ever get it? Those questions are to be answered later. New chapter tomorrow, much Cynthia, no Sabrina.

 

[Psychic*Absol]

Before you read this...beware, I may have been overcritical a bit here, I *love* your story, yet sometimes, I have to be a bit harsher. Please, don't think I hate your story or think you are a bad writer, no, I really don't.

She has stopped time for herself, she has the ability to live forever.

Forever young comes to mind...at least this is something I like about her powers.

(assuming no one kills her first).

Yes. Assuming no one kills her. Or nothing kills her.

as she will need to only wish for something to happen in order for it to come true.

Now...first, if this is really what is happening right now, then you can nearly forget the story. >> In this case, there is nothing that can stop her anymore, really nothing, because she can simply make anything that displeases her disappear. I have never complained about Cynthia being overpowers before. Now I do.

She has everything she wants now, right?

Assuming how you worded this... no.

Or is the rest of the fic simply going to be about Cynthia continuing to get her way?

Hopefully, not, because then it is, allow me to be blunt. Boring. Nothing really new happening anymore, aside from Cynthia finding now ways to torture people and have fun. Nope, not what I call an amusing read.

What does Lucian truly want, and will he ever get it?

I guess he just wants Cynthia's love, and will he ever get it? I don't know, his wife lost her sanity chapters ago...

New chapter tomorrow, much Cynthia, no Sabrina.

Me not likes, but okay, me it biased.

BTW...okay, now it feels selfish to ask this after all this criticism...can you spare the legendaries? (Darkrai and Giratina) I might been them for later. 0=)

 

[Crazy Packers Fan]

From what you've written, it appears that you have no guess as to what's going to happen next, and that's better for me. You seem to believe the rest of the story's going to be about Cynthia getting whatever she wants. In other words, you have no idea where the plot's going next. (So the stuff that you're critical of just isn't going to happen.)

I will forewarn you... the story's going to start using some characters other than Sabrina/Will/Liza and Cynthia/Lucian (gasp!). There is one legendary I need, one which may surprise you. It is the key to the rest of the plot.

 

[Psychic*Absol]

Yes, you're right, I have no idea about what is going to happen, but that shouldn't stop me from naming the things I don't want to see, now, should it? Of course I did not try to critize your actual future plot, because I don't know anything about it, but there are things I don't want to see, and I named these. Happy now? XD
(I said 'If this is the case', not 'when this is the case', or how you would word it...)
And one thing still stays: Cynthia *is* overpowered now, no matter what way your plot takes. >> Except if you strip her of all her powers, but knowing you...
Ajech, now I have complained so much and not even started to read the next chapter. XD Next post, okay? 0=)

 

[Crazy Packers Fan]

Hey, you have to imagine that I'm writing for more than one person here, right? I give you lots of fanservice to try to please you, so try not to be too upset when I cater to my second-favorite character (behind Giselle of course). I've even kept Sabrina alive. Cynthia may be very powerful, but unless the story ends with her conquering the world, I don't think she's too powerful.

 

[Psychic*Absol]

XD Okay, okay, I'm sorry for complaining so much. ^^;;; I should remember that I'm not your only reader, but sometimes, I tend to forget, sorry. ^^;;;
You sure have changed your opinion about this, ehehe...
Anway, review time. ^^
Title: The obvious, eh? XD

who firmly believed that Cynthia had killed herself as well as hundreds of Sinnoh trainers who came to attack her.

Idiot

"I don't think there was anything wrong with a queen running the show, it was the woman who made herself the queen who was the problem."

The queen is dead, long live the queen! ...heck, this is a great sentence, should remember it for my future fic, hm? B-)

Lucian would probably consider her both,

XD! And not only Lucian!

"Come on, what can she do to us from here?" Silver asked.

Alas, a lot.

"Don't worry, your pain will subside in about an hour," she stated. "That's for all of you who refused to bow to your queen."

"Is she speaking only to us, or to everyone?" Gold wondered.

I think to all, but that doesn't make it any less creepier. o,o

There the finest builders of this land will go to work on building me a new castle, one where I can rule over all of you. Bring gold – as much as there is in this land. Your queen deserves everything you have, all your effort, all your gold, all your respect.

...insanity? Check. Power-hunger? Check. Weirdness? Check. Villain-ness? Check. There's nothing that your Cynthia doesn't have...

"I will bring in Lucian to demonstrate how a citizen must treat his queen,"

Great, he gets the honour of being the try out puppet. >>

"And remember, Lucian is my husband," Cynthia stated. "I expect no less respect from him than I do from all of you."

Lucian began to get up, but Cynthia pointed to the ground, so he remained with his head facing the floor.

