Ledyba on my blank

[vulpi]

Can you tell me what's wrong on this card?

 

[QFred]

The layout is interesting, very cool, indeed!! Me loves it!!

But has a problem I already saw in the Scyther, the space for attack is heavily reduced an it is not regular, which difficults the reading in a certain point and make faking more difficult!

But there is an illus thingy, but it was better placed below the w/r/rc thingy!

8,2/10 to the blank!

I think the first attack's name is not very well applied in this situation. Maybe Gather would be a better word.

Ledian is not part Poison or part Fighting sooo, the Psychic weakness is a bad thing in this card since it doesn't reflect well the reallity of the Pok?mon. Lack of weakness is bad too, you must place the Fighting (or Ground if you work with duals) resistance because Ledian is Bug/Flying.

I don't like the art, but I won't take rating for that because: 1. I'm a good person (even if I'm a pig, a freak, a fat ugly guy and a depressed, I still am a good person!) and 2. Because that's not relevant for the use of the card in a match.

The second attack is very fair even if a lil' broken and is not correctly worded. I t should say, in the last sentence: "If 1 of them is heads, remove 1 damage counter from both Ledian and the Defending Pok?mon.".

If the card doesn't have a resistance, doesn't have the "-30" thing, but I won't count it because it needs to be there but needs a fighting symbol next to it.

I like the third attack much! Is different, sado-masochist and cool! Another possible name could be "Russian Rolette".

Any way, the card is cool!

7,7/10

 

[Blennix]

me likes
but i reckon it should be italic, make it normal
i agree what QFred said it shouldn't have a Psychic, maybe fire?
the attack Fury should be worded lyk this Flip a coin. If heads, search for a basic Energy card and attached it to Ledian
and the attack Grass Life at the end of it u have if it is tails, and heads. Maybe put heads and tails

 

[Datriot]

I think it's really good, better than the official layout. I hope lots of peope use this.:)

 

[QFred]

In the Grass Life attack you just need to say heads (talking about the last hipotesis), you just need to say heads 'cause heads is always before tails and if you have a case like this you put only heads!

I hope you understand!!

 

[Alistair]

Nice Blank! Also, The card says Resistance -30 when it doesn't have a resistance.

 

[Syousuke]

Nice blank, 8.3/10. It looks a bit disorganized, because of the italic font+the slant effect you have for the space you have to put the text. It doesnt look Pokemon-Ish. but the card, i wont go there.
Or maybe I should.

Its not your card is bad, Its just i dont like it.
I definately like the art, its so pkmn-artist style. 9.6/10 Just a bit messy.
Tho, im not liking Grass Life. People could misread the wording. However even though that would be rare, your wording is still a bit off. Say what QFred said, if one of them is heads, then etc. Try not to say if it heads AND tails, that wouldnt make sense (Somwhow) on a pokemon card. Also im nots aying it doesnt make sense at all and go rethink your life.
Life or Death, it would make sense more efficiently if you compromise on cliche, heads or tails not tails or heads. The flip 2 coins more, you could change it to flip 2 more coins. Its much more g-wise. Its not some child wording the card. And Fury could have variations, I prefer the former.

And thats almost everything. I give the..(out of 10)
Art - 9.6
Blank - 8.3
Grammar - 5.5
Placement - Unknown/Not counted becuase its your blank.
Lining - Unknown/Not counted because its your blank.
Justification - (1/1) unknown/not counted because its your blank.
Card - 7.5
30.9 / 40 (77.25%)


What disorganized scoring huh?