Fanfiction of the Month (October): Pocket Monsters Chronicles PG-14

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Good. Probably the best script fic and I can like many others, imagine it as an anime... I noticed it in Serebii Forums a long time ago but I don't go there anymore... Good... Where can I find chapters 7 and 8 now that you've taken them down?
 
they are reposted later on. Read what I said in the first post.
 
This is great! :D :D I really like the Treecko, although--is there a reason why his voice is so deep, when other Pokemon that learned to spoke have their original voices? I guess he isn't like them? Well, you'll reveal it eventually in the course of later chapters! Well, actually, I haven't read them all yet, so maybe you already have... :surprised This is the kind of story I'd love to see visualized! XD
 
Well, another good chapter. The part with Hiro's Kakureon eating the ramen was pretty funny, and the battle was very nicely done.

I've only found one mispelling, though. It should be "dying", not dieing.
 
Sorry I haven't posted a new chapter lately. Guess I couldn't keep that weekly-streak up for too long. College semester's coming to a close, and with it, I'm trying to meet deadlines on assignments and whatnot. But, it'll all be over with soon. In the meantime, I suggest you all read the following....

To all readers,

Recently, I've been thinking of making a few tweaks to the storyline that I very recently thought up, however, I don't know if I'm going in the right direction with them or not. Of course, I can't post my ideas here at risk of spoiling, so I'm making this offer. This Sunday (5/15/05) at noon, American Pacific time (GMT -8:00), meet me on an AIM chat room that I will title "orochi" (I like snakes, so sue me). It is here that I'll discuss my plans and you can give me your opinions there. Just remember, you come at your own risk of having major spoilers brought upon you. Also, do not consider plagiarizing whatever I haven't posted yet, for there are bound to be people against plagiarizing in the chat room that can back me up if you try to pull anything like that. I hope to see some of you there.

-ヤマトさん​
 
here's chapters 7-12, or "Volume 2". BTW, don't forget about the post I have preceding this.





NAME CHART
-Seed Machine Gun=Bullet Seed

HOW TO SAY IT IN JAPANESE
-Seed Machine Gun=Tane Machine Gun



CHAPTER 7: COURAGEOUS EIEVUI
第七章：勇敢なイーブイ


Eievui: [Dashing towards Kiryuu.] "BUIIIIIIII!!!!"

Kiryuu: "Eh?" [Turns his head as he sees Eievui charging towards him.]

[A shot of Hiro and Utsugi are shown as the sound of a hit is heard.]

Hiro: [Eyes widen, then lowers head and sighs.] "It was expected..."

Eievui: [Lies on the ground with a swollen cheek.] "bui..." [Stands up again.]

Kiryuu: [Holds his fist downwards, indicating that he hit Eievui just now. His eyes close as he snarls.] "This mission has ended up being more and more of a disappointment for me. Has it really gotten to the point where the only thing left willing to challenge me..."

[Eievui charges towards Kiryuu. Kiryuu, with his eyes still closed, lifts up his foot and puts it against Eievui's face when it reaches him. Eievui tries pushing against against Kiryuu's foot but with no luck.]

Eievui: [Moves legs as hard as it could, only to fail pushing Kiryuu again. Starts to sob.] "BUIIIIIIIII....!!!"

Kiryuu: [Opens eyes.] "...is this weak idiot!?"

[Kiryuu moves his foot away, and before the once-pushing Eievui is able to dash forward due to the recent lack of a block, Kiryuu quickly spins and tries to hit Eievui with his tail. However, Eievui notices and jumps into the air. But Kiryuu, still spinning, holds up his fist as it comes around to the air-borne Eievui and punchs Eievui down to the floor, where he has a rather hard impact.]

Hiro: [Gasps.] "Eievui!"

[Starts running forward, but Utsugi grabs his shoulder, stopping him.]

Hiro: [Turns head towards Utsugi.] "Huh?"

Utsugi: "You don't have a Monster Ball, do you? You can't retrieve your Pokemon from a distance, and you've seen what this enemy's capable of doing."

Hiro: [Turns whole body around and holds arms out to side.] "But.... that's my Pokemon..."

Utsugi: [Looks downwards with half-closed eyes.] "I realize how important Pokemon are. However, in this situation, if you act rashly you'll only put yourself in danger as well. He seems like the type that could snap your neck or..."

Hiro: "LET GO!" [Whacks Utsugi's arm off his shoulder and turns in the direction of Eievui and Kiryuu.] "I see no danger in this. If he wanted to snap someone's neck, that guy would've done it a long time ago." [Slowly smirks.] "The most he'll do is give me a punch in the face.... I'm not afraid to pay such a small price for Eievui."

Utsugi: "But..."

[Hiro starts to run towards the fight scene, where Eievui continually tries running towards Kiryuu only to get smacked away. As Eievui's getting to his feet after getting knocked away...]

Hiro: "YOU BASTARD, LEAVE MY EIEVUI ALONE!!!!" [Runs up and tries to swing his down at Kiryuu, whose back is facing away from Hiro.]

Kiryuu: [Jumps up before the fist makes contact, somersaults in the air, and does a backwards drop-kick on Hiro's face.] "Don't f*** with me!"

[From the kick, Kiryuu does a light jump off Hiro's head. He twirls in the air to strike Hiro's face with his tail. The recoil causes Hiro to lean backwards a bit, allowing Kiryuu to land on his chest, and from there, he repeatedly punches Hiro's face with both his left and right fists. He does this until Hiro falls backwards, to which Kiryuu safely jumps backwards onto the ground. Eievui, without making a sound, tries to tackle Kiryuu from behind, but Kiryuu easily jumps to his right.]

Kiryuu: "You're very persistent...." [Suddenly widens his eyes. He thinks to himself.] ("That's...") [Close-up shot of Kiryuu's eye, which has a reflection of Eievui's right ear.]

Utsugi: [Thinking.] ("What's he so surprised about?")

[Kiryuu immediately gets out of his shock. Eievui's still dashing by Kiryuu, just now realizing that its opponent jumped out of the way. Kiryuu kicks it in the side and sends it flying.]

Hiro: [Weakly gets up.] "...gi...ii..." [Wipes some blood trickling from his mouth and turns his head right to look towards Eievui.] "You alright?"

Eievui: [Slowly gets up again and nods at Hiro.] "bui..."

Kiryuu: "Hey, human..."

Hiro: "Huh?"

[Hiro looks down at Kiryuu. While his head isn't turned to face Hiro, his eyes are rolled to the right, indicating that he was referring to Hiro. Meanwhile, Eievui slowly sneaks around.]

Hiro: "Wh...what?"

Kiryuu: "Where did you find that Eievui?"

Hiro: "Eh?" [Doesn't speak for a moment out of confusion.] "It... just showed up at my house."

Kiryuu: [Turns his body to face Hiro.] "Where are you from?"

Hiro: "Enju City..."

[Eievui ended up walking to a distant point behind Kiryuu, where he tries charging at the lizard while he's busy talking to Hiro.]

Kiryuu: [Without turning around, swings his tail and slams Eievui downwards as it approaches.] "That so?" [Turns around to look down at the fox.]

Eievui: "bu....buiii...." [Struggles to its feet, but falls back down as it's unable to stand up anymore.]

Hiro: [Closes eyes and sweatdrops.] "Stupid Eievui..."

Kiryuu: [Thinking.] ("That thing earlier.... what was it...?") [Crouches down and reaches his hand towards Eievui.]

Hiro: "Hey, what are you doing!?" [Rises back to his feet and tries running at Kiryuu in an attempt to stop what he's doing.]

[Kiryuu turns his head to shoot a stream of glowing pellets from his mouth at Hiro's chin, knocking him backwards again. He turns back to Eievui.]

Eievui: [Shivers in fright. Speaks weakly.] "...buii..."

Female trainer: "No way.... he has techniques like Seed Machine Gun and didn't even use them to defeat us?"

[Kiryuu continues reaching his hand towards the frightened Pokemon, who's helpless to move at the moment.]

Eievui: [Looks at Kiryuu's hand with barely-opened eyes.] "bui......"

Kiryuu: [Sudden close-up on his widening eye.] "UWAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!" [A full-body shot shows that he's being slammed onto the floor by a rainbow beam being shot into his back. When the beam subsides, Kiryuu leans onto his right arm as he slowly gets up and looks backwards.] "Whaaaaaat?"

Hiro: [Gets up and looks towards where the beam came from as well. Eyes widen in shock.] "That's...."

[From the entrance to the airship's passenger area, a Kakureon with a blue stripe starts running towards Kiryuu with a smile on its face.]

Kiryuu: [Finishes getting up and turns around with a clenched fist.] "You bastard....!"

Hiro: [Thinking.] ("Now!") [Immediately jumps forward and holds down Kiryuu's arms.]

Kiryuu: "Huh?" [Tries to struggle out.] "S***.... I let my guard down..."

Hiro: [Clenches his teeth as he tries to stop Kiryuu from moving.] "I'm not letting you free..."

Kakureon: "Kurooooooon!" [Runs towards Kiryuu with tongue hanging out, as if making an attempt to lick Kiryuu.]

[Kiryuu shoots glowing seeds out of his mouth to knock Kakureon down. From there, Kiryuu tries pushing Hiro's hands off of his arms. He turns his head around and fires off more glowing seeds at Hiro's face. Though he cringes, Hiro still doesn't let go.]

Hiro: "..hiii.... everyone, help me...."

[A bunch of the trainers from earlier walk towards Hiro and Kiryuu.]

Kiryuu: "Stay back!" [Shoots more glowing seeds at the approaching trainers while he continues trying to break Hiro's grip. Not only does he try pushing Hiro's hands off, but he also swings his tail back and forth, whacking each of Hiro's arms, as well as hitting Hiro's hands with his knees.] "You're as persistent as that Eievui."

[Some of the trainers manage to evade the seeds and grab Kiryuu's legs and tail.]

Kiryuu: [Thinking.] ("Dammit... I'm gonna tire very soon....") [Bites down on Hiro's hand.]

Hiro: [Clenches his teeth in agony.] "Giii.... hurry, someone get rope or something..."

[Kiryuu bites down until Hiro's hand starts to bleed.]

Eievui: "Bui!?" [Eyes widen upon seeing Hiro's blood.] "Buiiiiii.....iiii....." [Struggles to stand up, and it manages to succeed. It then rams into Kiryuu's head, the recoil causing his head to point upwards, therefor stopping him from biting.]

Hiro: [Slowly smiles.] "Thanks, Eievui."

Kiryuu: [Moves his head back down and snarls.] "Dammiiiiit..... GURAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!" [Manages to push Hiro's hands away, then wildly thrashes about to escape the grip of the other trainers. Once he's freed, he immediately jumps away from them, though still facing them, possibly so as to watch everyone's movements.]

[Hiro and all the trainers gasp upon seeing that they failed.]


つづく
 
CHAPTER 8: PROFESSOR UTSUGI
第八章：ウツギ博士


[An exhausted Hiro lies on the ground, gasping in shock along with the trainers standing around him as they look at Kiryuu.]

Female trainer: [Looks down with closed eyes and clenched teeth as she holds up a shaking fist.] "Dammit! What can we do now?"

Male trainer 2: "Maybe we can stall him until this thing lands."

Utsugi: [Walks up to group of trainers.] "Actually..." [Points over to Kiryuu.]

Kiryuu: "Haaaaa....... haaaaa....." [Slowly rises up and down in his heavy breathing. Looks up towards the group of trainers.]

Female trainer: "Sweet! He must've used up all his strength trying to escape." [Smirks and takes out a Monster Ball, which she juggles in one hand.] "I wonder if Zangoose regained consciousness now."

Male trainer 2: [Runs in front of female trainer.] "No. Me and Sawamuraa want revenge, let us do it."

Male trainer 1: [Holds up a hand, palm outwards.] "Hey, hey, this bastard wanted to fight all of us." [Grins.] "We should just do that."

Kiryuu: [Thinking.] ("D*mn... I need to escape, but... my parachute's in the cargo area...")

[The trainers hold up Monster Balls as they loom over Kiryuu.]

Kiryuu: [Thinking.] ("The airship's emergency parachutes... they're my only option...") [Quickly turns around and runs.]

Male trainer 1: "Huh? Where the hell are you running to?"

[The trainers begin to chase after Kiryuu as he runs across the airship. Hiro and Eievui remain laying on the ground, along with an unconscious, blue-striped Kakureon. A few other people stayed behind, including Utsugi.]

Utsugi: [Walks over to Hiro and helps him up.] "You alright?"

Hiro: [Slowly nods.] "Yes."

Utsugi: [Places Hiro on a nearby seat, then looks back at Eievui.] "Eievui also?"

Eievui: [Slowly walks over to Hiro.] "...bui..."

[In the midst of all this, a young boy walks up to the Kakureon lying on the ground. The scene changes to Kiryuu, who stops in front of an emergency exit with some parachutes hanging next to it. Kiryuu looks back, the crowd of trainers hasn't caught up to him yet. Jumps onto the latch, holding onto it as he pushes it down. The emergency exit swings open, then he jumps from the latch to land next to the parachutes again. He starts to grab one of the parachute packs off the hanger, and as he does so, the trainers arive.]

Male trainer 2: [Runs forward holding up Monster Ball.] "We're not letting you escape!"

[Kiryuu fires several glowing pellets into the face of the approaching trainer, knocking him down. The trainer loses his grip on the Monster Ball, which rolls around the feet of the other trainers. Kiryuu quickly pushes the pack out of the doorway as he holds onto the shoulder strap, taking him along with it. As he plummets, he hangs tightly onto the shoulder strap with both his legs and one arm, the other arm reaching up to the cord. He pulls it, causing the parachute to plume out. Recoil almost knocks him off the parachute, but he hangs on by one of his legs.]

Kiryuu: [Curls body upwards to grab onto the strap with other limbs. Looks down towards the forest below for a moment, then starts to think.] ("That Eievui... what was it I saw?") [Thinks back to when he jumped out of the way and Hiro's Eievui ran in front of him. He closes his eyes and takes a deep breath.] ("Maybe it was nothing. I shouldn't waste my time with it.")

[Kiryuu slowly drifts down towards the forest. Back on the airship, in the cargo area, the two men from Rocket Gang who were with Kiryuu earlier now have their hands up as they're surrounded by several guards pointing rifles toward them.]

Man 2: [Snarls.] "He couldn't be trusted... that bastard..."

[Meanwhile, in the passenger area, one of the guards is holding up Hiro by the front of his shirt.]

Eievui: [Looks up at its trainer.] "BUIIII!"

Hiro: [Cringes.] "..gi...i..."

Guard: "I don't care if you helped us against Rocket Gang, you're still in trouble for what you did earlier."

Utsugi: "What're you doing?"

Guard: [Eyes roll toward Utsugi.] "This guy is a stow-away. He needs to take responsibility for his actions."

Utsugi: "But..."

Guard: "I appreciate his help, but a crime is a crime."

Utsugi: [Looks down at Hiro's depressed Eievui for a moment, then looks towards the guard again.] "Please... as a representative figure, I ask that you excuse this boy for what he's done."

Guard: [Looks at Utsugi.] "Utsugi...-hakase...?" [Slowly lowers Hiro back to the ground.]

Hiro: [Stumbles a bit, then sits back onto a seat. Looks up at Utsugi.] "Representative figure?"

Eievui: [Smiles and jumps onto Hiro's lap.] "BUI!"

Guard: "Very well then." [Turns and walks away.]

Utsugi: [Watches the guard walking away for a moment, then turns to Hiro with a giggle.] "You're not very smart, are you? Top Pokemon researchers like myself hold a really high status."

Hiro: "That so? Oh..." [Bows head downwards.] "Thank you so very much."

???: "Hey Big Brother..."

Hiro: "Eh?" [Brings head back up in confusion.]