"I did not tell you that you may rise, boy," Cynthia said. "You need to show more respect for your queen."

Any normal human being would say that these two things contradict each other, yet, no ones claims that your Cynthia is a normal human being anymore...

"Any human being in the land of Sinnoh that does not reach the top of the mountain in one week shall die, no matter what the circumstances. I warn you since I am a merciful queen."

....merciful....'okay'....you forgot insane.

"You used to be a respectable woman,

When? >>

"The only difference between you and me is our power… oh, and I guess my extraordinary beauty."

*giggles* I guess this is kinda true.

"I will never kill my friend," Cynthia stated.

Sabrina should try to become her friend...*hides quickly*

I wish for all of you to live, though, so that I may have as many people as possible bow down before me.

I wonder...what would happen if no one came, and all of Sinnoh's citizins would die? Wouldn't Cynthia get a bit...ehm, angry then? XD

"That's impossible," Giselle stated. "No human being is that powerful."

Cynthia =/= human being 0=)

"Well, it's worked, I'm scared," Joe said.

Little grammar mistake..."it worked".

he scolded her like a father would scold his daughter.

Hm, will Joe have a daughter? 0=)

"Our theory is that she used your battle with Palkia to judge how she would have to go about gaining the powers of another such powerful Pokémon… such as Dialga."

o,o Whoah, you use the battle with Palkia as another plot devise...clever boy you are. XD!

"I don't care if I die, I shall never bow my head or knee before anyone!" Giselle shouted.

Well, it's a way of dealing with this...

"There aren't many Pokémon that could possibly stand up against Dialga or do a thing against that sort of power."

*mumbles something about one two that surely could, but doesn't name them*

"Then we're doomed," Giselle said in a joking manner. "Oh, well, I'm still the champion, so who cares?"

...ehm, everyone else?

The Elite Four will bring in a different expert to gather information about what we should do."

A different expert...hm...

"What this will all come down to is me beating this woman with my Pokémon, which I most certainly will,"

*sweatdrops*

 

[Crazy Packers Fan]

Okay, notes on the next two chapters, since this one was merely a bridge to "SHIRONA!!!"

Chapter 28 was really fun to write. Cynthia finally gets what she wants, and then the "expert" is brought in, creating a fun love triangle. Not only that, but you'll be shocked to see who the expert thinks is going to be the big hero.

Chapter 29 was a necessity to write after I started feeling really bad for a certain character. So lots of fanservice, basically, but after a moment that you most certainly won't like...

I never thought about the possibility of everyone refusing to show up, and thus Cynthia killing them all. But the people value their lives too much to try to spite Cynthia, so they do whatever they can to please her. Of course, as Lucian knows, when you please Cynthia she only just wants more from you.

 

[Psychic*Absol]

First, today no review, as I have to get to bed in half an hour and had twelve hours of school today...x.x

*raises eyebrow* Love triangle? WTF?...and a big hero being not one I expect him/her/it to be? Hm, very interesting indeed...

....I so hope it's not the one character I fear again...>> If it's Lucian, it's okay, the poor guy got enough torture in both of our fics. I suppose the moment I won't like will have something to do with Sabrina, because otherwise, it wouldn't be something I don't like.

Heheh, it just occured to me that this could be a very bad outcome for Cynthia, as she would have no one to bow to her anymore. XD

And...most important thing today. =3 I got something for you again. Not much, but well...
https://www.pokito.de/pvp/pokemon/ --> click link, then either episode 564 or 565 and tata, after fasting forward a bit (only first episode), you have Cynthia's German voice. =3

 

[Crazy Packers Fan]

I'm so disappointed, but then again, I got like 12 hours of sleep, so I can't complain...

Just tell me the character you fear, it's too late for me to change it now. I can pretty much guarantee it isn't that character, whoever he/she is.

Chapter 30 should have something to do with freeing Sabrina from the ball she's been stuck in for a while now.

 

[Psychic*Absol]

...I got five hours of sleep, so, yeah, no complaining here either, just yawning.

Well, either Lucian, Sabrina and/or Will. Doubt it's anything else. Especially not Cynthia.

Like Cynthia finding her and killing her? Well, if Will frees Sabrina, and he said he would do that only in a 'peaceful' world, then I suppose something had been done about Cynthia...

 

[Crazy Packers Fan]

Time for a fun video...

Cynthia Caramelldansen

If you don't know this song, then you obviously have never been to an anime con before... where every five minutes suddenly people start flapping their hands and singing to this song. It's sort of ridiculous but even I have caught on to it. Especially after I saw Cynthia doing it...

