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Dark kindness

Kishijoten

CEO of trouble making~
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    Your so oh easy going and
    you are being loved. Like by
    everyone and I mean like
    every single one.
    You have long hair and I have
    messy hair. You have the
    beauty and I have the hatred
    one. Everyone hugs you
    while everyone glares at me
    oh so silently with teasing
    eyes that makes me cries.

    You have the kindess
    I have the anger
    You own the beauty while I
    own the dumps.
    Everyone says they "love you"
    while I'm the hated one.
    You have awsome blogs while
    I'm stucked with the awful ones.

    Your like the queen of England
    while I'm the hatred maid
    of your beautiful home where
    I hate.
    You put on make up while I put on dirt.
    Oh yes your kindess is quit
    poisnous to me.
    Being so nice throughout the
    year as I get angrier as you
    say all those nice things
    about me and the colourful
    scene surrounding your beauty.

    Thus I regret everything the
    nicer you are the worseir
    my hatred get's.

    this poem is about Midori chi and me.
     
    Am I right in guessing that English is not your first language?

    This isn't a criticism, I'm just genuinely curious.
     
    Spearow said:
    Am I right in guessing that English is not your first language?

    This isn't a criticism, I'm just genuinely curious.
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    Nope, I'm asian. And thanks for the correction?. First chinese/english/japanese (kinda)
    yes, english wasn't my first langauge. to answer your question.
     
    "You put on make up while I put on dirt."

    lol, that line was so funny. XD

    Interesting comparison .... too bad I don't have an opinion on the real thing XD
     
    Yup that's right "You put on make up while I put on dirt". Is what I came up with. Thanks for pointing that out 22sa...I know what it means XD.
     
    cookie ☆ said:
    Um, let's see. The poem has very little flow, but you clump your "stanzas" together and they are way out of order. Order is important in poetry.
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    Hm, alright from your point of view I suppose order is somewhat important in poetry.
     
    cookie ☆ said:
    No, order is important in almost ALL of poetry. Go look up Diamontes. Haikus. Tonkas. Cinquains. They all have a set order.

    I'm afraid you're wrong. It isn't in my view, it's the view of poetry.

    Whether you like it or not. :3
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    So, what your saying is like half of the poetry are "suppose" to be in order?...well whether I like it or not I can always make the best of it. ;3
     
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