[Hiro sees that young boy that walked up to Kakureon earlier.]

Boy: "Here." [Lightly tosses a Monster Ball at Hiro.]

Hiro: [Reflexively catches the ball, then looks down at it.] "Huh?"

Boy: "You deserve it for what you did earlier. And since that lizard knocked it out earlier, and you helped the most in defeating it, this is technically your rightful capture."

Hiro: "But... but I'm not a trainer..."

Boy: "You have an Eievui."

Hiro: "That's different."

Boy: "Whatever. I still think you should take it." [Puts hands behind head and walks away.]

Hiro: "W... wait a second...!" [Reaches hand out towards the boy.]

[The boy ignores him as he walks away.]

Hiro: [Blue vertical lines appear over him as he drops his head.] "Geez."

Eievui: [Jumps onto the ground and looks up at Hiro.] "Bui?"

Utsugi: [Smiles and pats Hiro on the back.] "It's alright. You can just become a trainer."

Hiro: "Not interested."

Utsugi: [Stops smiling and patting.] "Oh..." [Smiles again.] "Don't you want to at least see the Pokemon that was given to you?"

Hiro: [Blue lines disappear as head raises again.] "It's obviously that Pokemon that helped me out earlier. The green thing with the blue stripe, able to fire rainbow beams and such."

Utsugi: "That's a Kakureo...." [Eyes widen.] "Blue stripe?"

[Hiro nods.]

Utsugi: "Can I see it?"

Hiro: [Sighs.] "Since you asked." [Tosses the Monster Ball onto the floor, releasing a glowing white energy that forms into a blue-striped Kakureon.]

Utsugi: [Gasps and walks over to the Kakureon, kneeling down before it.] "It's true. But I thought Kakureon had red stripes... maybe this is one of those rare, different-colored Pokemon. You are so lucky to have one of these."

Kakureon: [Looks up at Utsugi, then licks his face.] "Reeee....."

[Utsugi falls backwards with a dazed look.]

Kakureon: "Kuron!" [Inhales hard and then releases a rainbow beam that strikes Utsugi in the chin.]

Utsugi: "Hurry, recall it!"

Hiro: [Holds up Monster Ball and looks at it.] "How?"

Kakureon: [Stops firing the beam for a moment to laugh at Utsugi.] "Hahahahaha!!!"

Utsugi: "Squeeze the two halves closer together to fire a retrieval beam."

Hiro: [Holds up ball.] "Like this?" [Clamps the two halves, releasing a red laser that hits Kakureon and converts it to a red energy that goes back in the ball.]

Utsugi: [Sighs a breath of relief and gets back up.] "Thanks, uh...." [Rubs back of his head.] "That reminds me, I never asked for your name."

Hiro: "Hiro... Enju City's Kimono Hiro."

Utsugi: "Kimono.... such an odd surname...."

Hiro: [Smiles, closes eyes and sweatdrops.] "Maybe my ancestor was a famous taylor or something."

[The scene changes to the outside of the airship, as it's finally making its landing at an airport. The passengers all walk out on a ramp, as well as the guards escorting the Rocket Gang members. Hiro, holding his Eievui, walks alongside Utsugi.]

Hiro: "So Utsugi... will you be able to get me back home?"

Utsugi: "I'll discuss that later. For now, there is another reason I excused you from that guard earlier."

Hiro: [Stops walking.] "Eh? What?"

Utsugi: [Stops and turns to face Hiro.] "I want you to come with me to my research facility."


つづく



NOTES
-Addressing a stranger as 'Big Brother' or 'Big Sister' can be equivalent to calling someone 'Mister' or 'Miss' in English.
-From what I?ve heard, surnames are relatively new in Japanese history. When they were being assigned to commoners, the names were made based on one of that clan?s notable characteristics or habitats.
 
author's note: This chapter is horribly short, as well as the chapters before it. I'm sorry, but there's a reason for that, though. For a while, I've typed up these chapters in textpad. I have complete confidence in my grammatical abilities to not need a spellchecker, but as it turned out, Microsoft Word had one other feature that I did need, and that feature is a word count. Way back when I posted the 2nd chapter over at Pokecommunity, I ran into their limit of 20,000 characters. Considering I'm editting a single post for every new chapter, I can't have my chapters extending into more than one post, so I tried to keep the size of my chapters as small as possible, which is tricky when you don't have word count. However, it wasn't until this chapter that I realized that I went from making them too long to seeming too short. Starting next chapter, I began using Microsoft Word to type up any future chapters, so hopefully, the length problem has been elliminated now.





NAME CHART
-Wakaba Town=Newbark Town
-Yoshino City=Cherrygrove City



CHAPTER 9: ARRIVAL IN WAKABA TOWN
第九章：ワカバタウンへの到着


[The sun is setting. In front of an unloading airship at the airport, Hiro and the Eievui he's holding are standing before Utsugi.]

Utsugi: "Kimono Hiro, I would like for you to come with me to my research facility."

Hiro: [Backs away a bit with a confused look on face.] "Eh? Why?"

Utsugi: [Push up his glasses.] "I... have my reasons."

Hiro: [Looks down at his Eievui.] "It's something concerning Eievui, isn't it?"

Utsugi: [Nods head.] "Yes."

Hiro: [Tightly clutches Eievui. Clenches teeth in anger.] "What do you want with it?"

Utsugi: [Closes eyes and holds up hand, palm facing Hiro.] "Please, don't act hesitant. You can trust me."

Hiro: [Calms down and returns to a normal stance.] "Well, you did help me earlier."

Utsugi: [Smiles and holds up index finger.] "And I could probably help find a way to get you back home later."

Eievui: "Bui."

Hiro: "Huh?" [Looks down towards his Eievui.]

Eievui: [Closes eyes and smiles gleefully.] "Buiiiiii...."

Hiro: "Eievui..." [Looks back towards Utsugi.] "Eievui seems okay with it, so I'll trust you."

Utsugi: "Alright. Let's go." [Turns around and walks away.]

Hiro: [Runs up to Utsugi and begins to walk alongside him.] "Um.... where are we?"

Utsugi: "Yoshino City. It's located very close to Wakaba Town, where my lab is located."

Hiro: "I see."

[The scene changes to the outside of the airport. Here, we see a lab truck driving away. Inside, Hiro and Eievui are sitting in the front left seat, while Utsugi drives in the front right seat.]

Hiro: "So... what are you going to do with Eievui? Are you still gonna keep that a secret?"

Utsugi: "Well... if you must know..." [Taps chin with right index finger, still steering with left hand.] "Ummm...." [Stops tapping chin after a moment.] "Alright, I'll tell you."

[Hiro and Eievui turn towards Utsugi, there attention entirely on him.]

Utsugi: "The thing is... I've studied several Pokemon, but not an Eievui. They're a pretty rare species."

Hiro: "In Enju City, they're actually very common. For that matter, each of my sisters have their own evolution of it."

Utsugi: "That so?"

Hiro: [Nods.] "You were leaving from Enju City's airport?"

Utsugi: "Yes. I was conducting some research there."

Hiro: "Why didn't you just catch a specimen while you were there?"

Utsugi: [Sweatdrop slides down head.] "Um.... I didn't happen to come across any wild Eievui there."

Hiro: [Half-closes eyes.] "You have horrible luck, don't you?"

Utsugi: [Two more sweatdrops appear.] "Perhaps..." [Sweatdrops disappear.] "Hey, about you and your Eievui...?"

Hiro: "Huh? What?"

Utsugi: "You're very close to it, aren't you?"

Hiro: "A little."

Utsugi: "A little? You seemed to have reacted pretty strongly towards it during the encounter with that Kimori earlier."

Hiro: "I only met this Eievui a few days ago."

Utsugi: "Eh?" [Turns head towards Hiro for a moment. Without his eyes on the road, the truck starts to swerve a bit, but his attention turns back to it when another car beeps its horn.] "Only a few days?"

Hiro: [Nods.] "Yeah."

Utsugi: "And you already developed such a close bond with it?"

[Hiro looks down at Eievui with a puzzled face.]

Eievui: [Looks up at Hiro confusedly.] "Bui?"

Hiro: [Thinking.] ("When I think about it... I'm a bit surprised myself.")

[The scene changes. It's night now, and the truck, with its headlights on, is entering a rather small and peaceful-looking town, full of small houses. Each house being pretty well-spaced apart from eachother and two stories on average, nearly all of which have their indoor lights on. Hiro and Eievui look out the window to gaze at the town's scenery. After a moment, the car parks in a lot next to a large building, about 3 stories high and several decameters in width on each side. There was also a large row of fencing behind the building.]

Hiro: [Gets out of the car and looks up at the building.] "Su-weet... so this is your lab?"

Utsugi: [Nods.] "Let's go."

Eievui: "Bui." [Jumps out of Hiro's arms and follows Utsugi.]

Hiro: [Nods.] "Yeah." [Follows Utsugi as well.]

[The three come up to a double door which Utsugi pushes open. Inside is a large, carpeted room filled with furniture such as couches and a coffee table, as well as a refrigerator, with a water cooler and several dishes next to it. There's also a maid, who was dusting the room until she noticed that they entered.]

Maid: "Ah..." [Bows towards Utsugi.] "Utsugi-sama, welcome back."

Utsugi: "Tomoko-san, good evening." [Waves at her. Looks down at Hiro.] "This is Hiro-kun. He's going to be waiting in here while I examine his Eievui."

Tomoko (maid): "Huh? Eievui.... but you already...."

Utsugi: "Tomoko-san..." [Closes eyes as sweatdrop slides down head.] "I just remembered that I needed you to do a special task today. Come with me."

Tomoko: "Yes." [Goes to a door across from the entrance and holds it open, head bowed down.]

Utsugi: [Walks over to door with Eievui walking next to him. Turns to Hiro.] "I should be finished soon. In the mean time, you can call your family with our video phones over there." [Points finger in a certain direction.] "The toilets are there...." [Points in another direction.]

[Hiro's stomach growls. Both Hiro and Utsugi sweatdrop.]

Utsugi: "You hadn't eaten for a while, eh? You're allowed to use that fridge there." [Points to the fridge.]

Hiro: "Thank you. See ya, Eievui." [Waves to Eievui.]

Eievui: [Turns towards Hiro.] "Buiii."

[Utsugi and Eievui enter the doorway, with Tomoko following, closing the door behind her. After they left, Hiro opens the fridge door and looks through the selection of food.]

Hiro: [Thinking.] ("I only met Eievui a few days ago.") [Grabs one of the plates stacked next to the fridge and puts a cucumber and a couple riceballs onto it.]
("When I first met it, I didn't even like it.") [Grabs a glass and pours water from the water cooler.]
("And I only took it in as my pet because it wouldn't stop annoying me.") [Places the food and water he gathered onto the coffee table, then lays down on the couch, staring up at the ceiling.]
("Yet... afterwards, I refused to get rid of it...") [Thinks back to when Tamao was kneeling before him in apology.]
("I risked my life to save it...") [Thinks back to when Chris's Airmudo grabbed the leg of his pants after he jumped forward to save Eievui from plummeting. In the present, Hiro looks at his torn pant leg.]
("And now, I did everything I could to prevent it from getting stolen.") [Thinks back to when he was holding down the Kimori, Kiryuu, with as much effort as he could. After thinking about that, he grabs the cucumber off the plate with his right hand, removes the clear plastic wrapping, and crumples the wrapping in his left hand.]
("How did I develop a close bond with that Pokemon so quickly?") [While still staring at the ceiling, takes a big crunch out of the cucumber. After chewing and swallowing, he sighs and speaks out loud.]
"I need to remember to call home. How is everyone doing right now?"

[The scene changes to show Chris on his knees, his hands tied behind his back and his head locked in place as it lays against a block of wood. Standing over Chris is a rather slim figure with glowing eyes, wearing a midieval executionar's mask and holding up an axe.]

Chris: "PLEASE STOP IT!!!"


つづく



NOTES
-Japanese cars have the driver seat on the right, passenger seat on the left.
 
NAME CHART
-Nyorozo=Poliwhirl
-Nyorobon=Poliwrath
-Massuguma=Linoone
-Yorunozuku=Noctowl

HOW TO SAY IT IN JAPANESE
-Water Stone=Mizu no Ishi



CHAPTER 10: UTSUGI?S LAB
第十章：ウツギ研究所


[The waiting room for Utsugi?s laboratory is shown, with nobody in it apparently. The sound of a toilet is then heard flushing, followed by the sound of a sink dispensing water. After the noise stops, Hiro is seen at a lit doorway. He turns off the light, walks into the waiting room, and closes the door behind him. Hiro looks toward the video phones stationed at the wall across. He nods and walks forward. The scene changes to show Utsugi holding Eievui as he walks across a dimly lit hall, with Tomoko walking next to him. Along the way, Eievui gazes at the stuff along the walls, which includes things such as various Pokemon skeletons, stuffed Pokemon, and body parts contained in jars of alcohol.]

Eievui: [Shudders.] ??bu?.iiiiii???

[Eievui looks up at Utsugi, whose glasses are reflecting light and blocking his eyes at the moment. Tomoko opens the door to a dark room, and upon turning on the light, Eievui gasps and widens its eyes upon seeing what the room contains. In the center is an examination table, and along the walls are posters which display pictures of various Pokemon?s muscular structures, as well as dead Pokemon on their backs, their abdomens cut open and the skin folds pinned outwards to reveal the organs inside, organs with identifiable text next to them on the posters. Among these Pokemon in the posters is an Eievui.]

Eievui: [Closes eyes and shrieks.] ?BUIIIIIIIIIIII!!!!!?

[The scene changes to show a terrified Chris, who is down on his knees with his hands tied behind his back, and head locked in place as it lays against a slab of wood. Standing over him is a slim figure wearing a midieval executioner?s mask and holding up a giant axe.]

Executioner: [Looks down at Chris.] ?You are? ready to see Hell??

[A little away from Chris and the executioner, Chris?s Airmudo is shrieking in pain while flames surround it.]

Airmudo: ?GYAAAAAASU!!!!!?

Chris: [Closes eyes and shouts.] ?Stop! I said ?sorry?, and don?t you think this is a bit extreme? Stop, please!?

Executioner: [Lowers eyebrows.] ?Simple apologies are never enough to repent for the actions you?ve commited.? [Holds up axe.] ?Die!?

Chris: ?NOOOO!!!?

[Hiro?s grandfather suddenly walks into the scene.]

Grandpa: ?Hey, Koume-chan. Hiro?s on the phone right now.?

Executioner: [Keeps holding axe in the air, stares towards Hiro?s grandfather, and blinks a couple times.] ?Eh??

Grandpa: ?He?s safe, so stop torturing that boy and come talk to him.? [Turns and walks away.]

Executioner: ?Y?..yes!? [Puts axe upright on the ground and pulls off mask, revealing the face of Koume, Hiro?s sister.]

[In the distance, Koume?s Booster is shown to be the one spewing fire at Airmudo, whose eyes are widened into overexaggerated cartooney ovals, large and yellow with a little dot in the middle.]

Airmudo: ?Gyaaaaaasu!?

Koume: [Lets go of axe and lets it fall down toward Chris.] ?That?s good, Booster.?

Booster: [Stops breathing fire and nods toward Koume.] ?Buusu??

Chris: [Eyes widen as he looks up toward the falling axe.] ?Uwaaaaa!!? [Clenches teeth and eyes shut as he puts head down before the axe hits. The axe ends up bouncing off his neck and landing on the ground. Chris opens his eyes, which now appear beady, with a couple of blinks. He looks toward the axe on the ground.] ?This is?.. hollow plastic?.??

Airmudo: [Still has eyes overexaggerately open and body appears red and steaming. Eyes return to normal and slowly close as it starts to fall forward.] ??.gyaaaasu?? [Hits the ground, slightly bouncing off a couple times before laying still.] ??gya?.?

