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DBZ comic

yes I did but I can't fit 4 people on the same thing so choose which ones u want
 
hah they've arrived on Namek!!I think Goku said 'are we there yet?'
 
What???? oh i see it now, good job logmon keep it up!
 
So am I, StarWars would alreaqdy have them to you Logmon, but he got banned for awhile.......... they need to hurry up dont they Logmon?
 
Ok, yes he was DP alot when we got paired.........
 
Hmmm A pretty good effect for fusion in paint, but you need to improve on a lot of things.

First, Spelling. I am presuming that Oh shot is Oh Shoot

Vageta is Vegeta

Goko is Goku
I won't kill you on the names because everyone has a different way... But you really have to work on your spelling. And also, make panels (not panuls). Proper Panels with the line tool. It looks much more neat and professional.

I advise you to do textboxes, it gives you a much better idea of who's speaking.
 
Listen, this is to help you improve. I have used your most recent comic and I have made remarks on the grammar. Of course, if you want to continue your comic like this and never really improve I can't stop you. I'm not saying that your comic is bad. I'm just saying how you can improve.

In the First Panel, 'What Happened?' Who is saying 'What Happened' Is it Goku or Vegeta? In the 2nd panel who is saying 'What The?' And in the 3rd Panel, is Goku and Vegeta saying Oh Come On as if they think Frieza and Coola are doing something stupid? Or if Frieza telling Coola to fuse with him?
 
yes, it matters. also, you really need to improve your spelling. "oh shot" was where i got confuzzled.
 
I think its great logmon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 
no logmon1, it's not flaming, i'm telling you how to IMPROVE. I'm telling you where i got confused, but if you'd rather argue with me, that's fine.
 
Its not considered rude if someone gives you advice. Spelling does need more work. Have you seen a real sprite comic? One that is really famous? If you haven't, you should. I'm thinkin of doing a Sprite Comic guide sometime soon.
 
Funny logmon.................................................................*Bad Frieza!!!!!*
 
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