FireRed hack: [HotW #58] Pokémon Torzach: The Legend Begins (We're back in action, people!)

[Vanitas~]

Meestlee! Now, the arms are kinda in the same place, because I liked them there. But I have enlarged everything else. I also made the head more poofy.

And for the people how don't know, he's a flying seed, like a dandy lion seed.

So, how does it look now?

Edit: My 100th post!

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And finally, I get it now. I think it looks great, now that I know what it is. I also like that I can see its face, for the most part. The eyes could be a shade darker and so could the mouth, but I still give it a 9/10. ^_^

 

[Vannah☆]

Okay, lay the criticism on! Somewhere else, I'm lacking that...

And that doodle is... Strange. o.O But it doesn't matter. XD

Now, I've re-scratched EVERYTHING below his face, and I edited a lot above his face. Now, I did my best to make it look like the doodle, but some things, of course, remain slightly unchanged. I added two more colors, and fixed up the face, too.

Spoiler:

Meestlee! Now, the arms are kinda in the same place, because I liked them there. But I have enlarged everything else. I also made the head more poofy.

And for the people how don't know, he's a flying seed, like a dandy lion seed.

So, how does it look now?

Edit: My 100th post!

Better, but still needs to be bigger. Make the face larger, make the dress...thing, in a diagonal pattern going away from the opponent. The eyes need some black pixels, as does the mouth. I still can't really tell that the face is poofy. And remember, more than one shading color is good. Add a few more. Make the highlight blotch on top of the head.

Something like that. xD Piece of poop that took me 10 minutes, but that's sorta where the shading and positioning of my choice would be.The head needs to have more black outlining for the poofballs in it. o_o I want to be able to see every feature of this thing.

And I cant stress enough... You have so much more room than you're allowing! Make the best of your space! The eyes should be very similar to this guy's.

His head should be about that size as well. See what I'm saying? o-o

 

[Westrmistr]

Better, but still needs to be bigger. Make the face larger, make the dress...thing, in a diagonal pattern going away from the opponent. The eyes need some black pixels, as does the mouth. I still can't really tell that the face is poofy. And remember, more than one shading color is good. Add a few more. Make the highlight blotch on top of the head.

Something like that. xD Piece of poop that took me 10 minutes, but that's sorta where the shading and positioning of my choice would be.The head needs to have more black outlining for the poofballs in it. o_o I want to be able to see every feature of this thing.

And I cant stress enough... You have so much more room than you're allowing! Make the best of your space! The eyes should be very similar to this guy's.

His head should be about that size as well. See what I'm saying? o-o

Well, that certainly is... Strange lookin'. o__o But oooookay...

Now, I have added another color of shading, I have edited the face, changed where his body is blowing to, and added black to his eyes.

Spoiler:

Thing one. This one is just the last sprite with the edited face. And then

Thing two. The newest one.

So, how does it look?

 

[Vanitas~]

So, how does it look?

I think they are both er... mmm... cute. I like the second one better though beause the "tail" doesn't look as flat. O_o

 

[Vannah☆]

Well, that certainly is... Strange lookin'. o__o But oooookay...

Now, I have added another color of shading, I have edited the face, changed where his body is blowing to, and added black to his eyes.

Spoiler:

Thing one. This one is just the last sprite with the edited face. And then

Thing two. The newest one.

So, how does it look?

West, the pokemon is wierd. There's nothing -that- strange about the drawing. Still, I think everything needs to be enlarged. The face hasn't been edited besides the eyes, and its still not apparent that that his face is a poofball. It's also not clear that those red things on the sides of the face are ear...things. xD And you cant really tell from this what the red things under the head are.

If the sprite were made into a drawing, instead of looking like this or this, it would like ----> this^^^

Again, the best way to do this is to make the sprite bigger with more degrees of shading. Don't take the shading from the original art. Colors can be similar, but use your own three degrees of shading for the major colors. While it might be true that if someone saw the original art and saw the sprite, they would recognize it to be that original art.... if they saw the sprite for the first time, they wouldn't be able to make it out as well, and the mental image could turn into something like the last image above.

AGAIN, to get that cute but small eye effect, using something similar to that sprite in my previous post is best.

I dunno. I never liked this concept art to begin with.

 

[Westrmistr]

West, the pokemon is wierd. There's nothing -that- strange about the drawing. Still, I think everything needs to be enlarged. The face hasn't been edited besides the eyes, and its still not apparent that that his face is a poofball. It's also not clear that those red things on the sides of the face are ear...things. xD And you cant really tell from this what the red things under the head are.

If the sprite were made into a drawing, instead of looking like this or this, it would like ----> this^^^

Again, the best way to do this is to make the sprite bigger with more degrees of shading. Don't take the shading from the original art. Colors can be similar, but use your own three degrees of shading for the major colors. While it might be true that if someone saw the original art and saw the sprite, they would recognize it to be that original art.... if they saw the sprite for the first time, they wouldn't be able to make it out as well, and the mental image could turn into something like the last image above.

AGAIN, to get that cute but small eye effect, using something similar to that sprite in my previous post is best.

I dunno. I never liked this concept art to begin with.

Okay. Um... here we go.

Spoiler:

Meestlee! Now, I've added more detail to make his head look more poofy and I have enlarged his head. I can't remember everything else I did to him though. XD

 

[Vanitas~]

I keep saying it, but each time you show a new one, it gets better and better, so again I say it looks great!

 

[Vannah☆]

Okay. Um... here we go.

Spoiler:

Meestlee! Now, I've added more detail to make his head look more poofy and I have enlarged his head. I can't remember everything else I did to him though. XD

Now its beginning to look like a something! I thing that if you added more black outlining around the eyes and one more layer of shading to the dress...thing...... (median between grey and white) it'll be perfect.