[Gathered around a video phone is Hiro?s five sisters, their Pokemon standing behind them, and his grandfather. Sakura?s talking into the receiver. On the monitor is Hiro, who?s also holding a phone receiver up to his head.]

Sakura: ?Hiro, are you alright? Where are you??

Hiro: ?I?m fine. Right now, I?m at Utsugi-hakase?s lab.?

Tamao: [Gasps and snatches the receiver from Sakura. Sakura?s eyes turn beady.] ?Eh? Utsugi-hakase? ?That? Utsugi-hakase?? [Hiro nods.] ?No way! Why are you there??

Hiro: [Scratches back of head.] ?Utsugi says he?s going to find a way to return me home. I?ll explain when I get back.?

Tamao: [Puts on an evil smirk. Looks back at her Blacky, who eyes her suspiciously, then turns back to the receiver and whispers into it.] ?Before you leave, please search for any secrets concerning him. Guys like him should have a lot of money.?

Hiro: [Closes eyes.] ?No.?

Tamao: [Leans toward the monitor.] ?Please.?

Hiro: ?No.?

Tamao: [Closes eyes, holds receiver to her head with her shoulder and claps hands together in a begging stance.] ?Please do it.?

Hiro: [Opens eyes and snarls.] ?I said ?no?!!!?

[Tamao falls backwards after Hiro?s shout. A sweatdrop slides down the head of everyone in the room except Tamao. Tamao?s mouth is gaped open and her closed eyes stream tears. Blacky looks down at her, closes its eyes, sighs, and shakes its head.]

Satsuki: [Bends down and grabs the receiver from Tamao?s hand.] ?Is Eievui with you??

Hiro: [Shakes head.] ?Nope?? [Stops shaking head.] ?Utsugi wanted to examine it. He?s doing that right now.?

Satsuki: ?But wouldn?t a researcher like him already know a lot about it??

Hiro: [Shrugs.] ?He says he hadn?t.?

[The scene changes to show Hiro on the other side of the phone, viewing his family on the monitor. Chris suddenly pops up from the bottom of the screen, with a wooden block hanging down from his neck.]

Hiro: [Eyes widen, sweatdrop slides down head.] ?Eh??

[Chris appears to be shouting on the monitor, but only a faint, muffled voice is head. Satsuki turns to him and closes her eyes.]

Satsuki: ?You need to talk into the receiver.? [Holds receiver up to Chris?s head.]

Chris: ?Help me, Hiro! Koume is?..? [Closes eyes, tears streaming down them.] ?Koume?s been torturing me since I told your family what happened. I?ll never start my trainer?s journey if I remain being treated like a prisoner.?

[Koume, whom has an angry expression on her face, kicks Chris in the back of the head a couple times and then pushes her foot against his back. She appears to be shouting, but again, they?re only muffled sounds.]

Hiro: ?Koume Sister?..?

[Koume loses her angry expression and looks toward the screen questionedly.]

Hiro: [Closes eyes.] ?Even if it was Chris?s fault, I?m alright now. So could you please release him??

[Koume closes her eyes, rubs the back of her head, then appears to laugh. She kneels down, unstraps the wooden block off Chris, and unties his hands.]

Chris: [Speaks into the receiver.] ?Thank you!? [Immediately dashes off afterwards.]

[The scene changes to Eievui on the examination table, shuddering in fright as Utsugi holds its left ear, which Utsugi peers into. Tomoko stands at a distance looking onward.]

Tomoko: ?Don?t be afraid. All those Pokemon were already dead when their bodies were used for scientific research. Utsugi-sama isn?t going to harm you.?

Eievui: [Stops shuddering.] ?Bui??

Utsugi: ?Hm?. a Kimori?s eyes are much sharper than a human?s, so maybe?..? [Turns to Tomoko.] ?Tomoko-san, you know where the magnifying glasses are??

Tomoko: ?Yes. I?ve washed items in this room before.? [Walks over to a drawer and opens it, revealing its contents of various magnifying lenses.] ?Um?..?

Utsugi: ?Any type will do.?

Tomoko: [Grabs a magnifying glass, closes the drawer, and walks over to Utsugi.] ?So why are you examining this Eievui? And why did you lie to that boy??

Utsugi: [Grabs magnifying glass.] ?I have suspicions.? [Holds magnifying glass in front of eye and continues examining Eievui?s ear with it.]

Tomoko: ?Over this Eievui??

[Utsugi continues searching sections of the ear through the glass. Suddenly his eyes widen, he gasps, and then backs away.]

Tomoko: [Stares toward Utsugi.] ?What?s wrong??

[Utsugi walks over to the drawers, opens several of them, and takes out rubber gloves, which he puts on, as well as tweezers, a q-tip like stick, a couple plastic bags, a tiny syringe, a small bottle, a cotton ball, and a gauze strap.]

Eievui: [Lifts head up and looks toward Utsugi.] ?Bui??

Utsugi: [Walks over to Eievui, holding the items.] ?I?m going to the D.N.A.-research room.? [Holds Eievui as he plucks off a few of its hairs.]

Eievui: [Winches.] ??.bui!?

[Utsugi puts the hairs into one of the plastic bags.]

Tomoko: ?D.N.A.-research??

Utsugi: [Opens Eievui?s mouth, rubs the stick against the roof of its mouth, and puts the stick in the bag.] ?I?ll be there for a while.? [Grabs Eievui?s left foreleg, feels for a vein, spreads the fur from a very narrow bald spot and sticks the syringe into it.]

Eievui: [Closes eyes and screams in pain.] ?BUIIIIII!!?

Utsugi: [Pulls out the syringe, now filled with a small amount of blood, and ejects that blood into a small bottle, which he closes afterwards.] ?Return Eievui to Hiro. Don?t tell him anything about this.? [Puts cotton ball on Eievui?s foreleg and wraps it in gauze.]

Tomoko: ?But?.? [Gets handed Eievui, which she holds.]

Utsugi: ?Tell him I?m currently trying to book his travel reservations. To let him think that I was fully examining his Eievui, tell him?? [Looks back at Eievui and examines it for a moment.] ?Tell him it?s a male, less than a year of age.? [Grabs the plastic bags and bottle, then dashes out of the room.]

Tomoko: [Steps toward Utsugi.] ?Please wait?!?

[Utsugi continues to run down the hallway. Tomoko looks down at the Eievui.]

Eievui: [Looks up at Tomoko.] ?Bui??

Tomoko: [Closes eyes and sighs.] ?What the hell is happening??

[Inside of a large laboratory, a short, dark blue-haired man, sporting a lab coat and holding a coffee mug, sits in front of a computer screen. He takes a sip of his mug before placing it on the desk next to the keyboard, then he droops his head forward. On the computer screen, there?re several open windows. In one window, there?s a movie of a Nyorozo touching a Water Stone and evolving into a Nyorobon. In another, there?s a 3D model of a D.N.A. molecule that flashes, then lightly changes in correspondence to the movie of the evolution. In another window, green text is typed out in Roman lettering ?ISI_NO_SINKA.DAT? before a long column of text appears below and automatically scrolls downwards.]

Utsugi?s voice: ?Manabu-kun!?

[The man suddenly chokes, widens his eyes.]

Man (Manabu): ?Se? Sensei?.? [Stands up straight and turns around, facing Utsugi, who was behind him.] ?I wasn?t getting bored, please trust me. I?ve just been awake since 4 o?clock?.?

Utsugi: [Holds up hand.] ?It?s alright, it?s alright.?

Manabu: [Sighs and sits back down in his chair.] ?So how was your trip to Enju City??

Utsugi: ?Not now?.? [Holds up plastic bags and bottle.] ?Here.?

Manabu: ?Eh?? [Grabs the bag with hairs inside and identifies it.] ?These are Massuguma hairs, correct??

Utsugi: ?Your identification skills need improvement.? [Hands the saliva bag and blood bottle to Manabu.] ?From an Eievui.?

Manabu: [Holds items in one arm while he snaps his fingers with his other.] ?D*mn?.? [Grabs bottle with his free hand.] ?So you want this all identified??

Utsugi: [Nods.] ?Try to find anything unusual about it from average Eievui D.N.A.?

Manabu: ?Understood.? [Picks up his coffee mug, looks down at it.] ?But I might have to stay up all night for this.? [Sighs, then takes another sip of his mug.]

[Scene changes to the waiting room, where Hiro lays on the couch and holds Eievui over his head.]

Hiro: [Looks up at Eievu?s foreleg, which has a cotton ball wrapped around it, then shudders.] ?I dislike blood samplings?. So you?re a male, eh Eievui??

Eievui: ?Bui.?

Hiro: ?Strange? I always pictured you to be feminine.?

Eievui: [Clenches teeth, eyes turn pupilless, vein throbs on head, and he begins struggling out of Hiro?s hands.] ?Buiiiii?!!!?

Hiro: ?I?m kidding.?

Eievui: [Calms down and closes eyes.] ?Bui bui??

Hiro: ?Why???

Eievui: [Opens eyes and looks down at Eievui questionedly.] ?Bui??

Hiro: [Places Eievui on the couch next to him.] ?Why did you suddenly come to my house? why did you suddenly get attached to me???

Eievui: [Walks onto Hiro?s chest and stares down into his eyes.] ?Iibui, buiiii? bui bui buiiii?.? [Closes eyes and smiles.] ?Ii? bu? i??

Hiro: ?Whatever.?

[Eievui jumps away from Hiro?s chest as Hiro rolls around to lay on his side.]

Hiro: [Closes eyes.] ?I wonder when Utsugi can return me home.?

Eievui: [Lays down on the couch in a curled position. Sighs.] ??bui?? [Closes eyes as well.]

[The scene changes to distant view of the outside of Utsugi?s lab. Over the horizon, the sun is beginning to rise. As it slowly does so, a Yorunozuku flaps into a hole in a tree and closes its eyes. Afterwards, a whole swarm of Ledyba and Ledian fly out of some bushes in the distance, flying across the skies as the sun behind them lights up the ground beneath them. Inside Utsugi?s waiting room, sunlight shines through the window and onto the couch, where a sleeping Hiro and Eievui lay. The text "4099年4月19日 ( 日 )" (Sunday, April 19, 4099) is displayed briefly. The sound of a door opening is heard in the distance, and the pair fidget before opening their eyes, yawning, and then getting up and stretching their limbs.]

Hiro: [Rubs eyes.] ?Utsugi?? [Turns around to see it was Utsugi that opened the door just now.] ?I?m going home soon, right??

Utsugi: ?Um? well, we have a problem.?

Hiro: [Lowers eyelids.] ?You said ?problem???

Utsugi: [Nods.] ?But don?t worry, we have a solution to it.?

Hiro: [Crosses arms.] ?So I see. What is this solution??

Utsugi: [Pushes glasses upwards.] ?Kimono Hiro? you should travel, and?? [Points finger at Hiro.] ?Become a Pokemon trainer!?

Hiro: [Mouth gapes open, eyes turn pupilless and widen.] ?Wh?. wh?. wh?. wh?. wh?.?

Eievui: [Looks at Hiro and slowly backs away before hitting the back of the couch, which he then begins to sink back into.] ??bui?..buiii?.?

Utsugi: [Looks toward the stuttering Hiro.] ?Eh?? [A word bubble with a question mark in it appears next to him.]

[The scene changes to show the outside of Utsugi?s lab.]

Hiro?s voice: ?WHAT DID YOU SAY?!?!?!?

[A flock of Poppo flies out of a tree near the lab. The scene changes to the spot in front of the computer in the D.N.A.-research room. Spilt coffee and pieces of a shattered coffee mug lay on the floor. Manabu lays back in his chair, looking up at the ceiling with bags under his eyes.]

Manabu: ?In my whole life, I?ve never been this tired?? [Reaches down for the broken handle of his mug.] ?And yet, I can?t sleep.? [Lets handle slip out of hand and hit the floor again, cracking a little more.] ?That D.N.A?. unusual, yet somehow familiar?? [Closes eyes and leans further back in chair.] ?This?. what is this??


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NAME CHART
-Trancel=Metapod
-Thread Spit=String Shot
-Pokemon Encyclopedia=Pokedex
-Kikyou City=Violet City

HOW TO SAY IT IN JAPANESE
-Harden=Kataku Naru
-Thread Spit=Ito wo Haku
-Pokemon Encyclopedia=Pokemon Zukan



CHAPTER 11: TRAINER?S JOURNEY, BEGIN!
第十一章：トレーナーの旅、始まる!


[Inside Utsugi?s waiting room, Eievui sits on the couch while Hiro and Utsugi stand across from eachother.]

Hiro: [Looks downward with a half grin. Makes a light chuckle.] ?hehe?. hahaha?.?

[Both Utsugi and Eievui stare toward Hiro.]

Hiro: [Raises head and points finger at Utsugi.] ?That was a good joke. But seriously, how can I return??

Utsugi: [Stands speechless for a moment before talking.] ?Hiro-kun, I know you said you?re uninterested in being a trainer. However, I?m telling the truth. I can?t book a flight, and everyone here is too busy to escort you. The only way you?ll be able to return is by walking. Out in the wild, you will likely be attacked by wild Pokemon, in which case, you will need to be able to defend yourself.?

Hiro: [Crosses arms and lowers head.] ?Geez, you?re serious, aren?t you?? [Raises head and thinks.] (?D*mn, what the hell do I do? I can?t abuse Utsugi?s hospitality until another solution arises?. but, to become a trainer??) [Clenches teeth.]

Utsugi: ?You only have to do it until you get back to your home. You can quit afterwards.?

Hiro: ?That?s right?.?

Utsugi: ?And it shouldn?t be too difficult for you. I looked up your records and discovered you had been in an advanced trainer class last year, and you?re currently taking one this year.?

Hiro: [Looks down.] ?Um?. I didn?t want to take them. And I never applied whatever I could remember.?

Utsugi: ?That so??? [Sweatdrop slides down head. Thinks.] (?That?s why he couldn?t return that Kakureon earlier.?) [Speaks out loud.] ?Well, you only need to know the basics to get a license.?

Hiro: ?What about money??

Utsugi: [Smiles.] ?It?s alright. The Pokemon League gets a lot of sponsors, so food and medical care at Pokemon Centers are free. You also get an allowance based on how much you train your Pokemon??

Hiro: ?How?.?? [Stops for a moment and widens eyes, then grabs Kakureon?s Monster Ball from his pocket and holds it toward Utsugi.] ?Do these things record that kind of data??

Utsugi: [Closes eyes and nods.] ?Yeah. Anyway, I?ll show you to the licensing building.?

Hiro: ?Can you direct me to a good tailor as well??

Utsugi: [Opens eyes.] ?Eh?? [Adjusts glasses and looks at the rip on Hiro?s pant leg.] ?Ah, right. It would be inconvenient to travel in a school uniform.? [Takes hand off glasses.]

[The scene changes to the inside of a clothing store. Utsugi and Eievui wait outside of a booth with a curtain. After a moment of waiting, Hiro, who was behind the curtain, pushes it aside and reveals him wearing a different set of clothes. He now sports the same clothes he wore at his home earlier, sneakers, jeans, and a baggy white sweater with a blue zigzag pattern at the end of each sleeve.]

Eievui: ?Bui!? [Jumps onto Hiro?s shoulder and smiles.] ?Bui bui.?

[The scene changes again to show Hiro, Eievui, and Utsugi outside of a large, one-story building.]

Hiro: ?So I just go in here, pass a test, and get my license, right??

[Utsugi nods, then Hiro hands him Kakureon?s Monster Ball.]

Utsugi: [Looks down at it.] ?Eh??

Hiro: ?You said uniquely-colored Pokemon like this are rare, right? Take it. Maybe you could use it for research or something.?

