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<i><font color="b1373f">The Lonely Physicist</font
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Ok,so it failed at Serebiiforums,im gonna need advice on it to improve it.The title is "Toon Intersection, Pokemon style.The Reality of Disney"
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It was not too long ago, the 3 main Toon Groups, Disneyans, Looney Tunes, and The United Anime, got bored. They hoped one day they could go with some other universe and play. One day, The Disneyans and Looney Tunes came up with a city called Toon Intersection, little could they realize, they were thinking exactly the same.
With their powers that go against the laws of physics, The Disneyans and Looney Tunes started on half and half on the city, when reached the area that could be Downtown, they met. Their leaders, Mickey Mouse and Bugs Bunny had set a treaty that the whole town would be shared by both.
What became of The United Anime? Nobody knew until 1996, when Pokemon was born. The United Anime got brighten up and got used to their boring-now-exciting pointy nosed life.
Nintendo, a sub Toon Group had some concerns about Pokemon being with The United Anime too. Why? Mario, the leader of Nintendo had the answer, but never revealed it. Even his semi enemy Wario was worried.
This was how Toon Intersection came to be. For many years the town was happy… or so it seemed. A few from Looney Tunes suspected that Disney, had something to hide.
Underground in a burrow, is a global favorite, Bugs Bunny. Now he is sleeping, and dreaming.
"Why, where am I?!" exclaimed Bugs. He stared around realizing he was in Disney's tower base of Toon Intersection. With his curiosity killing him, he entered the tower base. It seemed forsaken, so Bugs Bunny explored. He realized the elevators worked, he entered one. "'Mickey top '? Where could this be?" said Bugs. He pushed the button and away he went. It took 10 minutes, but it was worth it.
When he got to the top he saw Mickey, Donald, and Goofy, working, on something. He eavesdropped carefully.
"Sooner or later, this project will be done, hehehehe." started Mickey "If we're careful, we will win everything. And firstly, get rid of ALL the toon groups."
"And use this project to get rid of The Looney Tunes!!!" blurted Goofy. His voice seemed to echo.
"Quiet blurt mouth!" whispered Mickey "They might hear us!"
Bugs Bunny didn't have to eavesdrop anymore, he knew they were breaking the treaty. "Oh My God!!" blurted Bugs suddenly. He covered his mouth, but Donald turned and spotted him "Intruder!" he screamed. Bugs fainted. He found himself in bed. "Oh no!" he said "Why, Disney? Why?"
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Toon Intersection
Pokemon Style
The Reality of Disney
Chapter 1: Toon Intersection's birth.
It was not too long ago, the 3 main Toon Groups, Disneyans, Looney Tunes, and The United Anime, got bored. They hoped one day they could go with some other universe and play. One day, The Disneyans and Looney Tunes came up with a city called Toon Intersection, little could they realize, they were thinking exactly the same.
With their powers that go against the laws of physics, The Disneyans and Looney Tunes started on half and half on the city, when reached the area that could be Downtown, they met. Their leaders, Mickey Mouse and Bugs Bunny had set a treaty that the whole town would be shared by both.
What became of The United Anime? Nobody knew until 1996, when Pokemon was born. The United Anime got brighten up and got used to their boring-now-exciting pointy nosed life.
Nintendo, a sub Toon Group had some concerns about Pokemon being with The United Anime too. Why? Mario, the leader of Nintendo had the answer, but never revealed it. Even his semi enemy Wario was worried.
This was how Toon Intersection came to be. For many years the town was happy… or so it seemed. A few from Looney Tunes suspected that Disney, had something to hide.
Chapter 2: Why, Disney? Why?
Underground in a burrow, is a global favorite, Bugs Bunny. Now he is sleeping, and dreaming.
"Why, where am I?!" exclaimed Bugs. He stared around realizing he was in Disney's tower base of Toon Intersection. With his curiosity killing him, he entered the tower base. It seemed forsaken, so Bugs Bunny explored. He realized the elevators worked, he entered one. "'Mickey top '? Where could this be?" said Bugs. He pushed the button and away he went. It took 10 minutes, but it was worth it.
When he got to the top he saw Mickey, Donald, and Goofy, working, on something. He eavesdropped carefully.
"Sooner or later, this project will be done, hehehehe." started Mickey "If we're careful, we will win everything. And firstly, get rid of ALL the toon groups."
"And use this project to get rid of The Looney Tunes!!!" blurted Goofy. His voice seemed to echo.
"Quiet blurt mouth!" whispered Mickey "They might hear us!"
Bugs Bunny didn't have to eavesdrop anymore, he knew they were breaking the treaty. "Oh My God!!" blurted Bugs suddenly. He covered his mouth, but Donald turned and spotted him "Intruder!" he screamed. Bugs fainted. He found himself in bed. "Oh no!" he said "Why, Disney? Why?"
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