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Goatman56

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    yes I did but I can't fit 4 people on the same thing so choose which ones u want
     

    Logmon1

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    • Ok how bought Vageta and Cell.
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    Look collsly at the window.
     
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    Logmon1

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    • Ya say was he DPing alot when you two got parid? And now the momit you'v all been waiting for! *Erey music plays*
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    It... It's Alive!
     
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    • Hmmm A pretty good effect for fusion in paint, but you need to improve on a lot of things.

    First, Spelling. I am presuming that Oh shot is Oh Shoot

    Vageta is Vegeta

    Goko is Goku
    I won't kill you on the names because everyone has a different way... But you really have to work on your spelling. And also, make panels (not panuls). Proper Panels with the line tool. It looks much more neat and professional.

    I advise you to do textboxes, it gives you a much better idea of who's speaking.
     

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    • Listen, this is to help you improve. I have used your most recent comic and I have made remarks on the grammar. Of course, if you want to continue your comic like this and never really improve I can't stop you. I'm not saying that your comic is bad. I'm just saying how you can improve.

    In the First Panel, 'What Happened?' Who is saying 'What Happened' Is it Goku or Vegeta? In the 2nd panel who is saying 'What The?' And in the 3rd Panel, is Goku and Vegeta saying Oh Come On as if they think Frieza and Coola are doing something stupid? Or if Frieza telling Coola to fuse with him?
     

    Sawyer

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    • yes, it matters. also, you really need to improve your spelling. "oh shot" was where i got confuzzled.
     

    Sawyer

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    • no logmon1, it's not flaming, i'm telling you how to IMPROVE. I'm telling you where i got confused, but if you'd rather argue with me, that's fine.
     

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    • Its not considered rude if someone gives you advice. Spelling does need more work. Have you seen a real sprite comic? One that is really famous? If you haven't, you should. I'm thinkin of doing a Sprite Comic guide sometime soon.
     
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