Utsugi: ?Uh?.? [Thinks back to when Kakureon shot a rainbow-colored beam at Utsugi?s chin and laughed at it mischieviously. In the present, he sweatdrops and closes his eyes, handing the ball back to Hiro.] ?No, you should keep it. As a rookie trainer, you?ll need as much protection as you can get.? [Walks away and waves at Hiro.] ?Good luck getting back home. See you later.?

Hiro: [Looks at Utsugi as he walks away.] ?There?s something strange about that guy.? [Turns around and looks at the glass double door entrance to the building.] ?Let?s go, Eievui.? [Walks towards the doors.]

Eievui: [Nods and follows Hiro.] ?Bui!?

[The scene changes to inside the building. Hiro sits on a chair looking inside a small manual while Eievui looks up at him. On the page of the manual Hiro?s looking at is a picture of a Monster Ball with various writing around it.]

Hiro: [Pulls out Kakureon?s Monster Ball.] ?So this button changes size?? [Presses the button on the front and the ball reduces to the size of a marble. He presses it again and the ball returns to its original size. Hiro stares wide-eyed.] ?How does it do that?? [Looks in the manual again before looking at his ball again.] ?Utsugi told me about that retrieval beam. But if I clamp the two halves together while the Pokemon?s inside, or apply pressure such as tossing it to the ground, I release the Pokemon. Some balls may be faulty and the Pokemon can release themselves at will. If I clamp the halves of an empty ball that isn?t currently assigned to hold a Pokemon, I can throw it at a wild Pokemon in order to contain it.? [Puts down the manual and stretches his arms.] ?None of this seems that hard to understand.? [Accidentally lets go of Kakureon?s ball while he stretches. His pupils shrink.] ?Eh??

[Kakureon?s ball hits the floor, bouncing a couple times as Hiro and Eievui watched. Eventually, the ball opens up and releases a white energy that forms into a blue-striped Kakureon. Kakureon observes its surroundings.]

Hiro: ?Crap!? [Grabs the ball and attempts to fire a retrieval beam from it.]

Kakureon: [Jumps up to avoid the beam.] ?Kuron!? [Jumps sideways to avoid another beam. Breathes in deeply.]

Hiro: ?Gi?. Hold still!? [Holds up the ball ready to fire another beam when he?s suddenly struck in the face by a rainbow-colored beam, dropping the Monster Ball.] ?That huuuuuurts!!!?

[Kakureon stops firing the beam, leaving a dazed Hiro laying back in his chair. Kakureon turns to its left to see an enraged Eievui.]

Eievui: ?Buiiii? bui!? [Jumps toward Kakureon.]

Kakureon: ?Rerererere?!? [Lashes out a long tongue that wraps around Eievui?s abdomen.]

Eievui: [Looks at the tongue with wide eyes.] ?Bui??

Kakureon: ?Roooooon!!!? [Twirls around and throws Eievui diagonally upward. Tongue returns back inside its mouth afterwards.]

Eievui: ?Buiiiiiii!? [Flies at ceiling, then hits it and ricochets back onto the floor. Gets back up weakly.] ??.bui?.?

Kakureon: [Closes eyes, points at Eievui, and laughs while moving feet up and down.] ?Hahahahaha!!? [Accidentally steps on Monster Ball. Widens eyes.] ?Kuro?? [The button happened to be facing its other leg. A beam gets fired at it, converting Kakureon to a red energy.] ?Kuroooooon!? [Gets contained in the ball once again.]

[Hiro gets out of his chair while holding his head, still in a bit of a daze. He sighs and picks up the ball. Upon doing so, he notices several people were spectating the incident, and a sweatdrop slides down his head in response to that.]

Hiro (narration): ?And so, I took the test. I didn?t enjoy it, not one bit. However, some parts of the test managed to seem very easy. When I thought I?d forgotten something about Pokemon training, I suddenly remembered it.?

[Hiro?s shown sitting a desk writing on a sheet of paper as Eievui sits on Hiro?s lap and glances at it.]

Hiro (narration): ?Certain parts were very difficult.?

[Hiro stands at one side of a flat, dirt surface ring with Eievui poised in front of him. On the other side is a man dressed in a white jumpsuit with a symbol resembling a Monster Ball on the chest, likely a Pokemon League representative. In front of him stands a Trancel.]

Hiro: [Points forward.] ?Eievui, hit that thing!?

Eievui: ?Buiiii!? [Charges toward the Trancel.]

League rep: [Crosses arms.] ?Harden.?

[As Eievui runs toward it, the Trancel is surrounded by a white glow, which disappears and leaves its surface to appear shiny.]

Eievui: [Rams into Trancel, then tumbles backwards with swirls replacing his eyes and a large bump with an X-shaped bandage appearing on his forehead.] ??.buiii?iiiii?..iiii?.?

Hiro: [Steps back and clenches teeth.] ?Gi?? [Stops clenching teeth and looks upward.] ?uh?? [Looks back at the battlefield and shrugs.] ?Try hitting it again!?

Eievui: [Swirls turn back to eyes, gets up, shakes head, loses head bump, and sneers.] ?Buiii?.? [Runs toward Trancel once more.]

League rep: ?Thread Spit.?

[Trancel shoots silk from a point between and below its eyes. The silk wraps around Eievui?s right foreleg, and due to Eievui?s running, all of his legs get entangled as well within a short amount of time.]

Eievui: [Falls forward and hits the ground, closing eyes.] ?Bui!?

League rep: ?Pokemon battling, like any competition, should involve strategy. The portion of this test is to show you can?t always defeat your opponent by being purely offensive.?

Hiro: [Clenches eyes shut.] ?Dammit!? [Opens eyes and clenches teeth.] ?How?s Eievui supposed to defeat this thing? If hitting doesn?t work, what else is he supposed to do? Wag his tail??

Eievui: [Opens eyes.] ?Bui?? [Raises tail and begins to wag it from side to side. At the same time, he begins to chew the silk off his legs.]

Hiro: [Sweatdrop slides down head and eyes turn beady.] ?I wasn?t being serious?.? [Widens eyes.] ?Eh??

[Trancel looks at the tail, then closes its eyes happily. Its body spreads out slightly, as though its inner muscles are becoming less tense.]

Hiro: [Gapes mouth open.] ?No way?? [Clenches fists and shouts.] ?Now, Eievui!?

Eievui: [Tears the silk off his legs, then hops to his feet.] ?Bui!? [Walks back a bit, then charges forward and slams into the relaxed Trancel, knocking it back to its trainer?s feet, unconscious.]

League rep: ?You need to memorize technique names better. That aside?? [Takes out Monster Ball and returns Trancel into it.] ?Well done.?

Hiro (narration): ?However, in the end, I managed to do well enough to pass.?

[Hiro, with Eievui on his shoulder, stands before a counter. The woman at the computer handed Hiro a belt with five Monster Balls on it, a Pokegear, and a Pokemon Encyclopedia, the latter two Hiro holds up and inspects questionedly.]

Hiro: ?What are these things??

Woman: [Looks up from computer screen at Hiro.] ?You don?t know? Well?? [Points at the Pokegear.] ?That?s a Pokegear. It contains a digital map and can also be used as a cellular phone.?

Hiro: ?Cellular phone?? [Closes eyes and smiles.] ?Sweet! I?ve wanted one of those.?

Woman: [Closes eyes and smiles, but with a sweatdrop sliding down her head. She reaches over for the Pokemon Encyclopedia in Hiro?s hand.] ?That is?.? [Presses a button which causes a holographic screen to pop up, surprising Hiro and Eievui, who back their heads slightly.] ?Your Pokemon Encyclopedia.?

Hiro: ?So it gives me the data on Pokemon?? [Straps belt around waist.]

Woman: [Nods.] ?It also contains your trainer ID, so don?t lose it.?

Hiro: ?Understood.? [Puts the encyclopedia into a holder on the belt, then clips the back of the Pokegear onto the belt.]

Woman: [Puts a small booklet on the counter.] ?Since you?re starting out, this should tell you how to work the Pokemon Encyclopedia.? [Lightly bows toward Hiro.] ?Good luck.?

Hiro: ?Thanks.? [Grabs the booklet and walks away.]

[At the edge of Wakaba Town, Hiro, now wearing a backpack, and Eievui stand before a long dirt road, with grass and random deciduous trees along the edge. Hiro pulls Kakureon?s Monster Ball from his pocket and slips it onto an empty holder on his belt. Hiro looks out at the wilderness with a look of determination on his face. In a matter of seconds, his determined look droops down to a worried frown.]

Hiro: ?I wonder how much wilderness I?m gonna have to walk.? [Takes out his Pokegear, punches in a couple buttons. Looks at the screen, then after a moment, he falls backward onto the ground.]

Eievui: [Turns to Hiro worriedly.] ?Bui bui!?

Hiro: [Stares at the Pokegear he holds above his head, eyes half-closed, one eye twitching.] ?15 kilometers to Yoshino City, 20 more kilometers to Kikyou City.? [Gets up and dusts himself off.] ?I have to walk so far to get back home.? [Drops head, blue vertical lines appearing over him.] ?This sucks.?

Hiro (narration): ?Thus, my journey had begun.?


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NOTES
-Are you left wondering what model of Pokemon Encyclopedias has a holographic screen? I take it you didn?t read Toshihiro Ono?s manga, ?Pocket Monsters: Dengeki Pikachu? (or ?Pokemon: The Electric Tale of Pikachu? in the States). Well, I?m using the spiffy model from that. As usual with my fics, I am not going to try describing what existing characters or objects look like, so you?ll have to either get the manga or look for scans.
 
author's note: I?d like to thank The Big Al, SilverBlaze09, and IceKing for helping me with the distances involved and length of time it should take to cover them.





NAME CHART
-Oudile=Feraligatr
-Itomaru=Spinarak
-Purin=Jigglypuff
-Monjara=Tangela
-Bakuphoon=Typhlosion
-Tattsuu=Horsea




CHAPTER 12: MISERABLE HIKE
第十二章：惨めなハイキング


[Hiro and Eievui stand outside Wakaba Town, vast grass fields and several trees spreading out before them. Hiro looks down at his Pokegear, then looks at a dirt road to his left.]

Hiro: ?Hmm?. The road does look like it would be easy. However?.? [Looks at the wilderness, then down at his Pokegear again.] ?If I just go straight, I?ll get there quicker. Normally, I?d get lost doing that, but since I have this navigational device with me.? [Points finger out towards the wilderness.] ?Alright! Let?s go that way!? [Walks forward.]

Eievui: [Nods.] ?Bui.? [Walks forward with Hiro.]

Hiro: [Walks down a grassy hill while looking down. He groans.] ?Geez, I?ve stayed away from the idea of training Pokemon my whole life because I never wanted to travel.? [Pictures his five sisters, grandfather, and Chris.] ?Everyone kept saying ?You should try it? and ?It should be fun? to the point of annoyance. My desire to live peacefully in Enju City never caused me to give in to that.? [Stops at the base of the hill and lowers eyelids.] ?But?. now??

Eievui: [Stops to look at Hiro with a sad, compassionate face.] ?buiiiii?.??

Hiro: [Clenches eyes shut, clenches fists, and sneers.] ?che?.? [Kicks at the grass.] ?Dammit!?

Eievui: [Jumps back in surprise.] ?BUI!?

Hiro: [Opens eyes and stomps forward.] ?Why?? Why did all this happen? Why was I forced into this?? [Stops, looks back to see Eievui catching up to him. He sighs.] ?It can?t be helped.? [Continues walking.] ?All I can do is try to return as quickly as possible.?

[The scene changes to Hiro and Eievui lying against a tree at night. Hiro?s eating ramen from a wooden bowl, while Eievui eats some dry food pellets on the ground. All the while, a dieing fire with a pot above it sits in front of them.]

Hiro: [Slurps some noodles and swallows, then starts scooping up some more with his chopsticks.] ?I have been taught how to start a fire without matches, but packing matches anyway makes things a lot easier.? [Slurps more noodles.] ?I wonder if I need to feed that Kakureon.? [Puts down bowl and takes out Pokemon Encyclopedia, as well as the manual explaining how to use it. Flips through the manual?s pages.] ?Let?s see?. general raising info.? [Stops at a page, then types in a few buttons on the device.]

Pokemon Encyclopedia: ?Feeding Pokemon. If a Pokemon remains in its Monster Ball, it doesn?t require food very often due to the Monster Ball?s life-supporting features and could last several times longer than they?d require food outside the ball. However, being able to eat, as well as freely roam around, is enjoyable to the Pokemon.?

Hiro: ?So it just makes them happy?.?? [Thinks back to when his blue-striped Kakureon was firing its rainbow-colored beam at Hiro?s face in the trainer registration building. When the thought ends, his head bolts up with his eyes widened. Closes eyes and smiles while a sweatdrop slides down his head.] ?It should be kept happy.?

Eievui: [Looks at Hiro in confusion.] ?Bui??

[Pulls out a Monster Ball and opens it, releasing a white light that forms into his blue-striped Kakureon.]

Kakureon: [Looks around.] ?Re??

Hiro: [Holds out a handful of dry food pellets.] ?Look.?

[Kakureon looks up at Hiro, who?s standing while holding a bag of Pokemon food in his other arm, eyes closed and smiling all the while.]

Hiro: ?This is very delicious. Have some.?

[Kakureon looks at the hand full of pellets, sniffs at it, then looks over at Hiro?s bowl of ramen. Hiro?s once again shown smiling towards it.]

Kakureon: [Stretches out tongue towards Hiro?s face.] ?Reeee?!?

Hiro: [Opens eyes and stares at the tongue.] ?Eh??

[The end of Kakureon?s tongue proceeds to wag left and right, slapping Hiro in the face each time. After one last slap, Hiro falls backwards with swirling eyes and swollen cheeks, dropping the bag, as well as the food in his hand in the process.]

Eievui: [Widens eyes and runs over to Hiro?s side.] ?Bui bui!?

Kakureon: [Reels tongue back into mouth, then points head toward Hiro?s bowl and stretches tongue out toward it.] ?Reeee?!? [Wraps tongue around all the ramen and snaps it back into mouth. Chews and swallows. Smiles and pats hand on belly.] ?On!?

Hiro: [Eyes widen in shock. Dashes over to his bowl, notices nothing remains in it, then closes eyes and lowers head while blue, vertical lines appear over his head.] ??d*mn?? [Holds up Monster Ball, points it behind him, and retrieves Kakureon in a red beam fired from it.] ?I can?t satisfy that bastard, can I??

[Eievui walks over, reaches out his front paw, and pats Hiro on the back. The scene changes to Hiro pouring dirt over the fire. He rolls out a sleeping bag, slips into it, and lays down with Eievui curling up on the ground next to his head.]

Hiro: [Sighs and looks up at the stars.] ?According to the Pokegear, I got about halfway there. I wonder if I?ll reach civilization tomorrow.?

[Hiro?s shown laying sideways in his sleeping bag, eyes closed. The scene changes to show Hiro, awake and wearing his school uniform. He walks down the streets of Enju City?s commercial district when Chris, riding atop his Airmudo, flaps down and hovers a distance in front of Hiro.]

Chris: [Closes eyes, smiles, and waves.] ?Yo, Hiro!?

Hiro: [Looks at him Chris with wide eyes.] ?Chris-kun??

Chris: ?I plan to leave on a Pokemon training journey soon. Wish me luck.? [Winks and holds up a thumb before flying away.]

Hiro: [Sighs and lowers head.] ?So many of my friends have left to train Pokemon. Things are really getting boring without them.?

Eievui?s voice: ?Bui!?

Hiro: [Quickly lifts head.] ?Huh?? [Turns around and notices an Eievui standing behind him.]