 

[Psychic*Absol]

OMG, OMG, oh, my, god...you don't know this, but...Zammy should remember. Ah...where to start...
I was talking with Zammy via MSN and at the same time talking about anime songs. And, more or less by accident, we started talking about Hare Hare Yukai and then, logically, about Caramelldansen. Which I was very, very, obsessed to. And still am.
And Zammy says (kinda): This is because of the Cynthia version.
Which I was watching at the very second.
Little mind reader. XD!
So, yes, I do know this video. =3 It was the one that got me obsessed with Caramelldansen. I need to download it somewhere. =3

On the bad side...I fear no review today. >.< Really, really, really sorry, but I have so much school work that I'm still working on my homework as I'm writing this (and theoretically, I have to go to bed in one hour >.<), plus, I fear a headache is just starting. >.< So, maybe tomorrow. Though I have twelve hours of school tomorrow, too. I'm not sure, but I'll try tomorrow, it depends on how I feel in the end.

 

[Crazy Packers Fan]

So you have seen this before? Awesome. Cynthia + Caramelldansen = Win.

You're killing me, P*A... but I'll keep on writing the chapters, and they'll just get posted slower, as I'll wait for you. Hopefully you feel better.

 

[Psychic*Absol]

Well, maybe there could be a bit more moves, I mean, just flapping with your hands gets boring after a while. The music makes up for it.

>>;;; I'm killing you? Nah, I can't, I'm already dead, killed by Cynthia and/or school. And my headache. I'm only posting because I want to beat Zammy, lol. Posting =/= reviewing. I need to be more awake to review, which is something I certainly lack right now.

 

[Crazy Packers Fan]

Well, the Hare Hare Yukai beats the Caramelldansen any day, but I have to admit, I've warmed up to the Caramelldansen, got a little addicted to playing it.

Ha ha, killed by Cynthia. No, I think she'd have mercy on you. Though I hope to see a review from you on Thursday...

 

[Psychic*Absol]

Hare Hare Yukai looks too complicated for me...and it lacks the 'pop music' factor Caramelldansen has. And it lacks a video with Cynthia. XD!
Cynthia? Having mercy on me? >> Why do I doubt this so much?

Small review today, but sadly, just a small one. x.x I could fall asleep on the keyboard anymomentrightnow...zzzZzzzz....

Title: Okay, both you and Zammy will hear from my lawyer. This is getting ridiculous, it's my trademark cry! XD

Yet one visitor was more surprising than all the rest… Cynthia's little sister Diane.

Not really surprising...*hides*

I knew that you could escape if you truly wanted to.

*sweatdrops* Typical for your Cynthia...

Diane hung her head as she walked away, wishing her own sister was not so cruel.

We all do, we all do...0=)

Was Cynthia so proud now that she chose to speak only in the third person?

No, addressing yourself in third person is a common sign of insanity.

And any of you who refuses to bow, or lifts his or her head before your queen gives you the word, shall die immediately,

Yep, won't take long until she has no one who can bow to her anymore because everybody will be dead.

feeling as if he had lost all his dignity.

*Now* he does?

continuing on for several months

Several months? Oookay, by now, Roxy should be old enough to notice that something is missing. XD!

She had everything she wanted… or did she?

...well, there's not much she can get anymore. Oo

champion Giselle gave little concern. The only thing on her mind was the Pokémon League tournament

*no comment*

"Thankfully my dark mist is enough that it stops her from reading the thoughts of anyone in this building," Karen stated.

Hm, just this building? What's with the rest of the land?

This situation is so severe that if someone does not figure a way of neutralizing Cynthia's power

I hope someone does mean that the author knows how to write it himself, too. XD

"Roxanne," Joe said.

*insert very surprised Absol here*

"We broke up," Roxanne cut Giselle off. "Brawly and I are through."

*scribbles something into her notebook*

It is the great Arceus,

Two great minds thought alike. ^.~

If this is the great time of need, then that island will become visible to the people who Arceus wishes to find it

Hm, there are such islands in the Pokemon world, yet at the very first moment, I thought of the torn world. It's not the torn world, is it? Please don't let it be the torn world, I want to introduce it. ;.;

Roxanne became furious at Giselle. "Do you believe in anything?" she questioned Giselle.

"I thought we had freedom of beliefs," Giselle shot back.

*snickers* We have, we have...

At that moment, she knew something was wrong,

Arceus working together with Cynthia? No, better not. >.<

But they… literally came out of their coffins and then teleported to me.

o,o I wouldn't exactly call this story 'emotional', rather...creepy. But heck, this is Cynthia's family, what do you expect? XD Roy will be the only normal one of them. o,o
Yeah, sorry abotu shortness of this review, but I'm tired. x.x