EDIT:

Update!

The cubone - marowak evo and a tree thing. xD Tell me how good the tree is, as I've never made one before.

Oh, and the shading's a little off on the evolution. I know. I'll fix it eventually.

 

[Westrmistr]

Now its beginning to look like a something! I thing that if you added more black outlining around the eyes and one more layer of shading to the dress...thing...... (median between grey and white) it'll be perfect.

Okay, get ready to see the greatest sprite in history! Just open that spoiler for a big surprise.

Spoiler:

Surprise!

Spoiler:

Meestlee! Now, I've added another shade for Meestlee. Now, if you wanted more black in the eyes, you're gonna get this.

It just looks a little off to me.

Edit: That evolution for Marowack looks awesome! And the tree looks good.

 

[Vannah☆]

Okay, get ready to see the greatest sprite in history! Just open that spoiler for a big surprise.

Spoiler:

Surprise!

Spoiler:

Meestlee! Now, I've added another shade for Meestlee. Now, if you wanted more black in the eyes, you're gonna get this.

It just looks a little off to me.

Edit: That evolution for Marowack looks awesome! And the tree looks good.

o_o Mind if I edited one minor thing? It's so close to being perfect. I just cant describe what I want done with the eyes. Its a mix between the two you made. Also, the extra shading you made is a default color (I think.) It should be a lighter shade of that greenish color and it should be right under the darker color so there's not as much contrast between the dark and the light. Looking great though by the way.

So theres four things I want to change:

1. Making that blue shade a lighter shade of the grey-green color and making it go a little under the dark shadow
2. The eyes, slightly
3. Add...hum....5 pixels to the top-ish of the dress thing
4. Change two of the pointy-ish poofs at the top of the head


And those are the only things wrong with it. =3 Otherwise, its beautiful.
And thanks. ^_^ Anything you would change with them?

EDIT: I made the changes. xD Can I at least pm it to you?

Oh and edited the marowak evo sprite already.

There.

 

[Westrmistr]

o_o Mind if I edited one minor thing? It's so close to being perfect. I just cant describe what I want done with the eyes. Its a mix between the two you made. Also, the extra shading you made is a default color (I think.) It should be a lighter shade of that greenish color and it should be right under the darker color so there's not as much contrast between the dark and the light. Looking great though by the way.

So theres four things I want to change:

1. Making that blue shade a lighter shade of the grey-green color and making it go a little under the dark shadow
2. The eyes, slightly
3. Add...hum....5 pixels to the top-ish of the dress thing
4. Change two of the pointy-ish poofs at the top of the head

And those are the only things wrong with it. =3 Otherwise, its beautiful.
And thanks. ^_^ Anything you would change with them?

Um... Did you edit this? I don't remember you saying what you wanted changing. While you did that, I made this.

But now I'll change what needs to be changed. I'll come back.

Edit: You edit too fast! DX Okay, just PM.

 

[Vannah☆]

Um... Did you edit this? I don't remember you saying what you wanted changing. While you did that, I made this.

But now I'll change what needs to be changed. I'll come back.

Edit: You edit too fast! DX Okay, just PM.

XDDDD Sorry, ok ok I'll pm.

 

[Westrmistr]

Okay! I think I've got it this time!!!

THERE! XD

 

[minchan]

maybe it's me but...
the tail and feet of the marowak evo shouldn't be that light... right? at least the tail should be shaded more... i think

tell me if i'm totally wrong here. lol

 

[Vannah☆]

Okay! I think I've got it this time!!!

THERE! XD

Way better, but the left ear and top of the head still bugs me. >O You should use the outline color I used for the lining on the top of the head. Plus the shading I used for that right-ish poof ball.

EDIT:

Like this?

I dunno, I like more light. The bone is out toward the opponent a little so, a little light can get through there. Whatever looks better to ya'll though. =3

 

[Westrmistr]

Way better, but the left ear and top of the head still bugs me. >O You should use the outline color I used for the lining on the top of the head. Plus the shading I used for that right-ish poof ball.

*Is panting from all the running around* I'll... Do that... Next... I guess... Here!

*Falls on ground* I'm... Being... Ignored...

 

[minchan]

Way better, but the left ear and top of the head still bugs me. >O You should use the outline color I used for the lining on the top of the head. Plus the shading I used for that right-ish poof ball.

EDIT:

Like this?

I dunno, I like more light. The bone is out toward the opponent a little so, a little light can get through there. Whatever looks better to ya'll though. =3

hmm yea. that looks a little better to me. ^^;;

btw that tree... uh it's for scenery right? not a pokemon? (coz it would be a strange pokemon for sure. lol)

 

[alo123]

I like how you guys fix each others sprites it shows team unity keep up the good work

 

[Vannah☆]

hmm yea. that looks a little better to me. ^^;;

btw that tree... uh it's for scenery right? not a pokemon? (coz it would be a strange pokemon for sure. lol)

YES. It's treemon, the most ownful pokemon ever!. >O xD Nah, its scenery. Give me a grade please? Never made scenery before. Ever. o-o


You didn't fix the the top of the headdd. xD Look at the thing I sent you. Want me to edit your sprite again with the edited top?

 

[Westrmistr]

YES. It's treemon, the most ownful pokemon ever!. >O xD Nah, its scenery. Give me a grade please? Never made scenery before. Ever. o-o


You didn't fix the the top of the headdd. xD Look at the thing I sent you. Want me to edit your sprite again with the edited top?

Here! Last sprite for tonight! I've gotta go, but I'll be back tomorrow!

Vannah, do me a favor and NOT post that edited Meestlee. PLEASE. So there it is, and I'll be back tomorrow! Bye! And the tree looks good.