[Hiro?s about to walk towards it, but a drop of water falls on his head. He looks up, and tiny droplets of rain hit his face afterwards. The scene changes to show Hiro in his sleeping bag, eyes closed. A drop of water hits him on the cheek, and he slowly opens his eyes. A light rain starts to fall upon his face and the ground around him. "4099年4月20日 ( 月 )" (Monday, April 20, 4099) is displayed for a moment.]

Hiro: ?No way!? [Quickly slips out of sleeping bag and rolls it up.]

[As Hiro packs the sleeping bag with the rest of his stuff, the rain slowly turns into a heavy downpour. Hiro slings the supplies over his back then turns his head in several directions.]

Hiro: ?Eievui? Where are you??

Eievui: [Muffled voice.] ??..buiiii bui??

Hiro: [Widens eyes.] ?Ah!? [Takes supplies off back, gets out sleeping bag, and unrolls it, Eievui tumbling out of it.] ?Sorry, Eievui.?

Eievui: [Lays on the ground with swirls for eyes.] ?Buiii?iiii??

[Later, it?s still raining, and Hiro stares upward, eyes half closed and his left eyebrow twitching. A distant view reveals that he stands before a steep cliff wall.]

Hiro: [Looks down and clenches fist.] ?S***, I should?ve just traveled along the road.? [Glances up at the cliff again.] ?Hmm?? [Grabs a protruding rock in the wall and attempts to climb, but slips and falls off when he barely gets his feet off the ground. He gets back up and sighs.] ?Eievui probably couldn?t climb anyway.? [Walks to the left, Eievui trailing behind. Both walk slowly due to the mud and heavy downpour.] ?Let?s go around it.?

[The clouds are shown, still unleashing a heavy downpour. After a moment, the rain appears to die down. Back on the ground, Eievui shakes his fur coat dry. Ahead of Hiro and Eievui, the cliff merges to the side of a hill.]

Hiro: [Looks ahead.] ?That?s?? [Runs toward the base of the hill and sees a dirt path which goes up the hill. Holds up a clenched fist and grins.] ?Alright! We?re back on the main road!?

Eievui: [Closes eyes and jumps in celebration as well.] ?Bui bui!? [Ears suddenly perk up.] ?Bui??

Hiro: [Stops for a moment, then turns to look at the road leading away from the base of the hill.] ?Is that a vehicle??

[After a moment, the sound of tires rolling along a dirt road grow louder.]

Hiro: [Lips slowly curl up in a smile, then picks a surprised Eievui off the ground. Jumps up and down in joyish laughter while holding Eievui against his chest.] ?Lucky! Hahahaha!?

Eievui: [Swirls replace eyes as a result of Hiro?s jumping around.] ?Buiiiiiii?!?

[Hiro stops jumping around and, while still holding Eievui with his right arm, holds out his left hand and points his thumb upwards in an attempt to hitchhike. However, a rock suddenly flies through the air and smacks Hiro in the back of the head.]

Hiro: ?Ga?!? [Begins to fall forward.]

Eievui: [Looks up at Hiro?s face.] ?Bui??

[Hiro manages to let go of Eievui, but not soon enough that the Pokemon doesn?t get stuck under his body once he hits the ground. Hiro lies with his face in the mud, a small cloud of smoke rising from the back of his head, and Eievui struggles to get from underneath Hiro but to no avail. A large shadow looms over the two.]

Eievui: [Widens eyes.] ?Bui?? [Slowly looks up, and the scene briefly shows a nearby tree.] ?BUIIIIIII!!!?

[A view of where Hiro and Eievui were shows that they?ve now disappeared. A light green pickup truck carrying crates of produce passes by. Out in a forest clearing, an Oudile is seen carrying an unconscious Hiro over its shoulder, along with Hiro?s supplies, while holding Eievui up by the back of his neck.]

Eievui: [Flails around, attempting to bite and scratch at the hand that holds him.] ?BUI BUI!!! IBUIII!!!! BUIIIII!!!?

[The Oudile gently places Hiro on the ground, then places his supplies next to him. It then looks at the enraged Eievui, smirks, and tosses it forward.]

Eievui: [Tumbles on the ground, then gets up and snarls.] ?Buiiiii?!? [Dashes at the Oudile.]

[The Oudile begins to glow red as Eievui jumps up. As Eievui?s about to strike it, the Oudile disappears and the fox strikes his head against a tree, which he slowly slides down before rolling back on the ground with a huge bruise on his face. A red retrieval beam is seen going into a bush.]

Hiro: [Slowly moves his arms, groans, and gets up while rubbing the back of his head.] ?What the hell happened?? [Opens eyes in realization.] ?Ah! The vehicle!? [Jumps to his feet and looks around.] ?The road! Where??? [Snaps fingers.] ?Dammit! How?d we end up here??

Eievui: [Stumbles over to Hiro in a daze.] ??buiii??

Hiro: [Looks at Eievui.] ?Eh?? [Kneels down and looks at Eievui?s face.] ?Are you alright?? [Eievui nods in reply and puts on a smile despite being in pain.] ?I wonder where we are.?

Voice: ?Itouuuu?!?

[Hiro turns around to see an Itomaru looking at the two fiercely, poised as if ready to fight.]

Hiro: ?What the hell?s your problem??

Itomaru: [Walks towards Hiro and Eievui.] ?Ito?!?

Hiro: ?Go away!? [Kicks the Itomaru.]

[The Itomaru?s sent flying through the air and landing before a tree. Up in the canopy of this tree, several eyes glow in the dark.]

Itomaru: [Gets up, eyes water up, and tears begin to spray out from them.] ?ITOUUU?OUUU?!?

[Immediately afterwards, several Ariados and Itomaru leap down from the tree?s canopy, landing in front of the Itomaru to face Hiro.]

Hiro: [Stares at the swarm with widened eyes and clenched teeth.] ?Gi? gi?? [Slowly backs away.]

lone Ariados: ?RIAAAA!!!? [Runs toward Hiro.]

other Ariados (simultaneously): ?RIAAAA!!!? [Follow suit.]
other Itomaru (simultaneously): ?ITOUUU!!!? [Follow suit.]

Hiro: [Turns around and runs.] ?Run away!?

Eievui: [Follows Hiro.] ?BUI!?

[Once all the Itomaru and Ariados are gone, all that remains is Hiro?s supply bag, which he left behind. Something quickly swoops in, grabs it, and jumps behind the bushes quick enough to only be made out as a blur. Afterwards, the sound of human sprinting can be heard. An overhead view of the forest is shown. The clouds from the rain earlier are clearing out, and the sun is beginning to set. Meanwhile, back inside the forest, Hiro and Eievui are frantically fleeing from the swarm of spiders chasing after them.]

Hiro: [Panting.] ?Haa? Haa? how much longer are they pursuing us?? [Stops and rests his hand against a tree to catch his breath, Eievui stopping next to him. Looks back to see the swarm coming up to them.] ?We need to think of some way to allude them. For now, though, let?s just keep out distance.?

[Hiro and Eievui prepare to run forward again, but one of the Ariados propels a strand of adhesive thread that sticks to Eievui?s leg and makes him trip.]

Hiro: [Turns around.] ?Ah! Eievui!?

Eievui: [Tries to crawl forward, but the Ariados reeling in its strand seems to be much stronger.] ?BUI BUI!!?

Hiro: ?D*mn!? [Tries to run toward Eievui, but two Ariados get in his way and begin to walk toward him. A bead of sweat slides down his cheek as he clenches his teeth.] ?What do I do? Maybe? it?s risky, but?? [Pulls out a Monster Ball and releases Kakureon.]

Kakureon: ?Reon??

Hiro: ?Kakureon, fend off those Ariados and help save Eievui!?

[Kakureon looks over at Eievui?s plight, then turns to Hiro, looks at him for a moment, then proceeds to lash its tongue out at him. As the tongue goes towards his face, several thoughts race through Hiro?s mind. He first thinks about Utsugi-hakase.]

Utsugi: ?You?re really close to that Eievui, aren?t you??

Hiro: [Thinking.] (?Why do I protect Eievui? A person who doesn?t even have an interest in Pokemon, and a Pokemon I?ve only known for a few days, why??)

[Thinks back to Eievui slamming into his teacher?s forehead.]

Hiro: [Thinking.] (?Was it really just because he stood up for me at that time? even if I got in trouble???)

[Thinks to that scene in his earlier dream where Chris flies away on Airmudo.]

Hiro: [Thinking.] (?Perhaps I was getting lonely.?)

[Pictures a little girl hugging a Purin with a red ribbon tied around its ear.]

Hiro: [Thinking.] (?Or just maybe, like everyone else, hidden deep down, I??)

[Hiro immediately holds up his arm, causing the tongue to wrap around it, his hand grabbing the end of the tongue.]

Kakureon: [Eyes widen.] ?Kaaa?.!??

Hiro: [Thinking.] (?Whatever the case??) [Out loud.] ?Eievui is my friend! I won?t let him get killed that easily!?

Kakureon: [Clenches fists in anger.] ?Kureee?? [Breathes in and shoots out a rainbow beam that travel above its tongue towards Hiro?s face.]

[Hiro leans his head to the left, dodging the beam. Kakureon gapes as a bead of sweat slides down its face.]

Hiro: ??you bastard?? [Lifts up arm and swings Kakureon forward by its tongue.] ?STOP SCREWING WITH ME AND DO SOMETHING HELPFUL!!!?

Kakureon: ?Kakurouuuun!!!? [Being swung around by Hiro causes it to smack into the two Ariados sideways, knocking them out of Hiro?s path and allowing him to run up to Eievui, who?s still struggling against the Ariados pulling him in.]

Hiro: ?Stop iiiiit!? [Swings Kakureon down to slam into the Ariados?s face.] ?Kakureon, use your beam attack on that thread!?

Kakureon: [Still attached to Hiro?s arm through its tongue, and currently has swirls in its eyes from all the swinging around earlier.] ?Rouuu?.ouuun?.?

Hiro: ?Hey?? [Pats Kakureon?s cheek and lets go of the tip of its tongue.]

Kakureon: ?Re!? [Eyes return to normal, unravels tongue from Hiro?s arm and conceals it in its mouth once again. It then follows Hiro?s command and shoots its beam at the thread stuck to Eievui?s leg, successfully breaking it.]

Eievui: [Gets up and smiles gleefully.] ?Buii!?

Hiro: [Grins and clenches fist.] ?Alright!?

[Hiro suddenly notices an Itomaru?s head needle glow purple and shoot a stream of small purple pins up at him. He quickly reacts by ducking, but doing so causes the pins to hit a sleeping Aipom on an overhead tree branch.]

Aipom: [Suddenly wakes up in a wild flail.] ?Ukikkikkikki!!!? [Accidentally slaps a Monjara, who was also on the branch, in the face.]

Monjara: [X-shaped vein appears on its head and it wraps its vines around Aipom.] ?Mouuun?.!?

Aipom: [Waves hands in front of self while shaking head.] ?Eipamu!? [Nods head down in Hiro?s direction.] ?Uki!?

[Both Monjara and Aipom look down at Hiro, who?s now getting up from his earlier duck. The two Pokemon make angry faces at him.]

Monjara: ?Mouuuuun!!? [Stretches out vines and grabs Hiro.]

Hiro: [Looks down at the vines in confusion.] ?What the hell?!? [Is pulled up to the branch.]

Aipom: [Repeatedly slaps Hiro in the face with tail.] ?Ukikkikkikkikki?!?

[Eievui and Kakureon look up at Hiro with sweatdrops sliding down their faces. They then look at the swarm surrounding them with their backs facing eachother. Then, a stream of fire shoots at Aipom, knocking it off the branch, and then another stream of fire hits Monjara, making it drop Hiro before falling off as well. The two Pokemon run away with burn marks all over their bodies. Hiro gets up with swollen cheeks, looking confused along with Eievui and Kakureon.]

voice: ?Bakufuuuu!!!?

[They, as well as the swarm, look over to see a Bakuphoon, roaring loudly as fire bursts out around its neck. It picks up one of the Ariados and throws it at another, knocking both unconscious.]

Bakuphoon: ?Bakufuuu?? [Breathes out a stream of fire at several Itomaru and Ariados, steering clear of Hiro-tachi.]

Hiro: ?Now, let?s go!?

[Hiro, Eievui, and Kakureon run away from the battle scene. After a bit of fleeing through the forest, they see an orange light above some bushes.]

Hiro: ?That must be the forest?s exit!?

[The three jump over the bushes and see several tall buildings not too far in front of them.]

Hiro: [Eyes glisten as he smiles.] ?That is? Yoshino? City??

[With exaggerately large, cartoony eyes, they suddenly realize that there is no ground underneath them, due to the bushes, which they just leapt past, being next to a small ledge that leads into a river. They all fall into the water and splash around trying to swim against the current. A long vine reaches out from the ledge, wraps around all three of them, and pulls them out of the river. The vine holds them all in front of its owner, a Meganium, which has Hiro?s supplies on its back.]

Hiro: [Looks at the supplies.] ?Are those mine??

Meganium: ?Meganiumu.? [It smiles at them, then jumps across the river while still holding them all. It then places them on the ground and releases its vine from them. Then uses its vine to grab the supplies and place it next to them. It then heads back toward the river.]

Hiro: [Straps the supplies on his back, then waves at the Meganium.] ?Thanks a bunch!?

Meganium: [Turns around, closes eyes, and smiles.] ?Niumu!? [Jumps across the river again and heads into the forest.]

Hiro: [Looks at Kakureon, who lays on the ground in exhaustion.] ?Kakureon, thank you too.?

[Kakureon quickly sits up, blushes, then runs to Hiro, covering its face the whole way, to grab a Monster Ball off his belt and return itself into it.]

Hiro: ?What was that??

Eievui: ?Bui.? [Shrugs shoulders.]

Hiro: ?Let?s go, Eievui. Just a little further, and we can have a very comfortable rest for the night.?

[Hiro and Eievui proceed to walk toward the city. Back in the river, a Tattsuu peeks its head above the water a looks at them.]

Tattsuu: ?Tattsuu.?


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Hmm, I come bearing reviews... XD I'm only reading up to chapter 12 for now. XP XD


Okay, first off, if this was one of those normal fics, I'd be horrified at the length. Fortunately, this reminds me a lot of the comic books, and this is about perfect for those. XD Good there.

Next we have grammar/spelling. The grammar's okay, especially since you've provided the translation for the Japanese words, and I've only spotted a few misspellings. XD

Plot/storyline: From the first, I've remained intrigued. First it was the fact that it starts in Ecruteak with a relation of the Kimono Sisters, which is a first.

Then it kept me going because this kid was passionate about not becoming a trainer. There was plenty of anim?-style humor for laughs, and you haven't given the kid super-sporty clothes, which is a bonus.


Talk talk talk. XD

Okay, I have a few questions relating to plot.

1. Since chapter six or so, I've gotten the impression that Hiro is being followed and protected by somebody. There was the strange kid that gave him the Kecleon, then the Meganium and Typhlosion that defended him. Is that the impression I'm supposed to get?
2. Why would the Rocket higher-ups send a possibly volatile creature with two guys who couldn't control it? Especially considering their view about the intelligence of Pok?mon in the past; why would they give it leadership of the strike group?
3. When will we get to discover what is up with Eevee's ear?

If I think up any more, I'll put it here. For now, it looks so far like what it would if it were a manga. Whoot! XD

?SilverBlaze09?
 
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Thanks for the review. Concerning the length, I'm trying to fit these within the 20,000 character limit that PC has. I'm not going to do an exact page-by-page, panel-by-panel manga script until later on.

1) Yeah, you are meant to be left with that impression.... however, the kid who gave him the Kakureon is completely unrelated.

2) Though Kiryuu is a suspicious character, he isn't one to defy orders as a member of Rocket Gang. Plus being as strong, skilled, and intelligent as he is, he's almost always capable of pulling off a mission without failure (even when he purposely gives the enemy an advantage), and therefor, a near-perfect choice for deployment. Loyalty towards teammates is another issue, but considering what there is to be gained on such missions, would the Rocket Gang really care about losing one or two of their lower subordinates?

3) I'm pretty sure anyone could guess that Eievui's ear will play a huge role in the story. Trust me, when it's revealed, you'll know since it'd be impossible to miss.
 
*bows* I shall watch this with the greatest of interest. XD

1) Yeah, you are meant to be left with that impression.... however, the kid who gave him the Kakureon is completely unrelated.
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*nods* It's just that you dedicated a scene to him, so I thought he might be more important.

It's a good thing that I'm able to spot the obvious. *twitch* XD
2) Though Kiryuu is a suspicious character, he isn't one to defy orders as a member of Rocket Gang. Plus being as strong, skilled, and intelligent as he is, he's almost always capable of pulling off a mission without failure (even when he purposely gives the enemy an advantage), and therefor, a near-perfect choice for deployment. Loyalty towards teammates is another issue, but considering what there is to be gained on such missions, would the Rocket Gang really care about losing one or two of their lower subordinates?
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*frowns thoughtfully* You're the author, so you know best... It's just that I can't remember the Rockets ever trusting anything to a 'lower' creature, even if they were outwardly loyal, without giving the human underlings some way of controlling them. With a deadman switch back with the boss, of course. XD

Ah, well, this is your fic. XD I am mere reviewer. XD
3) I'm pretty sure anyone could guess that Eievui's ear will play a huge role in the story. Trust me, when it's revealed, you'll know since it'd be impossible to miss.
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*rubs hands* Gooooodd... XD

I'm hooked. XD I haf subscribed to this. XD

?SilverBlaze09?
 
Recap: Kimono Hiro and his Eievui have reached Kikyou City, the last step in returning to their home in Enju City. However, the route back home ended up being unexpectedly blocked.

NAME CHART
-Sabonea=Cacnea
-Windie=Arcanine
-Madatsubomi Tower=Sprout Tower
-Madatsubomi=Bellsprout
-Ratta=Raticate
-Hanekko=Hoppip
-Hayato=Faulkner
-Updraft=Gust
-Will Power=Confusion
-Shirogane Tournament=Silver Tournament
-Eievui=Eevee
-Enju City=Ecruteak City
-Kikyou City=Violet City
-Tattsuu=Horsea
-Yorunozuku=Noctowl
-Merriep=Mareep

HOW TO SAY IT IN JAPANESE
-Madatsubomi Tower=Madatsubomi no Tou
-Updraft=Kaze Okoshi
-Will Power=Nenriki
-Shirogane Tournament=Shirogane Taikai
-Water Gun=Mizu Deppou




[ Hiro, lowering his head with Eievui riding his back, walks along a sidewalk of Kikyou City, which boasts a very traditional Japanese-style appearance.]

Hiro (narration): ?I?m Kimono Hiro, 14 years old.? [Eievui walks onto Hiro?s shoulder as he raises his head. Hiro pulls out his Pokegear, pushes a button to turn it on, and both he and Eievui look at the screen.] ?I live in Enju City with my grandfather and five older sisters, but? I?m not there right now due to certain circumstances.?

[The Pokegear?s screen displays a digital topographic map of Jouto. Squares represent the various towns and cities, with a blinking square as Kikyou City. Hiro?s finger comes up and points at Kikyou City, then traces it downwards along a lightly-colored area. The view shifts back to Hiro holding the Pokegear.]

Hiro: [Stops walking for a moment, closes eyes, sighs before reopening them, and continues moving forward.] ?Alright. I just need to go around this mountain range here, and I should get there.? [Turns off Pokegear. Talks while stashing it away.] ?Fortunately, Golden Week?s coming soon. Catching up in school shouldn?t be difficult.?

Hiro (narration): ?Journeying doesn?t interest me. I?m accustomed to leading a normal life in Enju. Go to school, live with my family, and??

[A teen-age boy and girl walk past Hiro. They both wear navy blue Japanese school uniforms, and their eyes are shadowed by their bangs. The girl has pink hair tied in a ponytail that reaches down to her mid-back, and the boy has olive green hair with shoulder-length sideburns and a braid in the back which also reaches his mid-back. The girl?s holding the boy?s left arm, and the boy?s holding a Sabonea with both his hands. Hiro stops to look back at them.]

Girl: [Turns head towards the boy.] ?Yuuki-kun, promise me you won?t leave with that Pokemon until after graduation.?

Yuuki: [Rubs the back of his head with his right hand.] ?Understood, understood??

[Hiro continues looking back at them. Eievui looks at him, tilting his head.]

Hiro (narration): ?I?d like to get a girlfriend soon.?

Eievui: [Jumps atop Hiro?s head and looks down at him.] ?Bui??

[Hiro looks up at Eievui, smiles, and continues walking.]

CHAPTER 16: FOR LOVE
第十六章：愛の為に


[A torii, the red archway signifying the entrance of a Shinto shrine, is shown shortly before a 500 yen coin is seen laying atop the thumb of a clenched hand. At a different angle, Hiro looks down at the coin, which is laying on his own thumb, before flipping it into the air and letting it fall into a large wooden box that sits before him. Afterwards, he grabs the red and white rope hanging overhead and shakes it to ring the bell it?s attached to. He puts his hands together and bows forward. Eievui sits atop the supply pack, which is set to the side.]

Eievui: [Gazes at Hiro.] ??..bui?.?

[As Eievui stares, the sound of Hiro?s hands clapping twice is heard. When the view shifts back to Hiro, he?s raising from another bow with his hands together, eyes closed.]

Hiro: [Takes a deep breath, then slowly breathes out.] ?Oh gods? please?? [Opens eyes slightly, looking downwards.]

[Close-up on Hiro?s right eye, which closes again before a flashback shows him and Eievui falling into a cargo crate. Another flashback shows Utsugi standing in front of Hiro and Eievui, inaudibly moving his mouth, and one more shows Hiro and Eievui standing before the yellow and black-striped tape of a road block, which prevents access to an area with fallen trees and shrubbery being removed by road-workers. The flashbacks end, and Hiro?s shown from a back-view, slowly lowering his head.]

Hiro: ?I? truly wish to return home.?

Eievui: [One foot steps down the supply pack towards Hiro momentarily, then he lowers head.] ??buiiii.?

[The scene changes to show a view of the sky, filled with a few clouds. Hiro sits outside the worship hall against a stone pedestal with a statue of a Windie at the top, arms folded behind his head, and Eievui still sitting atop the nearbysupply pack. The two are looking upwards as the shadow of a cloud passes over them.]

Hiro: ?Hey, Eievui??

Eievui: [Turns to Hiro.] ?Bui??

Hiro: ?Do you think we?ll ever return??

[Eievui continues looking at Hiro, tilting his head.]

Woman?s voice: ?That?s a new face.?

[Hiro widens his eyes, unfolds his arms to bring them to his sides, and looks forward. He sees a young woman with shoulder-length black hair, light blue eyes, white dress, light pink highheels, tan purse, holding a small wooden board, and being pictured standing against a sparkling background.]

Woman: ?I visit this shrine often and this is my first time seeing you. A traveler??

[Hiro?s face is blushing a deep red and his eyes appear to be dotted. Eievui looks towards him with a question mark appearing over his head.]

Hiro: [Closes eyes, still blushing.] ?Y? yes? from Enju City, I?m Hiro.?

Michie: [Closes eyes and smiles.] ?Michie. Nice to meet you.?

Hiro: [Eyes open, stops blushing.] ?Hn??

[Hiro notices the wooden board that Michie?s holding, which says the following written in black ink.]

?家族が健康でありますように
-ミチエ?

(My family?s well-being.
-Michie)

Michie: [Walks over to a nearby rack with several similar wooden boards hanging on it.] ?I love to help out traveling trainers. Would it be good if I showed you around?? [Hangs her board on the rack.]

Hiro: [Closes eyes, smiles, and nods.] ?Yeah? that?d be nice.?

[In the next scene, Michie?s walking on the sidewalk alongside a stone wall, which appears to be in front of the courtyard to a tall wooden building. Hiro?s blushing and smiling with his eyes closed as he trails behind, with Eievui by his side.]

Hiro: [Comes to a stop.] ?Wonderful, isn?t she Eievui??

Eievui: [Freezes as he was about to take another step forward. Turns head and looks up at Hiro.] ?Bui??

Hiro: ?Cute? kind? loves family?? [End of lips curl up further as flowers and sparkles appear in the background.] ?A perfect girl.?

Eievui: [Jumps onto Hiro?s shoulder.] ?Bui?? [Waves front paw in front of Hiro?s face.]

Hiro: [Opens eyes and leans forward, holding up fist and grinning.] ?Alright, I?ve decided!?

Eievui: [Falls backwards off of Hiro?s shoulder, flailing forelegs.] ?Buibuibuiiiii?!? [View is on Hiro?s upper-torso, so only the sound of Eievui hitting the ground is heard.]

Hiro: [Blush disappears. Pulls out Pokegear and looks down at it.] ?Before I leave this Kikyou City, I?ll get her phone number without fail??

Michie: [Stands at a wide, opened metal gate in the wall, shouting over to Hiro and Eievui.] ?Hey! Are you coming?!?

[Hiro looks up from his Pokegear, and Eievui?s head, which has an X-shaped bandage on it and a small tear forming in his left eye, pops up next to Hiro?s waist.]

Eievui: ??bui??

Hiro: [Closes eyes and smiles relaxedly as he stashes away his Pokegear. Sparkles pop up around his head as he calls out.] ?Yeeeeees!? [Runs towards the gate.]

[Inside, Hiro, Eievui, and Michie walk through a clear path in the courtyard.]

Hiro: ?So, this is the Madatsubomi Tower??

Michie: [Nods.] ?Yeah.?

Hiro: ?Why do they call it???

[Upon stepping through the open doorway of the tower, Hiro looks forward and gasps. In front of them lies a large, open room, with a ceiling reaching up to, supposedly, the very top of the tower. Several walkways with guardrails and stairs leading up and down to one another line the walls to surround a big square area with a large wooden pillar, which sways back and forth, in the middle. Various visitors and monks walk along the walkways, as well as varying groups of Pokemon, including Koratta, Ratta, Otachi, Poppo, Caterpie, Madatsubomi, and Hanekko, which enter and exit through small, open windows.]

Hiro: [Sets supply pack to the ground and slowly walks up to the guardrail, staring at the swaying pillar as he lays his hands on the guardrail.] ??sweet??

Michie: ?This is one of the most interesting places in Kikyou. That single post supports the whole tower, and despite its swaying, the rest of the tower doesn?t move at all.? [Walks up next to Hiro and lays hands on the guardrail, looking up at the pillar as well.]

[Hiro looks at Michie as she comes up to him. Eievui, meanwhile, wanders towards a nearby group of Poppo and Hanekko, all either hovering or perching at the edge of the walkway.]

Michie: ?It?s a very interesting puzzle, isn?t it? It?s not yet fully explained, but several have related the swaying post and the still building to the movements of a Madatsubomi.?

[In the background, Eievui and one of the Hanekko playfully chase eachother around.]

Hiro: ?But?? [Eyes turn beady, head tilts.] ?What kind of flower bud is that??

Michie: ?Madatsubomi?? [Points to a Madatsubomi standing on the walkway across from them.] ?That Pokemon over there is Madatsubomi.?

Madatsubomi: [Body wriggles while head stays in place.] ?Tsubo??

[Eievui jumps up and tackles Hanekko, and the two tumble along the ground a bit. They both look up at eachother up, close their eyes, and laugh playfully.]

Eievui (simultaneous): ?BUIHIHIHIHI?!!?
Hanekko (simultaneous): ?HAHAHAHAHA?!!?

[In the background, a sweatdrop slides down Hiro?s head, and he forces a laugh.]

Hiro: ?Hahahaha?. of course?.?

Hanekko: [Opens eyes, hovers off the ground and looks down at Eievui, smiling.] ?Hane, hane hane??

Eievui: [Opens eyes and looks up at Hanekko.] ?Bui??

Hanekko: ?Hane! Hane hanene?? [Closes eyes, smiles, and points back towards Hiro and Michie.] ?Hane?!?

Eievui: [Closes eyes and nods.] ?Bui, bui!?

[Hiro and Michie are still looking up at the post. Hiro takes a quick glance at Michie and blushes before turning away.]

Michie: ?Truth is??

[Hiro looks towards her again.]

Michie: [Blushes and looks downwards.] ?I was lonely often. I didn?t make many friends in school, and I used to be distant from my parents and elder sister, so I came here to look at the pillar and clear my mind.? [Closes eyes, smiles, and raises head.] ?However, I became friends with the Pokemon here? also??

Eievui?s voice: ?Bui!?

[Hiro and Michie and look down to see Eievui and Hanekko.]

Michie: ?Oh?? [Turns to Hiro.] ?Look, Hiro, it seems like your Eievui?s made a friend.?

Hiro: [Crouches down and looks at Eievui.] ?Really?? [Looks at Hanekko, tilting head.] ?This Pokemon is??

Michie: ?It?s a Hanekko.?

Hiro: [Closes eyes, crookedly smiles, and sweatdrops.] ?Is? is that so??

Hanekko: ?Hane!? [Hovers up to Michie and sits atop her head.]

Michie: [Closes eyes and smiles.] ?Cute!?

Hanekko: ?Hane!? [Hovers off Michie?s head and drifts down to her shoulder. Tugs at the strap of her purse.]

Michie: [Dotted eyes plop open.] ?Huh??

Hiro: ?Hey, what are you doing?!? [Tries to grab Hanekko.]

[Hanekko slides the purse off Michie?s arm, dodging Hiro by swiftly moving sideways.]

Michie: [Eyes widen.] ?M? my purse!!? [Tries to grab her purse, but misses when Hanekko floats upwards.]

Hiro: [Sneers.] ?You?? [Jumps at Hanekko.]

[Hanekko hovers beyond the guardrail. Hiro misses again, and this time, the upper half of his body ends up leaning over the guardrail as a result.]

Hiro: [Eyes widen.] ?Uwaaaa?!!!? [Closes eyes and flails arms.]

Michie: [Grabs the back of Hiro?s sweater and pulls.] ?Giii?? [Closes eyes and clenches teeth until Hiro?s no longer leaning. Afterwards, she lets go and sits down, panting.] ?Haa? haa??

Hiro: [Rests hands and head atop the guardrail.] ?I?m saved??

[Eievui, with a white glow streaking behind him, jumps on top of Hiro?s head. Hiro?s face hits the guardrail, and Eievui jumps at Hanekko, still with a white glow behind him.]

Eievui: ?Buiiii!!!?

Hanekko: [Closes eyes and smiles.] ?Hane hane!? [Ascends.]

Eievui: [Eyes widen.] ?Bui?? [Flails legs.] ?Buibuibui?!? [Grabs and hangs onto the purse, which is hanging down from Hanekko.]

Hiro: [Gets head up from the guardrail and gasps.] ?Eievui!?

[Hiro looks around and spots a nearby staircase leading down. He goes to the base floor just below and runs up to the guardrail. He jumps over the guardrail onto central bottom floor, and a nearby monk notices.]

Monk: ?Hey!?

Hiro: [Runs beneath Hanekko and looks up.] ?Eievui, let go!?

Eievui: [Looks down at Hiro.] ??buiii?? [Closes eyes and clenches teeth before letting go of the purse and dropping.]

[As Eievui falls, a vine wraps around Hiro?s torso.]

Hiro: [Looks down at vine.] ?Eh?? [Gets pulled backwards by the vine.] ?Guooo?!? [Back slams into the guardrail. He cringes.] ?Ow ow ow?!?

[The vine appears to originate from a Madatsubomi, which is standing atop the guardrail, and behind the guardrail is the monk from earlier.]

Monk: ?You?re not allowed near the post!?

Hiro: [Looks up at the monk.] ?But? Eievui??

Monk: [Points a finger upwards.] ?Madatsubomi?!?

Madatsubomi: ?Tsubo!!!? [Lashes out a second vine, which goes upwards and circles around Eievui.]

Eievui: [Looks at the vine.] ?Bui?? [The vine circle encloses around his torso with a snap, knocking the wind out of him.] ??bua?? [A wad of saliva flies from his mouth before his body drops limp.]

Madatsubomi: ?Tsubo?? [Reels in the vine holding Eievui.]

Hiro: [Grabs Eievui.] ?Eievui! Are you alright??

[Madatsubomi unwraps its vines from both Hiro and Eievui and they reel back into its body.]

Eievui: [Slowly raises head and blinks eyes opens.] ??bui???

Hiro: ?Thank god.?

Michie?s voice: ?Hey??

[Hiro and Eievui look up at Michie, shouting down to them from the upper level.]

Michie: ?Are you alright?!?

Hiro: ?I?m alright!?

[Hiro gets tapped on the shoulder. He looks back to see the monk. He looks down and notices he?s still outside the guardrail.]

Hiro: ?Ah! Excuse me.? [Jumps back over the guardrail, still holding onto Eievui, then returns up the stairs.]

Michie?s voice: ?Let go, let go!?

[Hiro looks over at Michie. Hanekko?s flying around her,

Hiro: ?Michie!? [Runs over to her.]

Hanekko: ?Ha ha!!! Hane hane hane!? [Floats higher up as Hiro approaches.]

Hiro: [Looks at Hanekko. Lets Eievui jump off him onto the ground, then turns to Michie.] ?Don?t worry?? [Points thumb to self.] ?Leave me to retrieve your purse, Michie-chan.?

Michie: [Looks at Hiro with watery eyes. Closes eyes, smiles, and nods.] ?Please!?

[Hiro looks at Michie with a smile before he and Eievui run to some stairs leading upwards.]

Michie: [Eyes widen and blink a couple times.] ?Michie? chan??

[Hiro and Eievui run toward another set of staircases, passing by what appears to be the Kikyou gym leader, Hayato.]

Hayato: ?Hn?? [Looks back at Hiro and Eievui.]

[Hiro and Eievui run up the stairs to reach the level that Hanekko?s at. Hanekko drifts over near Hiro, floating just behind the guardrail from him. Hanekko swings the purse towards him.]

Hiro: [Tries to grab it.] ?Haaaa?.?

Hanekko: [Swings the purse away from him again. Puts one hand to mouth, closes eyes, and giggles.] ?Ha ha ha ha!?

Hiro: [Looks up at Hanekko and snorts.] ?D*mn you?? [Looks down and puts hand to chin.] ?Because I?d risk damaging the purse, I can?t use Tattsuu and Merriep?s projectile attacks? so, what??? [Looks up, takes hand away from chin and snaps fingers.] ?That?s it!? [Grabs a Monster Ball off his belt and throws it onto the floor.] ?Come out, Tattsuu!?

[The Monster Ball opens and Tattsuu materializes from the white energy released.]

Tattsuu: [Looks up at Hiro.] ?Tattsuu?? [Eyes widen open and pupils go white.] ?Tsuu?!?

[Hiro grabs Tattsuu rather abruptly and places her atop the guardrail.]

Hiro: ?Tattsuu, I need you to put as much pressure into your Water Gun attack as possible.?

Tattsuu: [Pupils return to being black. Sweatdrops and eyes move towards Hiro.] ?Tattsuu?? [Nods head.] ?Tsuu!? [Breathes in deeply.] ?Tattsuuuu?!?

Hiro: [Positions Tattsuu?s head at an upwards angle.] ?Eievui, propel yourself with the Water Gun and try to hit Hanekko, then jump off of it back onto here. Understand??

Eievui: [Nods.] ?Bui!? [Jumps onto the guardrail, and positions himself to pounce before Tattsuu.]

Hiro: ?Now!?

[Eievui jumps forward, over Tattsuu, who immediately unleashes a thin jet of water with enough force to send Eievui flying upwards, above Hanekko.]

Hanekko: [Gets passed by Eievui and looks up.] ?Hane??

Eievui: [Once his ascent in the air stops, he flips and positions his head downwards before falling towards Hanekko.] ?Buiiiiii?!!!?

Hanekko: [Flails arms and legs as beads of sweat fly off it.] ?Hane hane hane hane?!!!? [Floats away from its current position.]

Eievui: ?Buiii?!? [Swipes his paw in front of himself and begins twirling, moving towards where Hanekko moved to.]

Hanekko: [Looks up.] ?Hane??

Eievui: [Lifts head upwards before slamming on top of Hanekko with his shoulder.] ?BUI!!!?

Hanekko: [Left eye closes and right eye turns into a star.] ?Haneeee?.? [Loses grip on purse.]

Hiro: [Holds fist up to side and smiles.] ?He did it!?

Tattsuu: [Hops on the guardrail a couple times in glee.] ?Tattsuu, tattsuu!?

Hiro: ?Now, jump?? [Eyes widen and backs away slightly in shock.] ?What the???

[Eievui prepares to leap off Hanekko?s head, but a yellow powder drifts upwards, off of Hanekko?s body.]

Eievui: ?Bui!? [Leaps upwards slightly, but then drops downwards immediately, with his eyelids slowly closely.] ??buiii iiii?? [Closes eyes completely and continues falling alongside Hanekko and the purse.]

Hiro: ?Eievui!? [Pounds guardrail, clenches teeth, and lowers head.] ?Dammit, it happened once more!?

Michie: [Looks up at the falling Pokemon and gapes.] ?No way!?

Hiro: [Leans over rail and looks down.] ?I need to shout down to that monk from earlier?? [Eyes widen.] ?Eh??

[Hayato jumps from the level he was on and dives head-first towards Eievui and Hanekko.]

Hayato: ?Go!!!? [Throws a Monster Ball downwards to release a Yorunozuku.]

Yorunozuku: ?Zuruuu!? [Dives towards Eievui.]

Hiro: ?That guy is?? [Blinks.] ?Who is he??

Tattsuu: [Looks down along with Hiro.] ?Tsuu??

Hayato: ?Yorunozuku, Updraft!?

Yorunozuku: [Positions self upright in the air.] ?Zuruu!? [Flaps wings rapidly.]

[Strong gusts of wind from Yorunozuku?s wings converge to create an updraft of air beneath Eievui, Hanekko, and the purse. They all rise upwards in the updraft, allowing Hayato to nab the sleeping Eievui on his way down.]

Yorunozuku: [Grabs the back of Hayato?s shirt as he?s grabbing Eievui. Falls with Hayato a bit before it gently flaps its wings.] ?Zururururu?!? [Flapping gradually turns from gentle to rapid, allowing it to hold up Hayato.]

Hiro: [Returns Tattsuu to her Monster Ball.] ?Alright!? [Runs to the staircase leading downwards.]

[Hayato looks down at the sleeping Eievui and smiles, then looks upwards. Yorunozuku slowly ascends while carrying him. Meanwhile, Hanekko?s slowly coming back to its senses as the updraft carrying it ends and it starts to fall once again, along with the purse.]

Hanekko: [Looks down and widens eyes.] ?Hane?? [Tries to move the leaves on its head to fly, but notices they?ve been bent downwards, as a result of Eievui?s earlier assault. Squeezes eyes shut and screams as it hopelessly falls.] ?HANEEEEEEE!!!?

[A blue aura suddenly surrounds Hanekko and the purse, and both start to slowly levitate in the air.]

Hiro: [Looks down from the staircase.] ?Wha???

Hayato: [Stares at Hanekko and the purse.] ?What the hell is this??

[Hanekko and the purse rise up to Hayato?s height, which is at the level Hiro?s currently on, one floor above the entrance.]

Hanekko: [Opens eyes to reveal its eyes are glowing blue. Looks in anger at the Eievui in Hayato?s arms.] ?Haneeee?!?

[Hanekko unleashes a blue wave of energy which strikes Hayato, Yorunozuku, and Eievui.]

Hayato (simultaneous): ?Uooooo?.!!!?
Yorunozuku (simultaneous): ?Zuruuuuu?!!!?

[Both Hayato and Yorunozuku, as well as Eievui, slam into a wall.]

Hiro: [Looks over and eyes widen.] ?Ah?? [Runs over to Hayato?s landing point.]

Hanekko: [Leaves unbend themselves. The blue aura fades.] ?Hane?? [Quickly grabs the purse before it drops.]

[Hayato and Yorunozuku are laying on the floor just below where they slammed into the wall. Eievui drowsily crawls out from Hayato?s arms and shakes his head. Hayato and Yorunozuku slowly get up afterwards.]

Hayato: ?That Hanekko? knows Will Power?? [Rubs head.]

Hiro: [Runs up to them.] ?Are you alright??

Hayato: [Nods head.] ?Yeah.?

Eievui: [Looks at Hiro and jumps into his arms.] ?Bui!?

Hiro: [Looks down at Eievui, then at Hayato.] ?Thanks for rescuing Eievui.?

[Hayato grins before standing to his feet. They all look up as Hanekko hovers overhead and out an open window.]

Hiro: ?Ah? that Hanekko still has Michie-chan?s purse. Let?s go, Eievui!? [Runs off.]

Eievui: ?Bui!? [Runs behind Hiro.]
 
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[Hayato puts his hand on his hip. He and Yorunozuku look at Hiro and Eievui for a moment.]

Hayato: [Smirks.] ?Heh? I should still help him, shouldn?t I??

[Hiro and Eievui step off the stairs and run towards the entrance. Michie?s still standing near the entrance, looking worriedly at Hiro as he runs down the walkway.]

Hiro: [Passes by Michie. Thinks to self.] (?I won?t give up.?) [Dashes out the entrance and looks up at Hanekko from the courtyard. Sneers, clenches fists, looks downward, and speaks softly.] ?That kind and pretty girl? I love her?? [Looks up at Hanekko again.] ?For her sake?? [Runs toward a nearby tree.] ?I?ll do my best to not disappoint her?? [Shouts.] ?I WON?T GIVE UP!!!? [Jumps up.] ?HAAAAA?!!!? [Grabs a low-hanging branch on the tree. Grunts as he climbs onto the branch.] ??hiii?? [Stands atop the branch. Leans hand against the trunk and looks up towards Hanekko once more.]

Hayato?s voice: ?Hey, hey, boy? don?t be so rash.?

Hiro: [Blinks eyes and looks down.] ?Hn??

[Hiro sees Hayato, standing in the courtyard and with his Yorunozuku hovering behind him. Eievui looks toward them as well.]

Hiro: ?You again?? [Looks towards the Yorunozuku. Slowly opens mouth and smiles. Points at Hayato.] ?Hey, can you let me borrow your bird??

Hayato: ?Hn?? [Turns head back towards Yorunozuku with a confused look.] ?You want Yorunozuku??

Hanekko: [Digs hand around in the purse.] ?Hane, hane, hane?? [Pulls out a leather booklet. Eyes widen.] ?Hane?!?

[Yorunozuku holds Hiro by the back of his shirt as it flaps up towards Hanekko.]

Hanekko: [Looks down at Hiro and Yorunozuku as they approach.] ?Hane???

Hiro: [Clenches teeth and grabs a Monster Ball off his belt. Throws the ball up towards Hanekko.] ?Take this!?

[The ball opens up and releases a white energy upwards. As the white energy begins to take shape, Hanekko?s eyes glow with a blue light. However, before Hanekko could act, the forming energy makes contact with Hanekko?s body, which suddenly starts to get electrocuted.]

Hanekko: [Eyes widen and stop glowing. Electricity surges through its body as it shouts in pain.] ?HAAAA?!!!?

[The energy finally forms into Hiro?s Merriep, whose static wool is causing Hanekko to get electrocuted. Merriep ascends just a little more, along with the Hanekko he?s forcing upwards, before the two fall back down again.]

Hiro: [Catches Merriep?s Monster Ball as it drops back down, then immediately retrieves Merriep with a red beam and puts it on his belt. Pulls out another Monster Ball from his belt. Pushes the button on it, causing it to enlarge. Looks at Hanekko.] ?You bastard? return Michie-chan?s purse!? [Throws the Monster Ball at Hanekko.]

[Hanekko drops the leather booklet it was holding onto a nearby tree branch. Afterwards, the Monster Ball hits Hanekko on the top of the head, both Hanekko and the purse convert into energy, and the ball opens up and contains the energy before closing. As the ball falls down, Yorunozuku flies underneath and Hiro catches it. The ball wobbles slightly in his hand before stopping.]

Hiro: [Closes eyes and sighs.] ?I did it?? [Opens eyes and notices the booklet that Hanekko dropped, still laying on the tree branch.] ?Hey, Yoru??

Michie?s voice: ?That was awesome, Hiro-kun!?

[Hiro looks down to see that Michie was outside, apparently watching the whole time. She waves her hand to him and smiles. Hayato grins, looks down, and gives Hiro a thumbs-up.]

Eievui: [Stands next to Hayato. Smiles and closes eyes.] ?Bui bui!?

[Hiro smiles while Yorunozuku descends. Upon landing, Michie walks up to him, holding both hands to her chest.]

Michie: ?You retrieved it? You retrieved my purse??

[Yorunozuku lets go of Hiro?s shirt and lands on the ground, then walks over to Hayato. Hiro nods and opens the Monster Ball to release Hanekko.]

Hanekko: [Looks around in confusion, still holding Michie?s purse.] ?Hane??

[Michie tries to grab her purse back, but Hanekko hovers upwards again, causing her to miss.]

Michie: [Widens eyes and a sweat bead flies off her head.] ?Haa??? [Looks up at Hanekko.]

Hanekko: [Laughs.] ?Ha ha ha ha ha ha?!?

Hiro: [X-shaped vein pops on his head. Shouts at Hanekko.] ?Hey, Hanekko! Don?t play! Return her purse!?

Eievui: [Jumps on top of Hiro?s head and shouts at Hanekko also.] ?BUI!!!?

Hanekko: [Looks at Hiro and Eievui, then lowers head.] ?Haneeee?? [Descends.]

[Michie grabs her purse and hugs it.]

Hiro: ?Hey, Hanekko, could you retrieve the thing you dropped on the branch up there?? [Points up.]

Hanekko: [Looks at Hiro, then nods.] ?Hane!? [Hovers upwards.]

Hayato: [Kneels down and rubs Yorunozuku?s back.] ?You did good, Yorunozuku.?

Yorunozuku: [Closes eyes and spreads wings.] ?Zuruuu!?

Hayato: [Takes out a Monster Ball, retrieves Yorunozuku, stashes away Monster Ball, then stands up.] ?Well, boy, it was good that I could help out. But now, I need to go.? [Walks towards the open gate.] ?I?ll see you again.? [Holds out one hand and waves as he walks away.]

Hiro: [Slowly waves back.] ?Bye bye?? [Watches Hayato round the corner of the gate, then turns around.]

Michie: [Steps in front of Hiro, still hugging her purse.] ?Thank you so very much.?

Hiro: [Closes eyes, steps back, and sweatdrops.] ?Ah? um?? [Half-opens eyes, lowers head, and scratches his cheek.] ?That?s??

[Eievui?s looking looking up at Hiro with question marks surrounding his head. Hanekko, meanwhile, Hanekko has floated up to the leather booklet.]

Hiro: [Stands up straight.] ?Yo? you?re welco??

Hanekko: [Holds up the leather booklet and shouts down to Hiro.] ?Hane hane!? [Tosses down the booklet.]

Hiro: [Looks up.] ?Hn??

Michie: [Smiles and shouts.] ?Ah, Dear!? [Runs past Hiro.]

Hiro: [Looks forward with eyes wide open, one eye twitching.] ?D? Dear!?? [Booklet lands on top of his head.]

Michie?s voice: ?Why are you here??

Hiro: [Slowly grabs the booklet off the top of his head and looks at the leather cover for a moment. Opens the booklet, and almost immediately, a katana flies out of nowhere and imbeds itself in between Hiro?s neck and shoulder.] ?Gya?? [Eyes turn into white circles with a roughly-drawn outline around them. Raises arm before falling backwards.]

Eievui: [Looks down at Hiro with small, beady eyes. A sweatdrop slides down his head.] ?Buiiii??? [More question marks pop around its head.]

[Blood leaks outwards from Hiro, and in his hand, which has twitching fingers, is the opened booklet, with a photograph fitted into a sleeve on each side. In the left sleeve is a picture of Michie wearing a western-style wedding dress, closing her eyes, opening her mouth with a cheerful smile, and leaning onto the arm of a man with short, brown hair, red eyes, a black kimono, and smiling. They both are walking down the steps of a Shinto shrine. The other picture shows Michie in a hospital bed, her hair slightly messy, smiling with half-closed eyes, wearing a pink maternity dress, and holding up a baby wrapped in white cloth. Behind her is the man from the other picture, only this time, he has a thin mustache going around his lip, is wearing jeans and a white T-shirt that reveals his muscular tone. He?s placing his hand on Michie?s shoulder, closing his eyes, and grinning.]

Michie?s voice: ?Let me show you the boy who helped me out just now.?

[Michie, with her purse now strapped around her shoulder, walks up. Trailing behind her is her husband, who looks just like he did in the right picture, only this time, he?s wearing an orange T-shirt, as well as a little boy, about two years old, with messy brown hair, blue eyes, overall jeans, and green/yellow-striped shirt.]

Michie: ?Hiro-kun, this is?? [Looks down at Hiro.] ?Huh? What?s wrong??

Hiro: [Lays on the ground, sword still stabbed between his neck and shoulder, eyes closes with tears streaming down them.] ?It? it?s nothing??

Michie?s voice: ?Ah? you got my pictures back too? thanks!?

[The scene changes to the outside of a two-story house. It?s night, so the house?s inner lights are on. The scene changes again to show, sitting at each side of a low, square table in respective clockwise order, Hiro, Michie?s husband, Michie, and Michie?s son, all eating dinner, not wearing shoes. Hiro?s Eievui, Tattsuu, Merriep, and Hanekko are near where Michie?s sitting, eating from a few small bowls.]

Hiro: [Holds up a clump of rice with his chopsticks, holding a bowl of rice in the other hand.] ?Thanks for letting me stay here.? [Puts rice in his mouth.]

Michie: [Holds a soup bowl in both hands. Closes eyes and smiles.] ?Don?t mention it.? [Opens eyes and points chopsticks toward Hiro.] ?Those Pokemon Centers are a free service, so their quality isn?t as great as a night spent at a household.?

Hiro: [Closes eyes and nods in agreement.] ?Yeah, yeah, that?s right.? [Eats some more rice.]

Michie?s husband: [Leans toward Hiro and grins.] ?My wife?s wonderful, isn?t she??

Hiro: [Eyes bulge out. Takes chopsticks out of mouth and thumps hand at chest a couple times. Grabs a glass of water and gulps it down. Takes glass away, throws head downward, and gasps for air.] ?Fuaa?? [Blushes, closes eyes and turns to Michie?s husband.] ?Yeah, wonderful? haha?? [Forces a laugh. Sweatdrop slides down head.]

Michie?s son: [Puts an empty bowl on the table and sets his pair of chopsticks on top of it. Closes eyes and claps hands together.] ?Thank you for the meal!? [Separates hands, opens eyes, and looks up at Hiro.] ?Big Brother, can I play with your Pokemon??

Hiro: [Blush disappears and turns to Michie?s son. Nods.] ?Yeah.?

[Michie?s son gets up and walks over to where Hiro?s Pokemon are eating.]

Hiro: [Suddenly widens his eyes and holds his hand forward.] ?Wait! Don?t touch Merriep!?

[Michie?s son was about to rub his hand against Merriep?s fur.]

Michie?s son: [Looks back at Hiro.] ?Hn?? [Turns back to Merriep. A small spark flies off of Merriep?s fur and onto his hand.] ?Uwaa!? [Widens eyes and jumps back. Rubs his hand, looks at Merriep for a moment, then proceeds to rub Eievui?s fur instead.]

[Hiro puts his hand back down, lowers his head, and sighs. Michie and her husband, who had their heads turned toward their son, turn back toward Hiro.]

Michie: ?Hey, Hiro, how many badges have you won so far??

Hiro: [Has a fried shrimp sticking out of his mouth.] ?Badge?? [Chews and swallows the shrimp.] ?None.?

Michie?s husband: ?Still a rookie, eh? I thought that, seeing your low number of Pokemon.? [Looks back at Hiro?s Pokemon.]

[Michie?s son is rubbing his hands along Hanekko?s leaves.]

Hanekko: [Closes eyes, puts hands to hand and wriggles leaves to escape his grip.] ?Hane!?

Michie?s husband: [Turns back to Hiro.] ?You?re striving towards Pokemon Master, aren?t you??

Hiro: ?No.?

[Michie and her husband look at eachother.]

Michie: [Leans forward, hands on the table.] ?Well, I wonder if you?re going to compete in this year?s tournament.?

Hiro: ?No.?

Michie?s husband: ?Return home with lots of Pokemon friends??

Hiro: ?No.?

Michie: ?Become a Coordinator??

Hiro: ?Become a what??

Michie?s husband: ?Live as a traveler??

Hiro: ?Absolutely not.?

Michie: [Takes hands off table and sits back down.] ?That?s so?? [Looks up at Hiro.] ?Then, why did you become a trainer??

Hiro: [Looks down and closes eyes. Places bowl and chopsticks atop the table.] ?The only thing I?m planning to do is?? [Slowly opens eyes and lifts head.] ?Return to my home.?

[Things turn silent for a moment. Michie and her husband look at eachother, then nod. The view changes to outside the house.]

Hiro?s voice: ?Huh? What? what?s this?! Let go!?

[Door opens and Hiro flies out, landing facedown onto the cement walkway leading to the door.]

Hiro: ??giii?? [Places a hand on the ground and lifts himself up with it. Looks back at Michie and her husband standing in the door, both with their eyebrows lowered in anger.] ?What the hell are you doing!??

[Hiro?s shoes get thrown into his face and he falls back down.]

Michie: [Points finger at Hiro.] ?What the hell are you doing!? You become a trainer, but you?re not gonna take things seriously??

Hiro: [Sits up.] ?It couldn?t be helped.?

Michie: [Folds arms across chest.] ?What couldn?t be helped? You became a trainer, and when you?re still new, you try to quit!?

Hiro: [Climbs to his feet.] ?That?s not it!?

Michie: ?Don?t lie!?

Michie?s husband: [Holds head up and shouts in pain.] ?OW!!!?

[Hiro and Michie look back at her husband. Next to his leg, which appears slightly singed, is Hiro?s Merriep. Behind her are Hiro?s other Pokemon and Michie?s son. Michie?s husband steps aside and all of Hiro?s Pokemon run over to their trainer, except Hanekko, who hovers to him instead. Michie?s son watches Hiro from behind his parents. Michie?s husband holds up his singed leg and rubs it a bit.]

Hiro: [Looks down at his Pokemon, then looks back at Michie.] ?Why do you care? You?re not a trainer!?

Michie: [Faces down and snorts.] ?Fu?? [Walks up to a desk near the doorway. Opens one of the drawers, and pulls out a Pokemon Encyclopedia. She walks over to the doorway and holds it up in front of Hiro. She looks down and closes her eyes.] ?My husband?s a trainer as well. Our Pokemon are in storage, but we intend to participate in this year?s Shirogane Tournament.? [Holds Pokemon Encyclopedia down to her side.]

Hiro: [Looks down for a moment in silence.] ?I don?t want to enter any tournaments like you? I never even wanted to travel.? [Looks at Michie and points at her.] ?Michie-san? you find family to be important, don?t you??

Michie: [Eyes widen open.] ?Ah??

Hiro: [Looks down again with clenched teeth, bringing his arm back down.] ?My home? my family? I loved them too much to want to leave.? [Starts clenching his fist. Eyes clench shut.] ?However, things have occurred beyond my control. That?s the truth.? [Half-opens eyes.] ?Now?? [Holds up fist and steps forward, eyes open all the way.] ?I?m trying to return to what?s important! Don?t you understand?!?

Michie?s husband: [Steps forward.] ?Leave this house!?

Michie: [Holds hand up to her husband.] ?Wait, Dear!?

[Michie?s husband looks down at her and backs away.]

Michie: [Steps towards Hiro.] ?Is this true??

Hiro: [Puts fist down, looks at Michie, and nods.] ?It?s complicated, but it?s the truth.?

Eievui?s voice: ?Bui!?

[Michie looks down to see Eievui nodding in agreement.]

Michie: [Slowly smiles. Turns and walks back to the door.] ?Come in!?

Hiro: ?Ah?? [Smiles as his eyes start to glimmer. Closes eyes and nods.] ?Yes!? [Starts to walk toward the door, but then walks back and bends down to pick up his shoes.]

[Binocular frames surround the scene of Hiro and his Pokemon going back into Michie?s house. The view changes, and we see the fisher woman holding a pair of binoculars to her eyes. She?s leaning her foot against the parapet of a tall building which overlooks most of Kikyou City. Her hair gently flutters back in the breeze.]

Fisher Woman: [Takes binoculars away from her eyes. Lays the arm holding them across her knee.] ?It?s sad, isn?t it?? Ensuring that boy?s always traveling with his Eievui, but keeping him away from what he holds important.?

[A shadowed figure walks up from behind her.]

???: ?We have our reasons.?

Fisher Woman: ?I understand.? [Turns head back toward the figure.] ?But we can?t force him forever. Couldn?t we have at least explained the situation to him??

???: ?Some day? But for now, we can only do our best to increase his interests in journeying.?

[A Yorunozuku flaps onto the top of a nearby light pole.]

Yorunozuku: [Eyes glow in the dark.] ?Zuru??

[Underneath, the shadowey figure slowly walks towards the light.]

Fisher Woman: [Narrows eyes.] ?I?m counting on you??

[The figure walks into the light and reveals himself to be Hayato.]

Fisher Woman: ??Hayato??


つづく



NOTES
-Golden Week is around the end of April/beginning of May. It?s a week containing a few Japanese national holidays that occur around the same time.
-I?ll keep this short and simple. Whatever it was Hiro and Michie were doing at the shrine involves the Shinto religion. If you?re interested to know more, look it up. I recommend the keywords ?ema? and ?haiden?.
-?Tsubomi? means ?flower bud? and is part of Madatsubomi?s name derivation. Until Michie points out the Pokemon, Hiro thought the tower was named after an everyday plant.
-In Japan, surnames come first rather than last, so it's Kimono Hiro instead of Hiro Kimono.
-Japan has many name suffixes, 'kun' being one of them. 'Kun' is usually used for young boys, but sometimes girls too. For future reference, 'chan' is a way to address young girls and little kids (which is why Michie stood there blankly when Hiro referred to her as ?chan? in this particular chapter), 'san' is a polite way to address people, and 'sama' is an even politer way and is usually meant towards superiors (it can also be used by oneself to be extremely boastful). 'Sensei' is a title for teachers, 'hakase' is a title for doctors, and 'tachi' specifies a group that is with the person (much like saying "and the others" or "and company" or "and his/her friends" in English).
 
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I already made this announcement on the green forums a few days ago. Here it is for the readers here (slightly editted).

I guess I owe it to my loyal readers, after stating that I'd try to get this next chapter in earlier than last time, to provide an explanation after all this time: I'm sorry... I know I said I planned against it before, but I'm going to start from scratch again. I'm still not completely sure about certain things in this story, but I'm seeking advice from various other, more professional sources now instead of relying on reader feedback. On top of that, when I get back, I won't be doing a fanfic.... in the couple years I've been doing this, I realize one thing: I am not fit for fanfiction, a fact I've made quite apparent. The only reason I did it in the first place was because I couldn't do a manga.... I lacked confidence in my art abilities, and I feared the difficulty of correcting a mistake. This time, though, I'm gonna try, dammit! I still lack a scanner, and I still suck at drawing with a mouse, but I've been practicing on that. Look...

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I sketched Jukain's head off of a screenshot a couple months ago (it's the pic of him using Leaf Blade on Ukon's Dirtengu, for reference). Though I'm shakey with a mouse, I figure I did well by tracing over lines repeatedly to give it a sketch look. Later on, I also tried to do a bishoujo eye, even give it a bit of a manga shading tone.

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I might be able to improve greatly over time, even with a mouse. Just keep practicing, closely observing traditional manga artwork, it could end up looking great. Also, these sketches were done in MSPaint... I intend to use Photoshop to refine them better (I'm still waiting to borrow a disc). I intend to do this manga in authentic Japanese this time, too. I feel I know enough now, especially after doing some translation work, plus I intend to recruit a proofreader from Pokesho forums or some other place I'm familiar with to help me out on that (an English translation will be provided, of course).

I don't know how well this will end up working out, and god only knows how slow progress will be (drawing is usually more time-consuming, plus I'm swamped with job-searching, translation projects, college, and my other hobbies), but I hope you'll all bear with me on this. I wish to reject this fanfiction realm that I've only been forcing myself into and start anew, doing the Japanese doujinshi that I've always wanted to work on. I intend to really get things going (that, or more practice) once I get Photoshop installed. I intend to start off with a small preview of chapter 1, The Mysterious Eievui, before working a one-shot that I originally submitted in a contest on the green forums. This one-shot will act as sort of a test run before I attempt work on a long-running series.
 
god damn, I've gone a while without an update on things. I'm still getting to it, so please be patient. I've been kinda busy with things (I finally got a friggin' job ^^), and I've been talking with some very informative people for advice on story depth (also, after one of them gave me some advice on drawing manga, I probably will scan drawings as opposed to my Photoshop method). All I can ask from all of you is to remain patient. I can assure everyone that I'll be hard-pressed to completely drop this after all this time (this has probably been the longest time a story's been on my mind without completely dropping it), and even if it takes me a decade, I'm hoping to see this doujin project of mine through all the way.

Also, I thought I'd let all of you be aware that there's going to be a title change. Pocket Monsters Chronicles really isn't working out for several reasons. For one thing, my brother was being a little bastard about the "rights" to the story (like there was any copyrighting involved in the first place... he still manages to be an annoying little prick nonetheless). His title has little to do with the story (I've always felt awkward about that fact), and I figure I've differentiated the story enough from what little concepts he had that I could call it my own by now (I'll probably change the main character, for that matter), so fuck him, I say. The problem between us has since been resolved, but since I won't doubt he'll bring up this crap again just to be a cheapskate and get something he wants out of me like he always does (hell, he had long-since abandoned this story until he wanted to force me into loaning him money or something, which he has a very bad tendency of never returning, and thus causing the aforementioned argument to come up), I figured this was the best option. There's also the fact that 4kids already used the name "Pokemon Chronicles" by this point and proceeded to give it a bad name like there's no friggin' tomorrow. With that said, I've already got a new title planned, but I figure I'll keep it a surprise from all of you until I make further announcements. ^^ Look forward to it, everyone.
 
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Uh, arent you going to include Gordon Thomson as Adam? For me, Robin Sachs was the biggest turnoff on the small screen, which is why I didnt watch that dreadful reunion movie.
 
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